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1 INT. AIMEE’S HOUSE. LIVING ROOM - NIGHT 1
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3 EXT. ROAD OUTSIDE OTIS’S HOUSE - MORNING 3
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5 INT. OTIS’S HOUSE. KITCHEN - MORNING 5
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6 EXT. OTIS’S HOUSE - CONTINUOUS 6
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7 EXT. ROAD OUTSIDE NORWOOD SECONDARY - MORNING 7
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8 EXT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. COURTYARD - CONTINUOUS 8
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9 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. ASSEMBLY HALL - DAY 9
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10 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. SIXTH FORM COMMON ROOM - DAY 10
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11 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. CORRIDOR - CONTINUOUS 11
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12 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. CORRIDOR - DAY 12
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13 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. ENGLISH CLASSROOM - DAY 13
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14 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. ENGLISH CLASSROOM - LATER 14
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15 EXT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. DISUSED TOILETS - DAY 15
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16 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. DISUSED TOILETS - CONTINUOUS 16
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17 INT. OTIS’S HOUSE. LIVING ROOM - EARLY EVENING 17
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19 INT. OTIS’S HOUSE. LIVING ROOM - LATER 19
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20 INT. OTIS’S HOUSE. BATHROOM - MOMENTS LATER 20
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23 INT. OTIS’S HOUSE. LIVING ROOM - CONTINUOUS 23
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25 INT. OTIS’S HOUSE. LIVING ROOM - LATER 25
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27 INT. OTIS’S HOUSE. LIVING ROOM - MOMENTS LATER 27
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30 INT. HEALTH CLINIC. RECEPTION - EARLY EVENING 30
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32 INT. ADAM’S HOUSE. HALLWAY OUTSIDE LIVING ROOM - NIGHT 32
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33 INT. ADAM’S HOUSE. ADAM’S BEDROOM - CONTINUOUS 33
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34 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. CORRIDOR - DAY 34
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36 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. SCIENCE CLASSROOM - DAY 36
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37 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. SCIENCE CLASSROOM - LATER 37
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38 EXT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. DISUSED TOILETS - CONTINUOUS 38
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39 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. DISUSED TOILETS - CONTINUOUS 39
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41 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. DISUSED TOILETS - CONTINUOUS 41
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42 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. DISUSED TOILETS - LATER 42
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43 EXT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. COURTYARD - LATER 43
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45 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. CANTEEN - DAY 45
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46 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. CORRIDOR - CONTINUOUS 46
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48 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. STATIONERY CUPBOARD - DAY 48
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51 EXT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. COURTYARD - DAY 51
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52 INT. OTIS’S HOUSE. OTIS’S BEDROOM - NIGHT 52
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53 INT. OTIS’S HOUSE. OTIS’S BEDROOM - THE NEXT MORNING 53
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54 INT. OTIS’S HOUSE. KITCHEN - DAY 54
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55 EXT. NORWOOD SECONDARY - DAY 55
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# PG SLUGLINE
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1 INT. AIMEE’S HOUSE. LIVING ROOM - NIGHT 1
1 INT. AIMEE’S HOUSE. LIVING ROOM - NIGHT 1
1 INT. AIMEE’S HOUSE. LIVING ROOM - NIGHT 1 A MIDDLE-AGED COUPLE watch TV on their pristine, beige sofa. They wear matching house-slippers and laugh every so often at something on the screen. We move up through the ceiling...
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3 EXT. ROAD OUTSIDE OTIS’S HOUSE - MORNING 3
3 EXT. ROAD OUTSIDE OTIS’S HOUSE - MORNING 3
