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Scene Map 60
# PG SLUGLINE
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INT OFFICE - AUCKLAND, NEW ZEALAND DAY
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INT DAVID'S CAR DAY
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INT COTTAGE - BEDROOM DAY
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INT WAR OFFICE - LONDON DAY
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EXT WANBOROUGH MANOR - SURREY DAY
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EXT WANBOROUGH MANOR - TRAINING GROUNDS DAY
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INT WANBOROUGH MANOR - CLASSROOM DAY
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EXT WANBOROUGH MANOR - WEAPONS RANGE DAY
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INT WANBOROUGH MANOR - DORMITORY NIGHT
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EXT WANBOROUGH MANOR - TRAINING GROUNDS DAY
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INT WANBOROUGH MANOR - PEMBERTON'S OFFICE DAY
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EXT RINGWAY AIRFIELD - MANCHESTER DAY
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EXT RINGWAY AIRFIELD - TRAINING TOWER DAY
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EXT RINGWAY AIRFIELD - BALLOON PLATFORM DAY
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INT BARRACKS NIGHT
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INT TRAINING CAMP - RADIO ROOM NIGHT
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INT TRAINING CAMP - CLASSROOM DAY
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EXT HIGHLANDS - FOREST NIGHT
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EXT TRAINING CAMP - FIRING RANGE DAY
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EXT TRAINING CAMP - GROUNDS DAY
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INT MANOR HOUSE - BRIEFING ROOM DAY
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INT MANOR HOUSE - EQUIPMENT ROOM DAY
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EXT AIRFIELD NIGHT
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EXT FRENCH COUNTRYSIDE NIGHT
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INT MOREAU FARMHOUSE NIGHT
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EXT CHERBOURG DAY
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INT CAFÉ MARTIN - PHYLLIS'S ROOM DAY
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INT DUBOIS PARFUMERIE DAY
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INT CAFÉ MARTIN - PHYLLIS'S ROOM NIGHT
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EXT COUNTRYSIDE NIGHT
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INT COTTAGE - BEDROOM DAY
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EXT RIVER ROAD NIGHT
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INT CAFÉ MARTIN - PHYLLIS'S ROOM NIGHT
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INT DUBOIS PARFUMERIE DAY
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INT CHURCH NIGHT
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INT SIMONE'S APARTMENT NIGHT
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EXT COUNTRYSIDE DAY
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INT DURAND FARMHOUSE DAY
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EXT DURAND FARM MORNING
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INT BARN NIGHT
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EXT MOREAU FARMHOUSE NIGHT
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EXT VILLAGE MARKET - DAY - THREE DAYS LATER
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INT DURAND FARMHOUSE DAY
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EXT TRAIN STATION - CHERBOURG DAY
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INT TRAIN DAY
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EXT RENNES STATION EVENING
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INT LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT EVENING
48 89
INT LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT MORNING
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INT LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT AFTERNOON
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EXT ABANDONED WAREHOUSE NIGHT
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EXT ALLEY NIGHT
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INT BAKERY - BACK ROOM DAY
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INT CHURCH - CONFESSIONAL DAY
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EXT STREET DAY
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INT LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT NIGHT
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EXT POST OFFICE MORNING
