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# PG SLUGLINE
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EXT. SAMUEL’S HOME - ESTABLISHING 1890. Thick snowflakes fall softly outside of a cozy, cottage home. INT. SAMUEL’S HOME - STELLA’S BEDROOM - NIGHT Crackling flames in a fireplace wash the room in a warm, dim
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INT. SAMUEL’S HOME - MAIN LIVING AREA - CONTINUOUS Samuel and Dr. Wells enter the dimly lit room. Dr. Wells sets his bag down. (CONTINUED) CONTINUED:
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EXT. SAMUEL’S HOME - SAME TIME A GROUP of PARENTS, grief-stricken and furious, stand in front of the door. INT. SAMUEL'S HOME - MAIN LIVING AREA - SAME TIME Dr. Wells bows his head; the child’s death had come quicker
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INT. MS. COOPER’S CLASSROOM - DAY (LATE OCTOBER) SEVENTH GRADE STUDENTS sit at rapt attention as MS. COOPER, late 20s/early 30s, a Miss Trunchbull type, paces around the room, her heels clicking rhythmically against the floor. On the wall behind her, the wall clock reads 2:45 PM.
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EXT. SUBURBAN NEIGHBORHOOD - DAY Music blares from Air Pods as Jesse walks home, dancing here and there, kicking at fallen leaves, and readjusting his backpack. He is in his own music video. Amaya’s coming in hot, zipping over the sidewalk on her
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INT. JESSE’S HOUSE - DAY Jesse closes the door and tosses his backpack onto the couch. A picture of Jesse’s dad sits next to an encased folded American flag, along with his date of birth, and date of death, honoring the solider who died defending his country.
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INT. SCHOOL CAFETERIA - DAY STUDENTS get their lunch trays, greet friends, and laugh at jokes at various tables. Jessie, Amaya, and Kevin sit together, laughing at one of Jesse’s jokes.
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EXT. SCHOOL CAFETERIA - SAME TIME INSERT AT ENTRANCE: A black and orange banner: Halloween dance. FRIDAY OCTOBER 31; COME DRESSED AS YOUR FAVORITE GHOST, GHOUL, OR GOBLIN. (CONTINUED)
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INT. MS. COOPER'S CLASSROOM - DAY A symphony of scratching pencils and flipping pages fill the room as STUDENTS work on their essay’s, The sound of Ms. Cooper’s heels echo through the room. The final BELL RINGS and Ms. Cooper stops by her desk,
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EXT. WESTMORE MIDDLE SCHOOL - AFTERNOON Jesse, Amaya with skateboard in hand, Kevin, and Tyrone stand by the front entrance, laughing. Jesse puts his textbooks into his bag as Amaya blows a bubble, popping it.
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EXT./INT. MS. COOPER'S JEEP - SECONDS LATER Lucy carefully peeks around, able to see Ms. Cooper’s side profile via the sideview mirrors. The Cooper’s eyes are closed in frustration. Lucy immediately ducks out of view as she listens in.
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EXT. WESTMORE MIDDLE SCHOOL - MOMENTS LATER Lucy rushes to her friends just as Ms. Cooper slowly drives past. Jesse and Amaya meet Ms. Cooper’s gaze watching them for a moment before she turns out of the parking lot.
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EXT. STREET - DAY Dark clouds hang in the sky foretelling of impending thunderstorms, the sun is no where in sight. Jesse and Amaya catch up to Lucy, who walks behind Kevin and Tyrone, lost in thought.
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INT. LIBRARY - DAY Jesse hurries into the library, slightly out of breath from his speedy bike ride. The librarian, MS. GABRIELLE “GABBY” PICKETT, early 60s, glasses, smart with kind demeanor who speaks with a slight
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INT. ATTIC - JESSE’S HOUSE - DAY Dusty boxes line the attic, filled with forgotten memories of the past. SPECKS OF DUST float weightlessly in the dim attic lighting as Jesse, Amaya, Kevin, Tyrone, and Lucy dig through them
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EXT. LIBRARY PARKING LOT - DAY A steady rain drizzles down, as the last of the day's remaining sunlight peeks through gloomy colored clouds. A sign outside the library reads: SATURDAY STORY TIMES 10:00 AM, 1:00 PM, 5:00 PM.
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INT. LIBRARY - DAY Their table covered with pens, papers, highlighters, notebooks and books (some opened, some closed) the group looks for clues about the Westmore Vampire. Kevin, looking between Tyrone and Jesse, starts arranging his
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EXT. RESEARCH ROOM - MOMENTS LATER Ms. Pickett stops in front of a closed door, she turns the knob and steps in. INT. RESEARCH ROOM - CONTINUOUS The flash of automatic lights greets them all.
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FLASHBACK - EXT. GRAVEYARD - NIGHT (WINTER 1890) A MOB of ANGRY TOWNSPEOPLE carrying torches march past a small graveyard surrounded by wrought iron fencing. The group makes their way toward Samuel, who stands a short distance away at the edge of the woods, grasping a hold of a