3 EXT. ROAD OUTSIDE OTIS’S HOUSE - MORNING 3 The sun rises over a suburban row of pretty houses. A group of PENSIONERS are on their weekly power-walk. Dogs bark as residents retrieve their mail and leave for work. One house stands out amongst the rest - a large, detached
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5 INT. OTIS’S HOUSE. KITCHEN - MORNING 5
5 INT. OTIS’S HOUSE. KITCHEN - MORNING 5
5 INT. OTIS’S HOUSE. KITCHEN - MORNING 5 The kitchen is chaotic but homely, full of hanging plants and African fertility statues. Otis, dressed for school, puts bread in the toaster and waits. JEAN (50, a statuesque woman who exudes sexuality) enters in a bohemian kaftan. The family
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6 EXT. OTIS’S HOUSE - CONTINUOUS 6
6 EXT. OTIS’S HOUSE - CONTINUOUS 6
6 EXT. OTIS’S HOUSE - CONTINUOUS 6 Otis opens the door to see ERIC (16, an acne-covered motor- mouth with an unruly Afro) in the driveway with his bike. OTIS You’re late.
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7 EXT. ROAD OUTSIDE NORWOOD SECONDARY - MORNING 7
7 EXT. ROAD OUTSIDE NORWOOD SECONDARY - MORNING 7
7 EXT. ROAD OUTSIDE NORWOOD SECONDARY - MORNING 7 Otis and Eric weave their bikes through groups of STUDENTS, heading towards the imposing school building. A beaten-up car full of hip SIXTH FORMERS parks and they pile out. Eric takes his hands off the handlebars, trying to look cool.
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8 EXT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. COURTYARD - CONTINUOUS 8
8 EXT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. COURTYARD - CONTINUOUS 8
8 EXT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. COURTYARD - CONTINUOUS 8 Eric and Otis enter the school gates amongst a sea of STUDENTS. They park their rides. ERIC I’m worried about you dude. Look
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9 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. ASSEMBLY HALL - DAY 9
9 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. ASSEMBLY HALL - DAY 9
9 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. ASSEMBLY HALL - DAY 9 Eric is on stage playing the school anthem on his trumpet. The auditorium sits in deathly silence. Amongst the crowd is Otis, wincing with every bum note. Eric finishes. One person claps, it’s painful. MR GROFF (48,
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10 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. SIXTH FORM COMMON ROOM - DAY 10
10 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. SIXTH FORM COMMON ROOM - DAY 10
10 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. SIXTH FORM COMMON ROOM - DAY 10 MR HENDRICKS (40, Hawaiian shirt, egg in his beard) hands out timetables to a raucous group of SIXTH FORMERS. Otis and Eric are outsiders at the edge of the crowd. MR HENDRICKS
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11 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. CORRIDOR - CONTINUOUS 11
11 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. CORRIDOR - CONTINUOUS 11
11 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. CORRIDOR - CONTINUOUS 11 Eric hurries to class, reading his timetable. Suddenly, he’s SLAMMED up against a wall by Adam (the same guy from the opening scene). He’s terrifying in his size and stupidity. ERIC
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12 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. CORRIDOR - DAY 12
12 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. CORRIDOR - DAY 12
12 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. CORRIDOR - DAY 12 Otis rushes past STUDENTS looking for his classroom. OTIS 3B... 3B... 3B... Otis turns a corner and COLLIDES with Maeve. Her belongings
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13 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. ENGLISH CLASSROOM - DAY 13
13 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. ENGLISH CLASSROOM - DAY 13
13 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. ENGLISH CLASSROOM - DAY 13 Bored students listen to Miss Sands. Otis sits at the back. MISS SANDS This year’s first assignment will be on ‘As You Like It’...
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14 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. ENGLISH CLASSROOM - LATER 14
14 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. ENGLISH CLASSROOM - LATER 14
14 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. ENGLISH CLASSROOM - LATER 14 Students file out of the classroom. Otis works up the guts to tap Adam on the shoulder. ADAM Who are you?
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15 EXT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. DISUSED TOILETS - DAY 15
15 EXT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. DISUSED TOILETS - DAY 15
15 EXT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. DISUSED TOILETS - DAY 15 The bell rings. Otis and Eric are slumped against a wall, watching Adam and HIS MATES goof around across the courtyard. ERIC You told him where you live?!
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16 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. DISUSED TOILETS - CONTINUOUS 16
