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# PG SLUGLINE
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FAULT Written by Paul Myerberg & Janet Lloyd Paul Myerberg (864) 541-7777
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INT. AIRPORT - CORRIDOR - DAY THE NOISE OF A PASSENGER JET LANDING. SUPER: 4 YEARS LATER. Spiritually-wounded DENISE, 20s, alloy leg, marches with Cat past airline posters. Both women in Army uniforms, Cat's a Ranger's. In Cat's arms, 4-months-old WILLOW BISHOP, red
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EXT. TOUGH NEIGHBORHOOD - NIGHT Graffiti'd walls, garbage in gutters. In civvies and a leather jacket, Cat loiters at a 3-story walk-up apartment which screams danger. She snaps toward FOOTSTEPS. A banger with a TATTOO ON HIS FACE of a bloody knife, sneers disdain.
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INT. CAT'S APARTMENT - DAY In the doorway of a simple, shaded bedroom, Denise braids her hair as Cat's ravaged face crinkles into a smile over Willow, asleep in her crib. Slowly moving over Willow's head is a nursery mobile of angels and cameo photos of Bob.
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EXT. MEETING HALL BUILDING - NIGHT An empty 3-story, block-deep building. Decaying late-19th Century, used to be vibrant light-industry. "No Trespassing" signs hang crooked. INT. MEETING HALL - NIGHT
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(FLASHBACK) INT. BOB'S CAR - NIGHT 21st-century East Los Angeles passes in the freeway background. In the shotgun seat of a 12-year-old sedan, Cat, no scars, searches on her phone. Bob drives. His army uniform sways neatly on a hook. Amy chimes in from the rear seat.
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(FLASHBACK CONTINUES) INT. BOB'S CAR - MINUTES LATER - NIGHT Cat and Amy watch, windows closed, as Bob passes through a block of HOMELESS tents and SHADY FIGURES in doorways. BOB (to Cat)
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EXT. HALE STREET - NIGHT After Bob passes, Prison Muscles and a THIN GANGBANGER, 20s, hustle a "Road Closed" street barrier back onto the blacktop. Bob slows the car halfway up the low-rise housing. Sewer construction blocks the road. FOUR GANGBANGERS, military-
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EXT. HALE STREET - NIGHT Most of the gang scatters. Covered in blood, Cat skids from the car. Gun limp in her hand, she staggers to Bob, beaten bloody, dead. Cat trembles, strays to Amy who bleeds from the nose and
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INT. MEETING HALL - BACK TO PRESENT - NIGHT Sammy turns to Cat with a tone of encouragement. SAMMY Cat, you want to start? CAT
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INT. MEETING HALL - NIGHT Diego wanders toward Heather at the front entrance. Cat spots blood on the floor near Ryan's head. From outside: the SCREAM OF SIRENS heading away. RYAN
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INT. MEETING HALL - FRONT DOOR - NIGHT Diego picks up a chip of brick from the wall. Heather and Sammy watch Cat and Rosa push against the metal door. It won't budge. DIEGO
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INT. MEETING HALL - COATHOOKS - NIGHT Cat's fingers labor to unlock her knapsack. She betrays a slight tremor as she reaches in past her gun holster for a bottle of water. She clenches her fist, steadies her hand, and takes a good swig. Cat hears Amy's voice in her head:
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INT. FIRST FLOOR - CORRIDOR - NIGHT Sammy leads Cat and Diego toward a red glow. Gallo and Rosa give additional light from their phones. Fallen plaster and textured ceiling panels CRUNCH underfoot. An EXIT sign lights the end of the hall.
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INT. FIRST FLOOR - CORRIDOR OUTSIDE OFFICE 104 - NIGHT Gallo, Diego and Rosa watch Cat try the entrance to 104. It won't budge. CAT Anyone good with locks?
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INT. OFFICE 104 - NIGHT Cat and Diego follow Gallo and Rosa through the doorway. Collapsed shelves and spilled storage boxes block the way past. A roach scurries to cover. DIEGO
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INT. OFFICE 104 - BACK AREA - NIGHT Cat frowns: Amy, bathed in light, shrugs in Cat's direction. AMY Why, sis? Why haven't you visited? Cat closes her eyes, shoves down any chance of tears.
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INT. OFFICE 104 - FRONT SIDE - NIGHT Rosa, Gallo and Diego turn as Cat comes into view at the top of the heap. Cat gets sideways, tumbles out of control, loses the flashlight. Diego and Gallo catch Cat before she hits ground.
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INT. THIRD FLOOR - STAIRWELL AND CORRIDOR - NIGHT Emergency lights glow. Climbing, Ángel makes a fist for Kalie. ÁNGEL ...so I popped him. KALIE
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INT. FIRST FLOOR - CORRIDOR - NIGHT Gallo and Diego lead. Rosa slows Cat with a tug on her jacket. ROSA Ryan was right. You're here 'cause of hate.
