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EXT. TEMECULA VALLEY HIGH SCHOOL GRIDIRON - AFTERNOON Whistle BLOWS. Bears PRACTICE. On the line. Football HIKED back to BILLY, 17, All-American "boy next door." The team COLLIDES with one another as cleats DIG IN. SHAWN, 17, RACES down the line, STUMBLES.
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INT. 2001 FORD EXPEDITION Light from a cell phone reveals a shadow in the driver's seat. BILLY Sorry man. EXT. INNER NEIGHBORHOOD PARK
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INT. WILLIAM'S TRUCK Door SHUTS. William pulls the seat belt over himself and CLICKS it. Phone ALERT. William STARTS the truck. Looks at his phone. WILLIAM
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INT. WESLEY'S KITCHEN - MOMENTS LATER Sausage COOKS in a pan and are removed by tongs. Two eggs CRACK into a bowl and a whisk BEATS them. Eggs are poured into the pan and the sausage grease cooks them. Jason wears blue jeans and a form fitting cotton T-shirt. He
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EXT. ELSINORE HIGH SCHOOL - DAY A fierce Tiger painted on the wall. Student mill about. BEN, 17, wide-eyed, reads an issue of "Muscle and Chrome" addressed to his dad: Garret Ponder. Ben turns the page sideways.
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EXT. RICK'S CORNER EQUATION - DAY Last door in a corner strip mall. Prominent sign: CASH ONLY. INT. RICK'S CORNER EQUATION At the bar sits a semi-coherent drunk. MICHELLE HARRIS, 30s, hair tied back, little makeup, wears a power suit of a woman
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INT. WILLIAM AND SUSANNE'S HOUSE - LATER KNOCKS at the front door. Heels CLACK across marble floors. Susanne answers the door. Wesley stands there as Susanne is shocked and relieved. WESLEY
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INT. THE MILLENNIUM ROOM Yellow walls and tan carpet. Garish. Millennium Pop and Rock icons litter the walls. "Oops, I Did It Again," softly PLAYS through the walls. Brightly colored furniture. A twin size bed with red and blue
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INT. ROGER'S ICE CREAM PARLOR Bright lights. Shawn serves an ice cream cone to Wesley. WESLEY You and Billy close? SHAWN
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INT. THE MILLENNIUM ROOM Car door SHUTS. Engine ROARS. Billy rises as headlights flood the window curtains. The chain drags as he rushes the window and POUNDS. BILLY
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INT. THE DINER - LATER The boys sit at a table with a pile of nachos, milk shakes and burgers and fries in front of them. The place is PACKED. BEN Have you made up your mind?
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INT. JASON'S BEDROOM Jason PEELS most of his clothing off as he walks to his bed. He climbs in and CURLS under the covers. Closes his eyes. EXT. TEMECULA VALLEY HIGH SCHOOL GRIDIRON An illuminated field. AUSTIN, 17, longer hair, and a rugged
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EXT. STREET - MORNING Billy's missing posters STAPLES to a post. Michelle PULLS up behind Wesley. MICHELLE Wes!
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EXT. APARTMENT COMPLEX Wesley and Michelle are walking toward the car. 36. WESLEY I don't care what you think -
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INT. RICK'S CORNER EQUATION - EVENING Billiard triangle BREAKS, SCATTERS ROLLING balls. Wesley and Michelle sit at a table comparing notes. MICHELLE You really like this place? It's
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INT. JASON'S BEDROOM KNOCK KNOCK KNOCK. No response. WESLEY (O.S.) I'm...sorry... Jason's window is open and his bed is empty.
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EXT. MARK'S HOUSE Bushes SHAKE as MUMBLES fill the air. A hand over Mark's mouth, Wide-eyed and struggling Mark is easily overpowered. A mouth WHISPERS into his ear.
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INT. MARK'S BEDROOM - LATER Mark's pajamas land in a hamper. He hurries to bed, wrapping himself inside his bedding. MARK Ok!
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INT. THE MILLENNIUM ROOM The manacle DIGS into Billy's ankle as he SCREAMS and Austin pulls the CLANGING chain. Billy BASHES his head against the wall. Austin stops and casts the chain aside.
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INT. VICTOR'S HOUSE The hall outside the Millennium Room. The door to the room BURSTS open and Billy and Austin fall into the hall. A desperate LAUGHTER escapes them both. They stand and head down the hallway. CLANG. Billy stops.
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INT. VICTOR'S FORD EXPEDITION Victor looks at Austin. Austin, weak, doesn't know what he's looking at. 56. Victor puts the car in gear and drives.
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INT. APARTMENT BATHROOM Bruce washes his face, gazes into a reflection that trembles. INT. APARTMENT Wesley, note in hand, Jasmine behind him. WESLEY
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EXT. ROADSIDE - MORNING Jason walks as Wesley pulls up beside him, windows' down. 65. WESLEY Get in!
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INT. WESLEY'S CAR The Car STARTS, PUT IN GEAR. Mark buckles his seat belt. MARK Bye Mommy.
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INT. CLASSROOM Mr. HAHN, mid 40s, French, Indo-Chinese, drop dead professional appearance and a serious demeanor, writes on a white board. In he classroom Jason, Ben and Elizabeth sit in a triangle. MR.HAHN
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INT. HIGH SCHOOL HALL Elizabeth rushes down the hall. Jason runs after her. 71. JASON Hey!
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INT. OUTSIDE MR. HAHN'S CLASS Ben is waiting for Jason as he walks out. The two walk down the hall. BEN So, he said yes?
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INT. CHRIS' HOUSE - LATER A Craftsman with a flair for Victorian decorations. Deep colors and throw rugs. A dedicated space for yoga and medicine balls. VICTOR What motivated you to such a unique
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INT. 24 HOUR DINER - NIGHT Jason and Mark sit opposite draining a thick milk shake with dual straws. The straws stay in their mouth as they talk to one another. JASON
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EXT. 24 HOUR DINER A motorcycle pulls up outside. INT. 24 HOUR DINER Victor leans in, his gaze sharp and calculating. VICTOR
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INT. WESLEY'S HOUSE - LATER Jason's already in the house. Wesley enters JASON What's the big deal? Jason grabs the whiskey and opens it.
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EXT. MARK'S HOUSE Jason KNOCKS on the door. Gloria OPENS it and Jason smiles. JASON Is Mark ready. GLORIA
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INT. FUNERAL PARLOR An enlarged portrait of Bruce prominently displayed next to the closed casket. Wesley sits in the back watching. William enters the parlor and makes his way to the casket. Wesley watches as William makes the sign of the cross.
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EXT. ELSINORE HIGH FOOTBALL FIELD - NIGHT Drums BEAT. Horns BLOW. A tiger does a cartwheel. The stands ROAR to life as the Tigers take the field. A team huddle. TEAM
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EXT. EHS PARKING LOT Ben lopes into the parking lot and looks around. Spots his dad's truck, engine ON, driver's door open, cab empty. As Ben turns the corner Garret is tied up in the truck. BEN
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EXT. VICTOR'S HOUSE Police cars descend on the property. Officers charge the front door. KNOCKS and SLAMS. The front door CAVES in. Police POUR in guns drawn. CLAMMER of an assault.
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INT. HOSPITAL HALL Wesley turns a corner. Footsteps JOG. BEN (O.S.) Wes! 105.
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INT. WESLEY'S INVESTIGATION OFFICE Wesley bursts through the front door drenched. Office is DESTROYED. Books are everywhere. Wesley opens his desk drawer and grabs his fire arm lock box. Opens the lock box, a missing gun. A note: "Bang Bang."
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EXT. WESLEY'S INVESTIGATION OFFICE RAIN falls. Wesley rides into the wet darkness. Lightening Flashes. EXT. MILITARY SCHOOL The bike pulls up. Wesley dismounts and runs up to the door.
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INT. MILITARY SCHOOL CORRIDOR Victor races down the hall. GUNSHOT. MISS. GUNSHOT. HISS. Victor BURSTS out the door, Wesley follows.
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INT. HOSPITAL ROOM - AFTERNOON Jason lays in the bed. Bandages cover his eyes. He's alone. JASON Hello? Gloria walks from around the curtain.
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INT. HOSPITAL HALL Wesley stops as speaks. GLORIA I owe you an apology. WESLEY