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INT MILK HOUSE CONTINUOUS
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INT LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT DAY
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INT ABANDONED FACTORY NIGHT
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INT COTTAGE - BEDROOM DAY
Scene Map
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# PG SLUGLINE
1 1
INT OFFICE - AUCKLAND, NEW ZEALAND DAY
INT. OFFICE - AUCKLAND, NEW ZEALAND - DAY (2016)
THE SPARROW OF NORMANDY Written by Giacomo Giammatteo Based on the true story of Phyllis Latour Giacomo Giammatteo
2 3
INT DAVID'S CAR DAY
INT. DAVID'S CAR - DAY
INT. DAVID'S CAR - DAY David drives through rolling countryside, the printed documents on the passenger seat. He glances at them repeatedly, shaking his head in disbelief. EXT. COTTAGE - ZEALAND, NEW ZEALAND - DAY
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INT COTTAGE - BEDROOM DAY
INT. COTTAGE - BEDROOM - DAY
INT. COTTAGE - BEDROOM - DAY David helps his mother into bed. She settles against the pillows, and he pulls a chair close. He sets his phone on the nightstand and turns the recorder on. DAVID
4 8
INT WAR OFFICE - LONDON DAY
INT. WAR OFFICE - LONDON - DAY (1942)
INT. WAR OFFICE - LONDON - DAY (1942) Long corridors stretch through the stark government building, and women in military uniforms hurry past with files and papers. PHYLLIS (19) sits in a hard wooden chair outside an office.
5 11
EXT WANBOROUGH MANOR - SURREY DAY
EXT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - SURREY - DAY
EXT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - SURREY - DAY A grand Tudor manor house sits at the end of a long gravel drive. Ancient oaks surround the property, and the grounds stretch into rolling parkland. Several military vehicles are parked near the entrance.
6 14
EXT WANBOROUGH MANOR - TRAINING GROUNDS DAY
EXT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - TRAINING GROUNDS - DAY
EXT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - TRAINING GROUNDS - DAY Dawn breaks over the estate as Phyllis and fifteen other trainees — men and women — stand in formation wearing physical training gear. Their breath forms clouds of mist in the cold morning air.
7 15
INT WANBOROUGH MANOR - CLASSROOM DAY
INT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - CLASSROOM - DAY
INT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - CLASSROOM - DAY Phyllis sits at a desk covered with maps, charts, and reconnaissance photographs. Her feet are blistered from the morning run, and she flexes them carefully. INSTRUCTOR PEMBERTON (40s), precise and professorial, stands
8 16
EXT WANBOROUGH MANOR - WEAPONS RANGE DAY
EXT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - WEAPONS RANGE - DAY
EXT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - WEAPONS RANGE - DAY The crack of gunfire echoes across the grounds. Trainees line up at firing positions, each with a pistol. SGT. MACKENZIE (50s), a Scotsman with a weathered face, walks behind them.
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INT WANBOROUGH MANOR - DORMITORY NIGHT
INT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - DORMITORY - NIGHT
INT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - DORMITORY - NIGHT The women lie in their beds, exhausted. Moonlight streams through the windows. Yvonne is already asleep, snoring softly. Phyllis examines her blistered hands in the dim light.
10 19
EXT WANBOROUGH MANOR - TRAINING GROUNDS DAY
EXT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - TRAINING GROUNDS - DAY
EXT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - TRAINING GROUNDS - DAY Rain pours down. Phyllis and five other trainees crawl through mud under barbed wire. Live ammunition cracks overhead — not close, but close enough to be terrifying. Phyllis's face is covered in mud, her uniform soaked through.
11 21
INT WANBOROUGH MANOR - PEMBERTON'S OFFICE DAY
INT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - PEMBERTON'S OFFICE - DAY
INT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - PEMBERTON'S OFFICE - DAY Phyllis sits across from Pemberton, who reviews a file. Her uniform is clean now, pressed. Three weeks have passed, and she looks harder, more confident. PEMBERTON
12 23
EXT RINGWAY AIRFIELD - MANCHESTER DAY
EXT. RINGWAY AIRFIELD - MANCHESTER - DAY
EXT. RINGWAY AIRFIELD - MANCHESTER - DAY Gray skies hang over a military airfield. Phyllis steps off a transport truck with Jackie, Yvonne, and six male trainees. Wind whips across the tarmac, and in the distance, a training aircraft circles for landing.
13 24
EXT RINGWAY AIRFIELD - TRAINING TOWER DAY
EXT. RINGWAY AIRFIELD - TRAINING TOWER - DAY
EXT. RINGWAY AIRFIELD - TRAINING TOWER - DAY A forty-foot tower looms against the sky. Phyllis stands at the top, wearing a harness attached to a cable system. The ground looks impossibly far below.