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INT. RESEARCH ROOM - DAY Jesse, Lucy, Kevin, and Tyrone all sit around the table, fixated on Amaya as she finishes reading from Samuel’s journal. AMAYA
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INT. MAIN LIBRARY - CONTINUOUS Jesse, Amaya, Kevin, Lucy, and Tyrone run through the library throwing their backpacks on as they follow the younger kids out the door. Ms. Pickett runs past them, heading in the opposite direction
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EXT. LIBRARY - PARKING LOT - EARLY EVENING The gang runs toward the bike rack as the younger kids head toward the mini van. Amaya latches her helmet strap. AMAYA
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INT. MINI VAN - CONTINUOUS Soccer Mom climbs in, her hands gripping the steering wheel tightly. Seething, she starts the engine and drives out of the parking lot. MS. COOPER’S POV
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INT. JESSE’S HOUSE - EARLY EVENING (KITCHEN) Huddling around the kitchen table, Jesse, Amaya, Lucy, Kevin, and Tyrone, converse in low, whispery voices. A digital clock on the microwave reads 5:35 PM. The group looks at one another nervously as Charlie’s
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EXT. A FEW HOUSES DOWN - NIGHT Parked a short distance down the road from Jesse’s house, Ms. Cooper's Jeep sits quietly amongst a line of neighborhood vehicles a predator stalking its prey. BINOCULARS POV
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EXT. JESSE'S HOUSE - PORCH - SAME TIME Jesse, Amaya, Lucy, Kevin, and Tyrone file out onto the porch, laughing. Bringing a finger to her lips, Lucy shushes the guys in between muffled giggles.
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INT. AMAYA’S BEDROOM - NIGHT Warm, earth-toned rugs, lush houseplants, and wooden, artsy chairs matching her bed have been arranged throughout Amaya’s room with her mother’s particular and practical eye for all things Feng Shui.
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INT. AMAYA’S BEDROOM/INT. JESSE’S BEDROOM - FOUR QUADRANT SPLIT SCREEN - NIGHT Sitting at his desk in his dimly lit room, Jesse focuses on the computer screen, focused on his conversation with Amaya and Lucy.
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INT. MS. COOPER’S JEEP - NIGHT Continuing her surveillance on Jesse and Amaya's house’s, Ms. Cooper leans back in the driver's seat, taking a peanut butter and jelly sandwich out from a paper lunch bag. The lights in Jesse's house flick on and off, catching her
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INT. MS HARINGTON’S HOUSE - LIVING ROOM - SAME TIME MS. HENRIETTA HARINGTON, late 60s, glasses too large for her face, hair wound up in foam curlers, peers out from her living room window, eyeing Ms. Cooper in her Jeep. INT. MS. COOPER’S JEEP - SAME TIME
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INT. KEVIN’S HOUSE - BATHROOM - NIGHT Moving quietly with a back pack, he tosses different medical supplies in the bag: a small bottle of sterile water, a box of 4x4s, rolls of sterile gauze wrapping and medical tape. INT. AMAYA’S HOUSE - KITCHEN
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INT. MS. HENRIETTA HARINGTON’S HOUSE - LIVING ROOM - NIGHT Ms. Harington watches Ms. Cooper still sitting in her Jeep, peeking out of a set of partially opened curtains. Grabbing her cell phone out of her house coat she dials 911. 911 OPERATOR (V.O.)
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INT. JESSE'S HOUSE - LIVING ROOM - NIGHT The digital clock reads 7:30 PM. Smiling tenderly at the two most important people at his life, he whispers in his mom’s ear. JESSE
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INT. KEVIN’S BEDROOM - NIGHT Kevin finishes gearing up, glancing at his phone where a location message from Jesse lights up. EXT. TYRONE’S SHED - NIGHT Tyrone puts a Swiss army knife in his pocket as his phone
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EXT. AMAYA’S HOUSE - NIGHT Amaya and Lucy step out, Amaya calling back to her mom inside. AMAYA (calling out)
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EXT. NEIGHBORHOOD - CONTINUOUS Jesse walks slowly, checking his phone. Tyrone and Kevin emerge from different directions, walking toward Jesse. LUCY Guys! Wait up!
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EXT. PARK - NIGHT Gathering around a worn picnic table, Amaya, Lucy, Kevin, and Tyrone watch as Jesse smooth out Samuel’s map. Tyrone shines a flashlight over the map and the group leans in, looking over the partially faded markings, fidgeting with
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EXT. WOODS - NIGHT Streams of light bounce through the darkness as the group navigates their way through twisted trees, occasionally tripping over the uneven terrain. RUSTLING LEAVES and SNAPPING TWIGS ECHO as elongated shadows
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EXT. PARK - NIGHT (CONTINUOUS) With careful, silent steps, Ms. Cooper makes her way toward the poorly hidden items, looking them over. Her gazes focuses on a familiar looking helmet hanging from the handlebars.
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EXT. CLEARING IN THE WOODS - NIGHT (CONTINUOUS) Using his phone as a flashlight, Jesse stands in front of the group looking over the map. AMAYA Are you sure we’re going the right