The Vanishing Game

When a group of high school students are targeted by a sinister figure from their past, they must confront their own fears and uncover the dark secrets that bind them together in order to survive.

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The unique selling proposition of 'The Vanishing Game' lies in its raw and authentic portrayal of teenage struggles with identity and societal expectations, set against a backdrop of suspense and mystery. The intertwining of personal and external conflicts creates a compelling narrative that resonates with both young adult and adult audiences, making it a relevant piece of storytelling in today's cultural landscape.

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Story Facts
Genres:
Thriller 50% Drama 40% Action 25% Horror 15% Crime 20% Romance 10% Comedy 10%

Setting: Contemporary, Temecula Valley High School and surrounding areas, including parks, homes, and a military school.

Themes: The Nature of Good and Evil, Loss and Grief, Family Bonds and Dynamics, The Search for Identity and Purpose, The Corruption of Power

Conflict & Stakes: The primary conflict revolves around the search for Billy, who is missing and in danger, while Wesley grapples with his role as a father and his own personal struggles. The stakes are high as lives are at risk and relationships are tested.

Mood: A mix of tension, urgency, and emotional depth, with moments of light-heartedness and camaraderie.

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  • Unique Hook: The intertwining of a missing person investigation with the personal struggles of youth, creating a layered narrative.
  • Plot Twist: The revelation of Victor's true intentions and his connection to the characters, heightening the stakes.
  • Distinctive Setting: The contrast between the vibrant high school life and the dark, threatening environments of the Millennium Room and military school.
  • Innovative Ideas: The screenplay blends elements of a coming-of-age story with a thriller, exploring deep emotional themes.
  • Unique Characters: A diverse cast of characters, each with their own struggles and growth arcs, making them relatable and engaging.

Comparable Scripts: The Perks of Being a Wallflower, A Separate Peace, Stand by Me, The Breakfast Club, 13 Reasons Why, The Fault in Our Stars, Prisoners, The Outsiders, Euphoria

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