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EXT RINGWAY AIRFIELD - BALLOON PLATFORM DAY
EXT. RINGWAY AIRFIELD - BALLOON PLATFORM - DAY
EXT. RINGWAY AIRFIELD - BALLOON PLATFORM - DAY A massive observation balloon floats eight hundred feet above the ground, tethered by cables. A wicker basket hangs beneath it, large enough for six people. Phyllis stands in the basket with Davies and Richard, both
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INT BARRACKS NIGHT
INT. BARRACKS - NIGHT
INT. BARRACKS - NIGHT Phyllis lies in her bunk, staring at the ceiling. Her body aches from the landing, and she can still feel the sensation of falling. Yvonne, in the next bunk, speaks quietly into the darkness.
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INT TRAINING CAMP - RADIO ROOM NIGHT
INT. TRAINING CAMP - RADIO ROOM - NIGHT
INT. TRAINING CAMP - RADIO ROOM - NIGHT Phyllis sits in front of a radio transmitter, wearing headphones. Her fingers tap out Morse code on the key, fast and precise. An INSTRUCTOR watches over her shoulder with a stopwatch.
17 30
INT TRAINING CAMP - CLASSROOM DAY
INT. TRAINING CAMP - CLASSROOM - DAY
INT. TRAINING CAMP - CLASSROOM - DAY Phyllis sits alone at a desk, surrounded by blank paper and pencils. MAJOR PALMER (50s), severe and unsmiling, places a sealed envelope in front of her. PALMER
18 31
EXT HIGHLANDS - FOREST NIGHT
EXT. HIGHLANDS - FOREST - NIGHT
EXT. HIGHLANDS - FOREST - NIGHT Rain falls through darkness. Phyllis moves through thick undergrowth, trying to stay quiet. She's alone, separated from her group during a navigation exercise, and completely lost.
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EXT TRAINING CAMP - FIRING RANGE DAY
EXT. TRAINING CAMP - FIRING RANGE - DAY
EXT. TRAINING CAMP - FIRING RANGE - DAY Phyllis lies prone on the ground, a rifle tucked against her shoulder. Targets are set up at various distances, some partially obscured by terrain. Sgt. Mackenzie crouches beside her, watching through
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EXT TRAINING CAMP - GROUNDS DAY
EXT. TRAINING CAMP - GROUNDS - DAY
EXT. TRAINING CAMP - GROUNDS - DAY Phyllis walks alone through the grounds, the dossier clutched in her hands. Her breath catches as she glances down, seeing the thick stack of pages that bind her fate. Jackie finds her sitting on a bench overlooking the valley.
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INT MANOR HOUSE - BRIEFING ROOM DAY
INT. MANOR HOUSE - BRIEFING ROOM - DAY
INT. MANOR HOUSE - BRIEFING ROOM - DAY Phyllis sits at a long table covered with maps, photographs, and documents. A middle-aged woman, MME. ROUSSEAU (50s), sits across from her speaking rapid French. MME. ROUSSEAU
22 42
INT MANOR HOUSE - EQUIPMENT ROOM DAY
INT. MANOR HOUSE - EQUIPMENT ROOM - DAY
INT. MANOR HOUSE - EQUIPMENT ROOM - DAY A QUARTERMASTER (60s) spreads items across a table: a worn suitcase, French cosmetics, clothing with French labels, a small pistol, and other items. Phyllis examines each piece carefully. The Quartermaster
23 43
EXT AIRFIELD NIGHT
EXT. AIRFIELD - NIGHT
EXT. AIRFIELD - NIGHT A full moon illuminates the runway where a Halifax bomber waits, its engines idling. A ground crew loads equipment and check the systems. Phyllis stands with Jackie and Yvonne near the aircraft. All
24 45
EXT FRENCH COUNTRYSIDE NIGHT
EXT. FRENCH COUNTRYSIDE - NIGHT
EXT. FRENCH COUNTRYSIDE - NIGHT Phyllis falls through darkness, the parachute snapping open above her. Fear grips her as the ground rushes up faster than she expects. She hits hard, rolling as trained, but the impact drives the air from her lungs.
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INT MOREAU FARMHOUSE NIGHT
INT. MOREAU FARMHOUSE - NIGHT
INT. MOREAU FARMHOUSE - NIGHT The house is dark and cold. Henri lights a single candle. The main room is simple — a table, chairs, a stove, religious pictures on the walls.
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EXT CHERBOURG DAY
EXT. CHERBOURG - DAY
EXT. CHERBOURG - DAY The morning sun breaks through clouds over the port city. German soldiers are everywhere — on street corners, checking papers, and usually patrolling in pairs. A German truck filled with soldiers rumbles past as two
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INT CAFÉ MARTIN - PHYLLIS'S ROOM DAY
INT. CAFÉ MARTIN - PHYLLIS'S ROOM - DAY
INT. CAFÉ MARTIN - PHYLLIS'S ROOM - DAY One small window overlooks the alley behind the shop. A small bed, a chair, and a basin for washing almost fill the tiny room. Phyllis's suitcase sits on the floor. She opens the case and carefully removes the radio,
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INT DUBOIS PARFUMERIE DAY
INT. DUBOIS PARFUMERIE - DAY