16 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. DISUSED TOILETS - CONTINUOUS 16
16 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. DISUSED TOILETS - CONTINUOUS 16 Maeve and Aimee stand on a toilet seat and smoke out of the tiny window. They observe Adam outside, he’s humping a wall. AIMEE He can’t come.
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17 INT. OTIS’S HOUSE. LIVING ROOM - EARLY EVENING 17
17 INT. OTIS’S HOUSE. LIVING ROOM - EARLY EVENING 17
17 INT. OTIS’S HOUSE. LIVING ROOM - EARLY EVENING 17 Otis de-sexes his living room. Hiding a copy of the Kama Sutra, a sculpture of breasts and a large penis-like cactus. Otis sits on the sofa. He stares at the clock. It hits six pm and the doorbell RINGS.
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19 INT. OTIS’S HOUSE. LIVING ROOM - LATER 19
19 INT. OTIS’S HOUSE. LIVING ROOM - LATER 19
19 INT. OTIS’S HOUSE. LIVING ROOM - LATER 19 Otis sits at the table surrounded by school work. He watches Adam down a glass of milk and let out a wet burp. ADAM Wanna get monged?
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20 INT. OTIS’S HOUSE. BATHROOM - MOMENTS LATER 20
20 INT. OTIS’S HOUSE. BATHROOM - MOMENTS LATER 20
20 INT. OTIS’S HOUSE. BATHROOM - MOMENTS LATER 20 Adam washes his hands. A framed drawing catches his eye. He leans in closer to inspect - a Japanese pornographic etching of a couple having anal sex. Adam smirks. 21 INT. OTIS’S HOUSE. HALLWAY - CONTINUOUS 21
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23 INT. OTIS’S HOUSE. LIVING ROOM - CONTINUOUS 23
23 INT. OTIS’S HOUSE. LIVING ROOM - CONTINUOUS 23
23 INT. OTIS’S HOUSE. LIVING ROOM - CONTINUOUS 23 Otis stares at the half-smoked joint on the coffee table, suddenly realising that Adam’s been gone a long time. OTIS Adam?
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25 INT. OTIS’S HOUSE. LIVING ROOM - LATER 25
25 INT. OTIS’S HOUSE. LIVING ROOM - LATER 25
25 INT. OTIS’S HOUSE. LIVING ROOM - LATER 25 Otis watches Jean and Adam sharing a joint. He’s in hell. JEAN That’s strong stuff. ADAM
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27 INT. OTIS’S HOUSE. LIVING ROOM - MOMENTS LATER 27
27 INT. OTIS’S HOUSE. LIVING ROOM - MOMENTS LATER 27
27 INT. OTIS’S HOUSE. LIVING ROOM - MOMENTS LATER 27 Otis re-enters, fists clenched, seething with anger. Jean is pouring herself more wine. JEAN
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30 INT. HEALTH CLINIC. RECEPTION - EARLY EVENING 30
30 INT. HEALTH CLINIC. RECEPTION - EARLY EVENING 30
30 INT. HEALTH CLINIC. RECEPTION - EARLY EVENING 30 Maeve sits in a sterile waiting room. She taps her foot, nervous. A TEENAGE GIRL (14) approaches the reception desk with her MOTHER (42). Maeve watches as the mother brushes hair off her daughter’s face, a gesture of pure love.
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32 INT. ADAM’S HOUSE. HALLWAY OUTSIDE LIVING ROOM - NIGHT 32
32 INT. ADAM’S HOUSE. HALLWAY OUTSIDE LIVING ROOM - NIGHT 32
32 INT. ADAM’S HOUSE. HALLWAY OUTSIDE LIVING ROOM - NIGHT 32 Adam enters the house, attempting to creep upstairs. MALE VOICE (O.S.) Adam? Adam pauses outside the living room. Mr Groff is sat at the
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33 INT. ADAM’S HOUSE. ADAM’S BEDROOM - CONTINUOUS 33
33 INT. ADAM’S HOUSE. ADAM’S BEDROOM - CONTINUOUS 33
33 INT. ADAM’S HOUSE. ADAM’S BEDROOM - CONTINUOUS 33 Adam enters the room and sees his window open and Aimee, naked on his bed. He shuts the door in a panic. AIMEE I’ve been waiting for you.
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34 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. CORRIDOR - DAY 34
34 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. CORRIDOR - DAY 34
34 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. CORRIDOR - DAY 34 Otis and Eric peer round a corner. STUDENTS mill around but there’s no sign of Adam. ERIC Coast is clear.
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36 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. SCIENCE CLASSROOM - DAY 36
36 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. SCIENCE CLASSROOM - DAY 36
36 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. SCIENCE CLASSROOM - DAY 36 Otis scans the room for somewhere to sit. Yet again, there is not one friendly face. There is a free seat next to Maeve. Bracing himself, he approaches. Maeve eyeballs him. MAEVE
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37 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. SCIENCE CLASSROOM - LATER 37
37 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. SCIENCE CLASSROOM - LATER 37
37 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. SCIENCE CLASSROOM - LATER 37 Otis and Maeve stare down at a diagram of a cross-section of a vagina. Next to each anatomical part is a blank line. MAEVE Too easy.
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38 EXT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. DISUSED TOILETS - CONTINUOUS 38
38 EXT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. DISUSED TOILETS - CONTINUOUS 38
38 EXT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. DISUSED TOILETS - CONTINUOUS 38 Otis crouches behind the block, trying to control his breathing. The panic slowly subsides. MAEVE (O.S.) Want one?