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INT. MEETING HALL - NIGHT Shadows flicker against peeling paint. A worried Ángel, Heather and Kalie confront Sammy. Rosa, Gallo, Cat and Diego join the discussion. ÁNGEL
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INT. SECOND FLOOR - HALL - NIGHT An emergency light flickers out. A second barely glows. Shadows writhe under Cat's flashlight and Sammy's cell phone. Imaginary hands reach out. Heather avoids their touch. The three come to a "T" in the corridor.
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INT. SECOND FLOOR - RIGHT CORRIDOR - NIGHT Cat reaches what used to be an exit, now bricked solid. The building shakes and RUMBLES. Cracks appear in the wall. Cat grabs the doorknob to "Room 247" and unlatches the door. The tremors stop.
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INT. ROOM 247 - NIGHT No furniture. A trail of dust sifts unnoticed from a fluorescent light anchor. Sammy, Ángel and Kalie join Cat as she reaches past a broken window glass to the bars outside. CAT
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INT. SECOND FLOOR - RIGHT CORRIDOR - NIGHT Growing worry permeates the group. Cat searches past peeling walls, her light aimed up. Rosa and Diego follow with Sammy and Kalie. Ángel's nostrils flare as he sniffs the air. ÁNGEL
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INT. SECOND FLOOR - LEFT CORRIDOR - NIGHT Kalie lets the ladies' bathroom door BANG closed, turns to Ángel and Cat. KALIE Nope.
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INT. COLLAPSED STAIRWAY - NIGHT Supported by the rope, Cat finds a foothold. She squints from Gallo's and Kalie's lights above. CAT Aim those in front, please, not
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INT. COLLAPSED STAIRWAY - BOTTOM - NIGHT Cat stumbles to her knees, her face at Heather's back. Something scurries in the dark. Several pairs of beady eyes stare back... rats shuffle away. CAT
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INT. SECOND FLOOR - LEFT CORRIDOR - NIGHT Diego, Ángel and Sammy hold the rope taut as Cat reaches from the hole. Gallo helps Cat roll out onto the floor. Rosa pulls her to her feet, holds Cat's hand a beat too long. ROSA
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INT. MEETING HALL - NIGHT In a pile: two small water bottles, a pack of gum, Kalie's first-aid kit, granola bar, duct tape, a two-inch pipe, matches, a rusted hammer, lipstick, dirty dishwashing gloves. Cat dumps the contents of Heather's bag: Kleenex, what appears
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INT. PASSAGEWAY - DAY Old plywood sheets bar entrance to the door behind. Cat works the hammer under a corner and pries. CAT Grab the edge, please.
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INT. MATERIALS STAGING AREA - DAY Layers of dust and spider webs. Nearly empty shelves with faded product numbers, storage bins for wire, massive double doors at the end. In the glow from the dawn sky, Rosa checks out a twisted
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INT. LOADING AREA - DAY The HELICOPTER SOUNDS FADE into soft SOFT ECHOESS. Una rata scurries under a counter. Cat and Rosa spot... An old Buick Skylark. Tires flat. CAT
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INT. BUICK - DAY Cat slides behind the steering wheel, unlocks the passenger door, inserts the key in the ignition. Rosa squats outside the open passenger door. CAT
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INT. WALL WITH LINE OF COAT HOOKS - DAY Gallo hits on Kalie across the room. Cat, on her own mission, grabs a stack of 3x5 photographs from her backpack. Rosa seems unsure where this is going as Cat hands her about half the photos...
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INT. LOADING AREA - DAY Gallo studies the doors to outside, while Cat studies him. GALLO Crowbar, Sawzall, scissor lift... none of which we have. Ramming
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INT. MEN'S BATHROOM - DAY Bricks fill what used to be a window. Light glows through a silent exhaust fan facing a within-the-building flue. Cat unlocks her pack, sighs at the sight of her gun and holster. She pulls out a thin photo wallet, aims her
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INT. LOADING AREA - DAY Cat inflates a flat with the hand pump. Diego removes a wheel on the Buick. Sammy and Ángel clear the debris that almost hit Rosa earlier from the car's path. Outside, the WHOMP, WHOMP, WHOMP of a HELICOPTER tugs
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INT. LOADING AREA - LATER Cat readies to back the Buick away from the exit doors. Sammy at the passenger side. Gallo, Ángel and Diego at the bumper. Kalie behind the steering wheel, hand-cranks the window down. Rosa nods encouragement to Cat, who takes another check of
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EXT. MEETING HALL BUILDING - OUTSIDE LOADING AREA - DAY The lipsticked help sign hangs limp in the rubble. INT. LOADING AREA - DAY Cat grabs the hand pump. CAT