INT. DUBOIS PARFUMERIE - DAY The shop is small but elegant and it’s filled with bottles, powders, and creams. The scent of lavender and rose fills the air. Several customers browse the shelves. Phyllis stands behind the counter with Madame Dubois,
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INT CAFÉ MARTIN - PHYLLIS'S ROOM NIGHT
INT. CAFÉ MARTIN - PHYLLIS'S ROOM - NIGHT
INT. CAFÉ MARTIN - PHYLLIS'S ROOM - NIGHT Phyllis lies on the bed, staring at the ceiling and listening to German voices drift up from the café below — soldiers laughing, drinking, and playing cards. Henri knocks softly on the door, and enters carrying a
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EXT COUNTRYSIDE NIGHT
EXT. COUNTRYSIDE - NIGHT
EXT. COUNTRYSIDE - NIGHT Phyllis rides a battered bicycle along a dark road. A large wicker basket is strapped to the front, filled with loose hay and farm tools. The handle of her suitcase is barely visible, buried deep beneath the hay.
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INT COTTAGE - BEDROOM DAY
INT. COTTAGE - BEDROOM - DAY (2016)
INT. COTTAGE - BEDROOM - DAY (2016) David stares at his mother, nodding as she speaks. DAVID They almost caught you. Right then. PHYLLIS
32 58
EXT RIVER ROAD NIGHT
EXT. RIVER ROAD - NIGHT
EXT. RIVER ROAD - NIGHT Pascal and Phyllis move quickly along a narrow path beside a river. The water reflects starlight. Trees overhang the path, providing cover. Pascal carries his rifle casually but his eyes constantly
33 59
INT CAFÉ MARTIN - PHYLLIS'S ROOM NIGHT
INT. CAFÉ MARTIN - PHYLLIS'S ROOM - NIGHT
INT. CAFÉ MARTIN - PHYLLIS'S ROOM - NIGHT Phyllis lies on her bed fully clothed, too tense to sleep. The suitcase sits beside her, innocent-looking but deadly if discovered.
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INT DUBOIS PARFUMERIE DAY
INT. DUBOIS PARFUMERIE - DAY
INT. DUBOIS PARFUMERIE - DAY Morning light filters through the shop windows. Phyllis arranges bottles on shelves while Madame Dubois works at the counter with ledgers. The door opens and a young woman enters — SIMONE (22), pretty
35 64
INT CHURCH NIGHT
INT. CHURCH - NIGHT
INT. CHURCH - NIGHT The church is dark except for candles burning at the altar. Phyllis enters through a side door and waits. Shadows move in the pews. As she approaches, she counts six people: Henri, Pascal, Simone, and three others she doesn't
36 66
INT SIMONE'S APARTMENT NIGHT
INT. SIMONE'S APARTMENT - NIGHT
INT. SIMONE'S APARTMENT - NIGHT The apartment is tiny — one room with a bed, a table, a hot plate for cooking. Photographs of a man in French army uniform sit on a shelf. SIMONE
37 67
EXT COUNTRYSIDE DAY
EXT. COUNTRYSIDE - DAY
EXT. COUNTRYSIDE - DAY Henri drives a battered farm truck along a rutted road. Phyllis sits beside him, her suitcase at her feet. They pass German checkpoints but Henri knows the routes the patrols use and avoids them.
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INT DURAND FARMHOUSE DAY
INT. DURAND FARMHOUSE - DAY
INT. DURAND FARMHOUSE - DAY The kitchen is warm and clean. A fire burns in the large hearth. Juliette sets bread and cheese on the table. JULIETTE Sit. Eat.
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EXT DURAND FARM MORNING
EXT. DURAND FARM - MORNING
EXT. DURAND FARM - MORNING Dawn breaks over the fields. Phyllis stands in the yard with Juliette, learning to scatter grain for the chickens. The birds rush forward, pecking and fighting over food. JULIETTE
40 73
INT BARN NIGHT
INT. BARN - NIGHT
INT. BARN - NIGHT Phyllis sits in the loft with her radio assembled. An oil lamp provides dim light. Henri stands nearby with several handwritten pages. HENRI
41 77
EXT MOREAU FARMHOUSE NIGHT
EXT. MOREAU FARMHOUSE - NIGHT
EXT. MOREAU FARMHOUSE - NIGHT The farmhouse is dark. Two German trucks pull up silently, no headlights. A dozen soldiers and two GESTAPO OFFICERS get out and surround the house. The LEAD GESTAPO OFFICER nods, then two soldiers kick in the
42 80
EXT VILLAGE MARKET - DAY - THREE DAYS LATER
EXT. VILLAGE MARKET - DAY - THREE DAYS LATER
EXT. VILLAGE MARKET - DAY - THREE DAYS LATER Phyllis stands at a vegetable stall, examining a bruised cabbage. She carries a woven string bag—no suitcase, no cosmetics. She looks like a housewife. Pascal appears beside her, picking up a potato. He doesn't
43 81
INT DURAND FARMHOUSE DAY
INT. DURAND FARMHOUSE - DAY
INT. DURAND FARMHOUSE - DAY Phyllis sits at the kitchen table with Juliette and Robert. The package lies open between them — identity papers for someone named Catherine Blanc, train tickets, and a small amount of money.
44 83
EXT TRAIN STATION - CHERBOURG DAY
EXT. TRAIN STATION - CHERBOURG - DAY
EXT. TRAIN STATION - CHERBOURG - DAY The station is crowded with civilians and German soldiers. Phyllis joins a queue for the ticket window, her suitcase heavy in her hand. Gestapo officers check papers at the platform entrance. She