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39 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. DISUSED TOILETS - CONTINUOUS 39
39 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. DISUSED TOILETS - CONTINUOUS 39
39 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. DISUSED TOILETS - CONTINUOUS 39 Otis and Maeve enter with trepidation. They hear SOBBING. OTIS Hello? MAEVE
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41 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. DISUSED TOILETS - CONTINUOUS 41
41 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. DISUSED TOILETS - CONTINUOUS 41
41 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. DISUSED TOILETS - CONTINUOUS 41 Otis and Maeve step backwards, horrified. Adam tries desperately to pull his trousers up. It’s too painful. ADAM STOP STARING AT ME!
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42 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. DISUSED TOILETS - LATER 42
42 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. DISUSED TOILETS - LATER 42
42 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. DISUSED TOILETS - LATER 42 Adam hasn’t moved. Otis and Maeve are now squashed into the cubicle next door. Otis is very aware of Maeve’s proximity to him as they talk to Adam through the wall. OTIS
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43 EXT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. COURTYARD - LATER 43
43 EXT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. COURTYARD - LATER 43
43 EXT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. COURTYARD - LATER 43 Eric exits school. He sits on a bench and checks his phone. He sees the video of Jean wanking off the courgette. ERIC (under breath)
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45 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. CANTEEN - DAY 45
45 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. CANTEEN - DAY 45
45 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. CANTEEN - DAY 45 Lunchtime. Eric eats alone amongst chatting STUDENTS. Otis arrives, dumping a tray of unappetising food down. OTIS So, everyone’s seen it then?
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46 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. CORRIDOR - CONTINUOUS 46
46 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. CORRIDOR - CONTINUOUS 46
46 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. CORRIDOR - CONTINUOUS 46 Adam is on his way to the canteen. He passes a group of FEMALE STUDENTS. One of them makes a ‘large penis’ hand gesture to the rest of the group. They laugh. Adam looks at the canteen doors, determination in his eyes.
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48 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. STATIONERY CUPBOARD - DAY 48
48 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. STATIONERY CUPBOARD - DAY 48
48 INT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. STATIONERY CUPBOARD - DAY 48 Aimee and Adam shag furiously in the cramped space. This time Adam isn’t faking anything. He gains momentum. ADAM I’m owning my narrative! I’m owning
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51 EXT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. COURTYARD - DAY 51
51 EXT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. COURTYARD - DAY 51
51 EXT. NORWOOD SECONDARY. COURTYARD - DAY 51 From across the courtyard, Maeve watches Jackson. He’s flirting with some FEMALE STUDENTS. This clearly bothers her. Aimee sidles up, her hair messy from the recent sex. She takes out a packet of cigarettes and sighs despondently.
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52 INT. OTIS’S HOUSE. OTIS’S BEDROOM - NIGHT 52
52 INT. OTIS’S HOUSE. OTIS’S BEDROOM - NIGHT 52
52 INT. OTIS’S HOUSE. OTIS’S BEDROOM - NIGHT 52 Otis sits upright in his perfectly-made bed. He is looking at the diagram of the vagina from SRE class. Maeve’s handwriting is all over the worksheet. Otis stares at the tiny flower that she doodled in the corner of the paper.
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53 INT. OTIS’S HOUSE. OTIS’S BEDROOM - THE NEXT MORNING 53
53 INT. OTIS’S HOUSE. OTIS’S BEDROOM - THE NEXT MORNING 53
53 INT. OTIS’S HOUSE. OTIS’S BEDROOM - THE NEXT MORNING 53 Otis lays awake in bed. His alarm clock BEEPS and he switches it off. He opens his bedside drawer, inside are the tissues and hand cream. He looks at his fake wanking kit, unsure. Otis makes a decision, he slams his bedside drawer shut.
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54 INT. OTIS’S HOUSE. KITCHEN - DAY 54
54 INT. OTIS’S HOUSE. KITCHEN - DAY 54
54 INT. OTIS’S HOUSE. KITCHEN - DAY 54 Otis is dressed for school, having breakfast with Jean and Harry. Uncomfortable silence as Harry makes SLURPING noises eating cereal. Jean is reading the newspaper. JEAN
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55 EXT. NORWOOD SECONDARY - DAY 55
55 EXT. NORWOOD SECONDARY - DAY 55
55 EXT. NORWOOD SECONDARY - DAY 55 Otis and Eric park their bikes. Otis’s helmet is on too tight and he’s struggling to get it off. Eric sees Maeve making a beeline for them. ERIC
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Sex Education Pilot