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INT. LIGHT INDUSTRY HALL - DAY The ceiling cracked but intact. Cat studies the stains and imprints on the floor of what used to be manufacturing machines, windows cinder-blocked sealed. Rosa moves closer. ROSA
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INT. MEETING HALL - DAY Cat and Rosa return. In response to Sammy's questioning look, Cat gives a short shake of her head. PHOOP-PHOOP-PHOOP a chopper nears overhead... The SOUND GROWS LOUDER. Kalie stares at the ceiling.
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INT. SECOND FLOOR - LEFT CORRIDOR - DAY A rope wedges tight into a closed office door at knob height. The line stretches across the hall, into the collapsed stairway. The rope vibrates, slides a 1/2 inch to the side. INT. COLLAPSED STAIRWAY - DAY
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INT. HALLWAY - DAY Shadows flitter under the gleam of Cat's phone as she edges forward. Debris CRUNCHES under SOMEONE ELSE'S FOOT. Rosa appears from the dark. ROSA
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INT. STAIRWELL - DAY Ascending the steps, Cat glances over her shoulder, Rosa on her heels. Diego trails. Darkness descends from the landing. From the shadows, steps... Gallo. Eyes shark-like, he closes the distance toward Cat.
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INT. THIRD FLOOR - DAY Diego, Gallo, Rosa, Kalie and Cat reach the top stair. A human-size shadow looms ahead. Cat inches closer. The figure spins: Sammy, his eyes wide. He points deeper into the hall. Cat's light spots a shape crumpled against a
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INT. STAIRWELL - DAY Sammy and Gallo support Ángel as they descend. Cat has the recorder. Rosa and Diego lead the way. Kalie follows. DIEGO Who'd wanna shoot you?
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INT. MEETING HALL - NIGHT Kalie lets Ángel sip on the water bottle. Gallo kicks at the earthquake-buckled floor. Cat skips the recorder to the beginning, hits "Play." SAMMY (ON PLAYBACK, V.O.)
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INT. MEETING HALL - DAY Kalie tends to the feverish Ángel. Sammy rubs his weary eyes. Cat notices the coat hooks. Her bag is unzipped. She reaches in, and pulls out...
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INT. COLLAPSED STAIRWAY - DAY In a sliver of light beaming from a crack in a cinder-blocked window, Gallo gives a last slam into place to a two-by-four wedged to the ceiling, using a fist-size chunk of concrete as a tool.
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INT. MEETING HALL - DAY Cat thunders down the corridor. Gallo waits with Sammy. SAMMY (to Cat) Stop right there.
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INT. THIRD FLOOR - ANTEROOM DOOR - DAY The rear back of the building. A sign: "NO EXIT." Cat shoves on the knob. It won't open. She kicks at the door. Debris showers from the wall above the lintel. Cat forces the door open a few inches.
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INT. WRECKED ANTEROOM - DAY Ruined lumber and wreckage. Cat hears a SCRABBLING SOUND under the rubble. Back to the door, she tosses off a 2x6. MOVEMENT under the pile. Cat shouts toward the hall. CAT
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INT. COLLAPSED STAIRWAY (SECOND FLOOR) - DAY Sunshine pours on Cat -- the sealed window has collapsed open. Cat stares as best she can, at the bottom of the pit, at Heather's body. Diego wanders near; Cat alerts.
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INT. BOB'S CAR - NIGHT (FLASHBACK) An ARMED BANGER -- Diego -- aims a gun at the windshield from the shadows of construction. END FLASHBACK - BACK TO SCENE DIEGO
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INT. COLLAPSED STAIRWAY - BOTTOM - DAY Cat and Rosa bounce off a side wall... THUD. They hit bottom. Rosa tries to move, can't quite make it. Cat pushes to a kneeling position. She blinks away the cobwebs and stares into:
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INT. COLLAPSED STAIRWAY - DAY Cat "rock climbs" the pit wall. As she nears the edge, Diego offers her his hand. Cat pauses... With Diego's assistance, Cat pulls herself to safety. She
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EXT. ROOF - DAY Cat hands off Ángel to the FIRST RESPONDERS, steps onto the roof, and inhales fresh air. Almost as if a rope connected her to inside, her face is pulled to peer down into the hole. Staring down, she shudders.
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EXT. MEETING HALL STREET - DAY Sunshine drenches the sidewalk where Cat walks past cops. SAMMY (O.S.) Hey, stop! Cat tenses, not yet identifying the voice. She turns, sees
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EXT. CEMETERY - DAY Cat holds Willow; Denise, Cat's roommate; and Sammy stand at a gravesite. Etched in the headstone: "Ezekiel 17-5. 'He placed it by great waters, And set it as a willow tree.' Amy, 14 years old."

