APEX

After a deadly experiment called Project APEX awakens the mountain itself, a grieving park ranger with a family connection to the lab must race through a storm, a mine hive, and a siege of monstrous predators to stop the contagion before it rewrites the wild.

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Overview

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Unique Selling Point

APEX stands out from other horror-thrillers by grounding its supernatural elements in a plausible scientific premise and using the natural setting of the Rocky Mountains as a character in its own right. The screenplay's exploration of the blurred line between man and beast, and humanity's role in disrupting the natural order, gives it a thought-provoking thematic depth that sets it apart from more conventional genre fare.

AI Verdict & Suggestions

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GPT5
 Recommend
Gemini
 Recommend
Grok
 Recommend
DeepSeek
 Consider
Claude
 Recommend
Average Score: 8.0
Key Takeaways
For the Writer:
Focus the next draft on three surgical changes: (1) strip or redistribute large info‑dumps (lab logs, monologues) into discovery-based visuals and short reveal beats so the mystery drives momentum; (2) lock down a single, internally consistent explanation for the infection/Apex (how it spreads, why Clare is special, limits/vulnerabilities) and show it concretely in one or two scenes instead of scattering ambiguous rules; and (3) deepen the Clare–Jack relationship with a couple of early, concrete personal beats (a shared promise, a private joke, or a revealed history) so Jack’s sacrifice and Clare’s final choice carry real emotional weight. These changes will tighten pacing, preserve the script’s strong set pieces, and make the final transformation resonate rather than read as inevitability.
For Executives:
APEX is a high‑concept, female‑led eco‑horror with strong, cinematic set pieces and solid commercial appeal for genre buyers — think Annihilation + The Descent with a Cold War spine. The script is a production candidate but carries measurable risks: heavy expository sections that slow momentum, inconsistent ‘rules’ around the contagion that risk audience confusion, and under‑earned emotional stakes that blunt catharsis. With a focused polish (clarify the infection mechanics, convert logbook dumps into visual discoveries, and reinforce the lead relationship), this can move from promising spec to marketable production material. Note: creature/mine/avalanche set pieces imply mid-to-high VFX/physical effects cost — budget planning should prioritize the handful of marquee sequences.
Story Facts
Genres:
Horror 50% Thriller 40% Science Fiction 30% Action 30% Drama 25% Fantasy 20%

Setting: Present day, Rocky Mountains, primarily in a remote mountain town, forest trails, and a decayed military facility

Themes: Humanity vs. Corrupted Nature, Transformation and Infection, The Perils of Scientific Ambition and Unchecked Hubris, Faith vs. Reason, Familial Legacy and Burden, Resilience and the Will to Survive, Isolation and the Indifference of Nature

Conflict & Stakes: Clare and Jack's struggle against a supernatural predator in the Rocky Mountains, with their lives and the safety of the town at stake, as Clare also battles her own transformation and infection.

Mood: Suspenseful and eerie, with moments of intense horror and emotional depth.

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The transformation of Clare into a hybrid creature, blending human and animal traits, adds a compelling twist to the survival narrative.
  • Plot Twist: The revelation of Clare's father's involvement in dangerous experiments that led to the current crisis.
  • Distinctive Setting: The remote and eerie Rocky Mountains serve as a haunting backdrop, enhancing the story's tension.
  • Innovative Ideas: The integration of ecological themes with horror elements, exploring the consequences of human actions on nature.
  • Genre Blend: Combines elements of horror, thriller, and ecological commentary, appealing to a diverse audience.

Comparable Scripts: The Revenant, Annihilation, Into the Wild, The Descent, The Girl with All the Gifts, The Call of the Wild, The Edge, Pet Sematary, The Thing

Script Level Analysis

Writer Exec

This section delivers a top-level assessment of the screenplay’s strengths and weaknesses — covering overall quality (P/C/R/HR), character development, emotional impact, thematic depth, narrative inconsistencies, and the story’s core philosophical conflict. It helps identify what’s resonating, what needs refinement, and how the script aligns with professional standards.

Screenplay Insights

Breaks down your script along various categories.