45 85
INT TRAIN DAY
INT. TRAIN - DAY
INT. TRAIN - DAY The train rattles through the countryside. Phyllis sits opposite the GERMAN CORPORAL. She is knitting a grey sock, her needles clicking a steady, hypnotic rhythm. Click-clack. Click-clack.
46 86
EXT RENNES STATION EVENING
EXT. RENNES STATION - EVENING
EXT. RENNES STATION - EVENING The train pulls into a larger station. Phyllis steps onto the platform carrying her suitcase. The station is busy with travelers and German military personnel. She checks the address Pascal gave her — 17 rue du Puits. She
47 87
INT LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT EVENING
INT. LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT - EVENING
INT. LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT - EVENING The apartment above the bakery is small and cluttered. Lucienne closes all the curtains before turning on a lamp. LUCIENNE They arrested Henri three days ago.
48 89
INT LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT MORNING
INT. LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT - MORNING
INT. LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT - MORNING Phyllis wakes up on a narrow couch, disoriented. Sunlight streams through gaps in the curtains, and the smell of bread baking drifts up from the shop below. Lucienne enters carrying two cups of coffee.
49 91
INT LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT AFTERNOON
INT. LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT - AFTERNOON
INT. LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT - AFTERNOON Six people crowd into the small apartment. Phyllis recognizes the type — ordinary French citizens who've chosen to resist. ANDRÉ (50), a postal worker, sits near the window watching the street. MARGUERITE (28), a nurse, perches on the arm of a
50 93
EXT ABANDONED WAREHOUSE NIGHT
EXT. ABANDONED WAREHOUSE - NIGHT
EXT. ABANDONED WAREHOUSE - NIGHT The warehouse sits on the edge of the city near the river. Windows are broken, and weeds grow through cracks in the pavement. It looks completely abandoned. Phyllis and Lucienne approach from different directions,
51 95
EXT ALLEY NIGHT
EXT. ALLEY - NIGHT
EXT. ALLEY - NIGHT They emerge into a narrow alley between buildings. Behind them, German voices shout orders. Boots pound into the warehouse. Lucienne pulls Phyllis left, away from the voices. They run
52 96
INT BAKERY - BACK ROOM DAY
INT. BAKERY - BACK ROOM - DAY
INT. BAKERY - BACK ROOM - DAY Phyllis sits at a small table encoding a message. The room is cramped, filled with sacks of flour and baking supplies. Marguerite enters through the back door, her nurse's uniform spotted with blood.
53 98
INT CHURCH - CONFESSIONAL DAY
INT. CHURCH - CONFESSIONAL - DAY
INT. CHURCH - CONFESSIONAL - DAY Phyllis sits in the confessional booth. Through the screen, she can see the vague outline of André on the other side. ANDRÉ Bless me, Father, for I have
54 100
EXT STREET DAY
EXT. STREET - DAY
EXT. STREET - DAY Phyllis walks through the city, hyper-aware of everyone. PHYLLIS (to herself) Is that man following me? Is that
55 102
INT LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT NIGHT
INT. LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT - NIGHT
INT. LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT - NIGHT Phyllis paces the small room while Lucienne and André listen to her account of the meeting with Becker. PHYLLIS He knows. Maybe not everything, but
56 104
EXT POST OFFICE MORNING
EXT. POST OFFICE - MORNING
EXT. POST OFFICE - MORNING The morning sun creeps over the city as André loads mail sacks into his truck. Phyllis watches from across the street. Two German soldiers stand at the corner smoking cigarettes. One yawns. The other checks his watch.
57 107
INT MILK HOUSE CONTINUOUS
INT. MILK HOUSE - CONTINUOUS
INT. MILK HOUSE - CONTINUOUS As the German soldier moves closer, the flashlight beam inches across the wall toward Phyllis's hiding place. A voice calls from outside. GERMAN VOICE
58 109
INT LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT DAY
INT. LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT - DAY
INT. LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT - DAY Phyllis bursts through the door. Lucienne sits at the table with Marguerite and François. They're listening to a small radio, volume low. LUCIENNE
59 111
INT ABANDONED FACTORY NIGHT
INT. ABANDONED FACTORY - NIGHT
INT. ABANDONED FACTORY - NIGHT Phyllis transmits from a different location each night. Tonight it's an abandoned factory on the edge of town. Her fingers fly across the keys, sending intelligence back to
60 114
INT COTTAGE - BEDROOM DAY
INT. COTTAGE - BEDROOM - DAY (2016)
INT. COTTAGE - BEDROOM - DAY (2016) Phyllis lies in bed, David still sitting beside her. His phone continues recording. DAVID How long did you keep transmitting?