When a socially anxious virgin who can’t masturbate defuses a bully’s Viagra disaster, a sharp-tongued classmate recruits him to run a secret sex-therapy clinic at school, forcing him to juggle clients, humiliation, and the constant threat of exposure.

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Unique Selling Proposition

A frank, non-judgmental, and surprisingly tender exploration of teenage sexuality that treats sex problems as normal, solvable puzzles rather than moral failings or punchlines.

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Score 7.8
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Score 7.5
Average Score: 8.0
Key Takeaways
For the Writer:
To elevate the script, focus on strengthening Otis's character arc by dramatizing his internal stakes and desires earlier, ensuring his commitment to the sex therapy premise feels earned rather than abrupt. Additionally, tighten causal connections between subplots and the protagonist's journey to build sustained narrative pressure, making emotional revelations more organic and less expository, while preserving the script's sharp comedic tone grounded in specific sexual awkwardness.
For Executives:
The script offers high value as a raunchy, character-driven teen comedy with strong comedic set-pieces and a unique voice, appealing to audiences seeking fresh takes on coming-of-age stories, but it carries risks in uneven character development and abrupt premise setup, which could lead to tonal inconsistencies and reduced audience engagement if not addressed, potentially limiting its marketability for a full series in a competitive genre.
Story Facts
Genres:
Drama 60% Comedy 30% Romance 20%

Setting: Contemporary, Norwood Secondary School and suburban homes

Themes: Adolescent Sexuality, Parental Influence, Friendship Dynamics, Social Pressure and Bullying, Identity and Self-Discovery

Conflict & Stakes: The main conflicts revolve around Otis's struggles with his sexual identity, the bullying he faces, and the awkwardness stemming from his mother's profession, with stakes including personal embarrassment and social acceptance.

Mood: Awkwardly humorous with moments of tension and emotional depth.