Overall Score: 8.58
Key Suggestions:
Your script’s core—Clare’s emotional journey and the eco-horror premise—is strong and cinematic. The fastest, highest-leverage improvement is to pare back expository dialogue and let the story’s visuals, actions, and subtext carry the exposition. Convert information dumps into physical beats, environmental details, and behavior (e.g., flashbacks shown rather than explained, scientific findings implied through artifacts and logs, emotional states revealed by small actions). Also tighten a few transitional scenes and gently deepen two secondary characters with brief, grounded moments so their losses land emotionally.
Story Critique

Big-picture feedback on the story’s clarity, stakes, cohesion, and engagement.

Key Suggestions:
Tighten the script by cutting expository dialogue and letting visuals and action reveal the science and history. Focus rewrites on earning Clare’s transformation: add gradual, sensory beats and small moral choices that show her shifting identity before the climax. Strengthen Jack with a clearer personal stake and active decisions (not just counterpoint), and seed the Alpha/infection origin through environmental clues and character-driven discoveries rather than archival dumps.
Characters

Explores the depth, clarity, and arc of the main and supporting characters.

Key Suggestions:
The screenplay has a compelling high-concept spine (ecological horror + human transformation) and a strong lead in Clare, but the emotional payoff is weakened because Clare’s transformation isn’t properly seeded and supporting characters lack agency. Tighten Clare’s arc: plant earlier, small behavioral and visual beats that foreshadow the infection and connect to her father’s Project Apex; make her choices consistently consequential; and deepen the Clare–Jack relationship so his sacrifice lands. Give Walter and Sandy one meaningful, character-driven moment each before they die so their losses feel earned rather than functional. Use Clare’s asthma and inherited phrases/rituals as recurring motifs to make the arc feel earned and visceral rather than sudden.
Emotional Analysis

Breaks down the emotional journey of the audience across the script.

Key Suggestions:
The script delivers relentless, high-quality horror and striking visuals, but its emotional design needs rebalancing. Right now the second half sustains near-peak fear with too few quieter, connective beats, which blunts the impact of key payoffs (Jack’s sacrifice, Clare’s transformation) and risks audience fatigue. Prioritize adding clear emotional valleys: expand a few existing scenes (notably 11, 20, and 28), move some of Jack’s backstory earlier, and give Clare more internal processing around her father’s Project Apex and her infection. Small, focused scenes of human connection and grief will make the horror land harder and the character arcs feel earned — you don’t need big set pieces to fix this, just better pacing and a few lines/scenes that let us breathe and care.
Goals and Philosophical Conflict

Evaluates character motivations, obstacles, and sources of tension throughout the plot.

Key Suggestions:
The analysis shows the script’s strongest engine is Clare’s transformation (psychological and physical) and the thematic conflict between human identity and primal instinct. To elevate the film from a visceral creature feature into a resonant character drama, tighten and foreground Clare’s emotional throughline: make earlier scenes explicitly set up her debt to/fear of her father, her reasons for staying in the mountains, and the moral choices that will force her to accept or reject the infection. Pace the reveals so the BSL-4 backstory and the personal stakes feed the monster action rather than merely explain it. Make the Alpha confrontation pay off emotionally by ensuring Clare has to choose (and lose something) to become what she becomes — that choice must feel earned, not incidental to spectacle.
Themes

Analysis of the themes of the screenplay and how well they’re expressed.

Key Suggestions:
The script has a powerful central idea — a primal, corrupted nature that literally rewrites humanity — and a compelling protagonist with a personal tie to the catastrophe. To strengthen the screenplay, focus on tightening Clare’s emotional throughline so the audience consistently understands and empathizes with her choices as she moves from investigator to infected apex. Trim redundant chase/trap beats and clarify the origin/exposition (Project Apex) so it supports rather than stalls momentum. Preserve the visceral set-pieces, but use them to develop character and theme (father’s legacy, hubris, faith vs. reason) rather than only escalating spectacle.
Logic & Inconsistencies

Highlights any contradictions, plot holes, or logic gaps that may confuse viewers.