Fault

In the aftermath of a devastating personal tragedy, a former Army Ranger fights to survive and find redemption when she becomes trapped in a crumbling building with a group of strangers, each harboring their own dark secrets.

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The unique selling proposition of 'Fault' lies in its raw and unflinching portrayal of the psychological scars left by violence and loss. Unlike typical revenge thrillers, this screenplay delves deep into the emotional turmoil of its protagonist, Cat, as she navigates her quest for vengeance while confronting her own demons. The blend of intense action with profound character development makes it compelling for audiences seeking both excitement and emotional depth.

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Genres:
Drama 50% Action 30% Crime 25% Thriller 40% War 10%

Setting: Contemporary, Los Angeles, primarily in urban and dilapidated settings such as hotel rooms, meeting halls, and a cemetery.

Themes: The Nature of Trauma and its Impact, Redemption and Forgiveness, The Cycle of Violence, The Search for Meaning and Purpose, The Power of Connection and Community, Justice and Revenge

Conflict & Stakes: Cat's struggle with her traumatic past and the violent realities surrounding her, with her emotional stability and her child's safety at stake.

Mood: Tense and somber, with moments of dark humor and emotional depth.

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  • Unique Hook: A female protagonist navigating a world of violence and trauma while trying to protect her child.
  • Plot Twist: The revelation of Rosa's past actions and their connection to Cat's sister's death.
  • Distinctive Setting: The juxtaposition of urban decay and personal struggle, highlighting the characters' internal and external conflicts.
  • Innovative Ideas: The screenplay blends elements of psychological thriller with deep emotional drama.
  • Unique Characters: A diverse cast with complex backgrounds and motivations, each contributing to the central themes.

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