The Sparrow of Normandy

When a New Zealand son uncovers declassified files revealing his mother was an SOE radio operator in WWII, he persuades her to tell the truth — and through her memories, we follow a small, unremarkable 'Sparrow' who risked everything to help bring down the Axis on D-Day.

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Overview

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Unique Selling Point

This script offers a fresh perspective on WWII espionage by focusing on a female agent's story through the lens of her son's discovery decades later. Unlike typical war films that emphasize action and combat, it explores the psychological burden of secrecy, the invisible heroism of women in wartime, and the intergenerational impact of unspoken trauma. The unique framing device (son uncovering his mother's past) creates immediate emotional engagement for modern audiences while honoring historical authenticity.

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 Consider
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Average Score: 8.1
Key Takeaways
For the Writer:
To improve the script from a creative and craft perspective, focus on refining the pacing in the mid-act training sequences by condensing repetitive procedural elements into more dynamic montages, allowing for better narrative flow and heightened emotional engagement. Additionally, deepen the development of supporting characters and the antagonist by adding specific backstories and emotional arcs, ensuring that their fates resonate more profoundly. These adjustments will enhance the script's tension and character depth, making the story more compelling and cinematic while preserving its authentic historical foundation.
For Executives:
The script offers solid value as a character-driven WWII drama with a strong female lead and emotional family framing, potentially appealing to audiences seeking intimate historical stories akin to 'The Imitation Game' or 'Atonement'. However, risks include uneven pacing that could bore viewers during lengthy training segments and underdeveloped secondary characters that dilute emotional investment, potentially limiting commercial appeal. Market perception may view it as a niche period piece with award potential if polished, but it risks being overlooked in a competitive genre without addressing these flaws, as the core concept is strong but execution needs tightening for broader appeal.
Story Facts
Genres:
War 75% Drama 40% Thriller 50% Action 25%