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EXT. MS. COOPER’S JEEP (PARK PARKING LOT) - NIGHT Ms. Cooper stands behind her Jeep with the trunk open. She rummages through the trunk’s false bottom. Wearing a set of Air Pods, she carries on a phone conversation.
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EXT. WOODS - NIGHT The group walk into an eerie and ominous clearing, spreading out. Tyrone, on high alert, notes the unnatural silence. It is just as his grandfather described.
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INT. SCHOOL HALLWAY - DAY The final BELL RINGS, bringing a close to the school day. Students shuffle through the halls talking and laughing, as locker DOORS CLANG shut. Amaya stands in front of Lucy’s locker, spinning the
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INT. LUCY’S ROOM - DAY Jesse, Amaya, Kevin and Tyrone sit around in Lucy’s room, talking quietly. Lucy’s hair is a bit of a mess, her face pale and flushed with fever; she occasionally trembles from having chilled
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INT. JESSE'S ROOM - NIGHT Jesse lies in bed, tossing and turning. The clock on his nightstand reads 2:47 AM. NIGHTMARE - EXT. WOODS - CLEARING/ORLIN’S GRAVESITE - NIGHT The woods are dark, cold and too quiet. Jesse, Amaya, Kevin
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INT. AMAYA’S BEDROOM - SAME TIME Amaya tosses and turns in her bed, fighting against a building nightmare. As her breathing quickens, the temperature in the room drops slowly, her breath visible as she exhales.
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INT. KEVIN’S ROOM - NIGHT Kevin tosses and turns in his bed, the shared nightmare intensifying, his breath visible as the temperature in his room drops. The clock on his nightstand reads 2:49 AM.
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INT. TYRONE’S BEDROOM - NIGHT (CONTINUOUS) Tyrone tosses and turns, the nightmare near its peak. A light frost appears on the windows. NIGHTMARE - EXT. WOODS - CLEARING/ORLIN’S GRAVESITE - NIGHT Orlin steps even closer, walking over the tar-like substance
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INT. SCHOOL CAFETERIA - DAY The cafeteria is full of its normal lunchtime chaos. Jesse, Amaya, Kevin and Tyrone sit at their normal table, Lucy is noticeably absent, still at home sick. Tyrone looks like he’s had a rough night: dark circles hang
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EXT. LUCY’S HOUSE - LATER Jesse, Kevin, Amaya and Tyrone walk down the sidewalk toward Lucy’s House, Amaya carries her skateboard. Tyrone looks even more drained than earlier. (CONTINUED)
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EXT. PARK - DUSK Jesse, Amaya, and Kevin walk together on a path that cuts through the park. It is near sunset, once again the sky is overcast with gray clouds.
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INT. MS. COOPER'S JEEP - CONTINUOUS Ms. Cooper slams the driver’s door shut and speeds off, tires squealing. ACT V EXT. SAFE HOUSE - LATE AFTERNOON - HALLOWEEN DAY
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INT. SAFE HOUSE - LATE AFTERNOON - HALLOWEEN DAY The inside of the house is cozy, but not what most would consider a normal home, more like a library combined with a military tactical base. (CONTINUED)
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INT. LUCY’S BEDROOM - SAME TIME Lucy’s dad cracks open her bedroom door checking in on her, worried. Lucy, still lays in her bed, her skin paler than before, the rash spreads more as she sweats profusely.
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INT. TYRONE'S BEDROOM - SAME TIME Tyrone lies in bed. His face flushed, his grandpa takes his temperature. He rubs his eyes, the skin around them reddening. A small BITE MARK from Lucy reddens angrily.
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EXT. SAFE HOUSE - MOMENTS LATER Jesse, Amaya, and Kevin climb into the Jeep, Ezra stands on the porch, his eyes fixed on them. Ms. Cooper throws the last pack into the back of the Jeep, her eyes meeting Ezra’s briefly. A silent understanding
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INT. WOODS - ORLIN’S GRAVE SITE - HALLOWEEN NIGHT A full moon shines eerily through the bare trees as a low fog rolls in. Ms. Cooper, Jesse, Amaya, and Kevin walk out from the woods and into the clearing; ready for the fight, determined to
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EXT. WOODS - ORLIN’S GRAVE SITE - SUNRISE The first light of dawn breaks through the trees. Lucy, smiling, looks up into the trees as a bird sings. All that remains of Orlin lays at the feet of Ms. Cooper, Jesse, Amaya, Lucy, Kevin, and Tyrone in a pile of ashes.
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EXT. SCHOOL - DAY The group sees Ms. Cooper putting the last of her boxes into the back of her jeep. JESSE (hesitant)
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INT. WESTMORE MIDDLE SCHOOL - HALLWAY - DAY The BELL RINGS, signaling the end of the school day. Jesse, Amaya, Lucy, Kevin, and Tyrone walk through the hallway together. The hallway slowly empties out as the group takes their time