Key Suggestions:
The script has a powerful mythic core and strong set pieces, but a few high-risk logic gaps and some heavy-handed exposition undercut the audience's ability to stay immersed. Prioritize clarifying how the infection originates/spreads and why a military/hazmat response appears suddenly (small, integrated beats rather than new set pieces). At the same time tighten dialogue—turn expository lines into props, visual clues, or brief, lived-in lines from characters. Trim repeated motifs (the mountain-is-alive phrasing) and smooth Clare’s emotional arc so her shift toward the supernatural has gradual, believable beats.

Scene Analysis

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Other Analyses

Writer Exec

This section looks at the extra spark — your story’s voice, style, world, and the moments that really stick. These insights might not change the bones of the script, but they can make it more original, more immersive, and way more memorable. It’s where things get fun, weird, and wonderfully you.

Unique Voice

Assesses the distinctiveness and personality of the writer's voice.

Key Suggestions:
Your voice — spare, sensory, and primally atmospheric — is the screenplay’s biggest asset. Leverage that strength while tightening dramatic focus: clarify Clare’s emotional throughline so the mounting, mythic horror lands as a transformation rather than a series of escalating set-pieces. Trim or consolidate scenes that repeat the same mood beats and use sparse dialogue moments to reveal character stakes and choices more directly. Keep the vivid imagery, but let every eerie tableau push Clare toward a clear, emotionally-earned decision at the climax.
Writer's Craft

Analyzes the writing to help the writer be aware of their skill and improve.

Key Suggestions:
Your script already nails atmosphere, pacing, and visual tension — you're one revision away from a market-ready draft. The single highest-leverage improvement is to strip overt exposition from dialogue and replace it with subtext, behavior, and visual beats. Trust the images and character actions to carry backstory and stakes: cut or condense explanatory lines, let reactions, props, and small gestures reveal inner life, and use ambivalence/silence to heighten fear. Practical next steps: audit the script for scenes that “tell” rather than “show,” apply the provided rewrite exercises (10-line dialogue limit, convert expository scenes to action), and study exemplar screenplays noted in the analysis for tone and restraint.
Memorable Lines
Spotlights standout dialogue lines with emotional or thematic power.
Tropes
Highlights common or genre-specific tropes found in the script.
World Building

Evaluates the depth, consistency, and immersion of the story's world.

Key Suggestions:
The script has a rich, cinematic world and a compelling high-concept hook (biohazard + mountain-as-entity) but sometimes lets spectacle and world-detail outrun the emotional throughline. Tighten and center the story on Clare’s personal arc: make each world-reveal (lab, spores, Alpha, transformations) escalate her stakes and illuminate her inner change. Trim or rework expository set-pieces so revelations arrive through character choice and sensory detail rather than long info dumps—this will make the horror feel earned and the climax resonate emotionally.
Correlations

Identifies patterns in scene scores.

Key Suggestions:
Your screenplay’s core strengths are its sustained tension and visceral set-pieces — these land repeatedly and deliver the emotional highs. The biggest creative opportunity is to distribute the seeds of Clare’s transformation and the Project Apex fallout earlier and more subtly so the late-game character metamorphosis reads inevitable and earned. Plant small, observable character shifts and narrative echoes in earlier scenes (behavioral ticks, moral choices, fragments of Ray’s research in physical props or subtext) and trim overt exposition. This will amplify payoff, deepen emotional resonance, and make the terrifying climaxes feel like the natural end of an arc rather than a late surprise.
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Comparison with Previous Draft

See how your script has evolved from the previous version. This section highlights improvements, regressions, and changes across all major categories, helping you understand what revisions are working and what may need more attention.

Version Comparison Analysis
Summary of Changes
Improvements (3)
  • Emotional Impact - emotionalVariety: 6.8 → 8.0 +1.3
  • Emotional Impact - emotionalAuthenticity: 7.5 → 8.8 +1.3
  • Emotional Impact - resolutionOfEmotionalThemes: 7.3 → 8.5 +1.3
Areas to Review (2)
  • Character Complexity - characterDialogue: 8.3 → 7.0 -1.3
  • Originality - audienceEngagement: 8.8 → 7.5 -1.3