Setting: World War II (1940s) and 2016, Occupied France and Auckland, New Zealand

Themes: Hidden Strength and Unacknowledged Courage, Inheritance of Bravery and Resilience, Struggle for Self-Worth and Proving Oneself, The Weight of Secrets and the Burden of the Past, Sacrifice and the Greater Good, Memory and Preservation of History

Conflict & Stakes: Phyllis's struggle to survive as a spy in occupied France while keeping her identity secret, with the stakes being her life and the success of the resistance efforts.

Mood: Tense and reflective, with moments of emotional vulnerability.

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The story of a female spy during World War II, focusing on her personal sacrifices and the impact of her actions on her family.
  • Major Twist: The revelation of Phyllis's hidden past and her emotional journey as she confronts her wartime experiences with her son.
  • Distinctive Setting: The contrast between the tense atmosphere of occupied France and the reflective moments in modern-day New Zealand.
  • Innovative Ideas: The use of flashbacks to intertwine past and present, highlighting the long-lasting effects of war on personal identity.
  • Unique Characters: A diverse cast of characters, each with their own motivations and backgrounds, contributing to the richness of the narrative.

Comparable Scripts: The Imitation Game, Atonement, The Nightingale, The Book Thief, The Spy Who Came in from the Cold, The English Patient, The Alice Network, The Secret Life of Walter Mitty, The Guernsey Literary and Potato Peel Pie Society

Script Level Analysis

Writer Exec

This section delivers a top-level assessment of the screenplay’s strengths and weaknesses — covering overall quality (P/C/R/HR), character development, emotional impact, thematic depth, narrative inconsistencies, and the story’s core philosophical conflict. It helps identify what’s resonating, what needs refinement, and how the script aligns with professional standards.

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Overall Score: 8.01
Key Suggestions:
To improve the script from a creative and craft perspective, focus on deepening the development of supporting characters and antagonists by adding personal backstories and motivations, which will enhance emotional engagement and narrative richness. Additionally, tighten pacing in extended training sequences and high-tension scenes to maintain momentum and prevent audience disengagement, ensuring that every moment serves character growth or plot advancement.
Story Critique

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Key Suggestions:
The script's core strength lies in its emotional depth and historical accuracy, but to enhance it creatively, focus on smoothing out uneven pacing by reducing exposition and tightening scene transitions, while deepening the exploration of Phyllis's psychological and familial impacts from her wartime experiences. Incorporating more dynamic conflicts within the resistance network and using visual storytelling, like subtle flashbacks, can heighten tension and make the narrative more engaging and immersive from a craft perspective.
Characters

Explores the depth, clarity, and arc of the main and supporting characters.

Key Suggestions:
The character analysis reveals strong foundations for the protagonists, particularly Phyllis, with high scores in resilience and growth, but opportunities exist to deepen emotional layers and backstories across all characters. To enhance the script's craft, focus on amplifying internal conflicts, such as Phyllis's relationship with her mother and her fear of inadequacy, and integrate more nuanced dialogue and vulnerability in supporting characters like Jackie and Lucienne. This will create richer arcs, heighten emotional stakes, and make the story more engaging and relatable, ensuring the audience connects deeply with the themes of courage and sacrifice.
Emotional Analysis

Breaks down the emotional journey of the audience across the script.

Key Suggestions:
The script's emotional core is strong in building empathy for Phyllis, but it suffers from repetitive high-tension scenes that cause audience fatigue and limit emotional depth. To improve, incorporate more varied emotional beats, such as moments of camaraderie, humor, and reflection, to create contrast and allow for character growth. Deepening sub-emotions and moral complexities will make the story more nuanced, enhancing engagement and preventing the grim tone from overwhelming the narrative.
Goals and Philosophical Conflict

Evaluates character motivations, obstacles, and sources of tension throughout the plot.