Vampire's Vendetta

When a group of middle school students uncover a sinister plot involving a resurrected vampire, they must team up with a mysterious teacher who is a descendant of Van Helsing to stop the vampire and save their friends from being turned.

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This script offers a fresh take on the vampire genre by blending it with a coming-of-age story set against the backdrop of a small town mystery. It appeals to a younger demographic while maintaining enough horror elements to attract a broader audience. The unique twist of having the vampire threat connected to the protagonist’s family history adds a layer of emotional depth not often seen in similar films.

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Genres:
Horror 40% Thriller 25% Drama 25% Action 10% Comedy 5%

Setting: Late 19th century (1890) and contemporary times (modern day), Westmore, a small town with a mix of historical and suburban settings

Themes: Generational Trauma and Legacy, Good vs. Evil; Light vs. Darkness, Coming-of-Age and Friendship, Justice and Redemption, The Nature of Belief and Superstition

Conflict & Stakes: The main conflict revolves around the group's battle against Orlin, a vampire threatening their lives and the safety of their town, while also dealing with Lucy's illness and the mysterious actions of Ms. Cooper.

Mood: Tense and suspenseful, with moments of humor and camaraderie.

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The integration of a historical vampire legend with contemporary teenage adventures creates a compelling narrative.
  • Plot Twist: The revelation that Ms. Cooper is a descendant of a vampire hunter adds depth to her character and raises the stakes for the group.
  • Distinctive Setting: The juxtaposition of a small town in the late 19th century with modern-day elements provides a rich backdrop for the story.
  • Innovative Ideas: The use of a supernatural threat intertwined with real-life issues like illness and friendship challenges.
  • Unique Characters: A diverse group of friends with distinct personalities and backgrounds that contribute to the story's dynamics.

Comparable Scripts: The Others, Stand By Me, It, A Series of Unfortunate Events, The Goonies, Coraline, The Haunting of Hill House, The Witch, The Secret Garden

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