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The concept of a teenage boy becoming a sex therapist at school, navigating his own sexual issues while helping others.
  • Character Dynamics: The complex relationships between characters, particularly the friendship between Otis and Eric and the romantic tension with Maeve.
  • Humor and Awkwardness: The screenplay effectively blends humor with the awkwardness of teenage experiences, making it relatable and entertaining.

Comparable Scripts: Sex Education (TV Series), The Edge of Seventeen (Movie), Eighth Grade (Movie), Freaks and Geeks (TV Series), To All the Boys I've Loved Before (Movie), The Perks of Being a Wallflower (Book/Movie), Booksmart (Movie), Love, Simon (Movie), Skins (TV Series)

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Overall Score: 7.68
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To improve the script from a creative standpoint, focus on deepening character motivations and backstories to make their emotional journeys more authentic and engaging, while incorporating moments of introspection and refining pacing to enhance narrative flow and audience connection. This will strengthen the overall emotional resonance and ensure that the humor and drama land more effectively.
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The script's pilot episode for 'Sex Education' shines in its humorous and authentic depiction of teenage life, but to elevate its craft, focus on refining uneven pacing in scene transitions to ensure smoother narrative flow and deeper emotional engagement. Additionally, developing secondary character arcs, like those of Aimee and Adam, and balancing the sharp humor with more serious themes will create a richer, more nuanced story that resonates on both comedic and dramatic levels, enhancing overall viewer investment.
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Characters

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The character analysis highlights that while the script effectively captures the awkwardness of teenage sexuality, key improvements lie in deepening character backstories and emotional vulnerabilities to enhance authenticity and engagement. Focusing on clarifying arcs, such as Otis's internal conflicts and Adam's vulnerabilities, will strengthen narrative drive and make the story more relatable, while integrating nuanced dialogue and scene impacts can better reflect character growth and thematic depth.
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From a creative and craft perspective, the script's exploration of Otis's internal and external goals effectively drives character development and thematic depth, but to enhance it, focus on ensuring that the philosophical conflicts, such as societal expectations versus personal authenticity, are more subtly integrated throughout the narrative rather than resolved late in the story. This would create a more balanced arc, making Otis's journey feel less predictable and more emotionally authentic, ultimately strengthening the overall storytelling and audience connection.
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The theme analysis reveals a strong focus on adolescent sexuality, but to elevate the script's craft, consider amplifying the underrepresented theme of identity and self-discovery (10%) by giving characters like Otis and Maeve more introspective moments. This would add emotional depth and balance the narrative, preventing the heavier themes like parental influence from dominating and ensuring a more cohesive exploration of adolescence, while maintaining the humor in friendship dynamics for broader appeal.
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The script's voice excels in blending sharp, witty dialogue with raw explorations of teenage sexuality, but to elevate it further, focus on deepening character arcs beyond the humor to ensure emotional moments land with equal impact. Consider varying the comedic style to prevent repetition in awkward situations, and refine the balance between taboo subjects and introspection to maintain audience engagement without overwhelming the narrative with cringe elements. This will enhance the script's craft by making it more nuanced and resonant, drawing viewers in with both laughs and heartfelt insights.
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The screenplay showcases strong character dynamics and humor but can be elevated by focusing on refining dialogue to add subtext and emotional depth, deepening character motivations and arcs for greater stakes, and smoothing pacing transitions between comedic and serious elements. By addressing these areas, the writer can create a more nuanced, engaging narrative that resonates more deeply with audiences.
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The script's world building is a strong asset, effectively using contrasting settings like suburban homes and school spaces to amplify themes of adolescence and vulnerability, but to enhance it creatively, focus on integrating cultural and societal elements more subtly to avoid over-reliance on shock humor. This would deepen character arcs and make the narrative more nuanced, ensuring that environments naturally drive emotional stakes rather than feeling contrived, ultimately leading to a more compelling and authentic story.
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The script's strength lies in its humorous and awkward tones that create engaging, relatable characters, but to improve its craft, the writer should balance these elements with increased conflict and tension earlier in the story. This would enhance pacing and emotional depth, ensuring that humor supports rather than overshadows the narrative, leading to a more dynamic and impactful character arc.
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