Key Suggestions:
The script effectively portrays Phyllis's internal and external conflicts, but to enhance its creative depth, focus on tightening the philosophical conflict resolution around the 85% mark to create a more impactful emotional climax. Additionally, amplify the interplay between her personal sacrifices and collective responsibilities to deepen character development and thematic resonance, ensuring that her journey from uncertainty to resolve feels authentic and engaging, potentially by adding subtle flashbacks or introspective moments that tie back to her mother's influence.
Themes

Analysis of the themes of the screenplay and how well they’re expressed.

Key Suggestions:
The script effectively captures the primary theme of hidden strength and unacknowledged courage, particularly through Phyllis's arc, but to elevate it creatively, focus on deepening emotional beats in key scenes, such as her training and near-captures, to heighten tension and character relatability. Additionally, weave the theme of inherited bravery more integrally into the narrative by drawing clearer parallels between Phyllis and her mother's story, ensuring it doesn't feel like exposition but a living influence on her decisions. This will enhance the script's emotional resonance and pacing, making the reveal in the framing narrative with David more impactful and avoiding potential drags in the historical flashbacks.
Logic & Inconsistencies

Highlights any contradictions, plot holes, or logic gaps that may confuse viewers.

Key Suggestions:
From a creative standpoint, the script's core issues lie in underdeveloped character arcs and plot logic, which can be improved by adding nuanced motivations for key character shifts, such as Phyllis's reluctance turning to revelation, and by clarifying transitions like her training to fieldwork. Streamlining redundant themes of fear and determination will create a tighter, more engaging narrative, enhancing emotional authenticity and audience immersion without overloading the story.

Scene Analysis

All of your scenes analyzed individually and compared, so you can zero in on what to improve.

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Writer Exec

This section looks at the extra spark — your story’s voice, style, world, and the moments that really stick. These insights might not change the bones of the script, but they can make it more original, more immersive, and way more memorable. It’s where things get fun, weird, and wonderfully you.

Unique Voice

Assesses the distinctiveness and personality of the writer's voice.

Key Suggestions:
The script's voice excels in building tension and emotional depth through vivid, sensory descriptions and subtext-laden dialogue, but to enhance its craft, focus on varying the pacing to include more dynamic action sequences alongside introspective moments. This will prevent potential viewer fatigue in longer scenes and amplify the overall impact, ensuring that the historical intrigue remains engaging and the character arcs feel more progressive, drawing viewers deeper into Phyllis's journey.
Writer's Craft

Analyzes the writing to help the writer be aware of their skill and improve.

Key Suggestions:
To elevate this screenplay, focus on refining dialogue to incorporate more subtext and nuanced interactions, deepen character backstories for richer emotional arcs, and improve pacing by balancing action with introspection. By engaging with suggested resources like 'Save the Cat! Writes a Novel' and practicing targeted exercises, you can transform these elements into a more compelling and resonant narrative that better captures the emotional depth of wartime espionage.
Memorable Lines
Spotlights standout dialogue lines with emotional or thematic power.
Tropes
Highlights common or genre-specific tropes found in the script.
World Building

Evaluates the depth, consistency, and immersion of the story's world.

Key Suggestions:
The world-building in the script effectively contrasts the harsh, high-stakes WWII environments with the serene 2016 settings to highlight themes of sacrifice and revelation, but to enhance creative depth, focus on integrating more sensory details and emotional layers in the historical scenes. This could involve deepening character interactions with their surroundings, such as emphasizing how the oppressive atmosphere of occupied France influences Phyllis's internal conflicts, to create a more immersive and emotionally resonant narrative that better serves the dual-timeline structure and character arcs.
Correlations

Identifies patterns in scene scores.

Key Suggestions:
The analysis reveals that while your script excels in building suspense and using reflective moments to drive character growth, there's a risk of over-relying on tense and suspenseful tones, which can lead to pacing issues and formulaic elements. To enhance the script's craft, focus on varying tone and pacing early on, integrating more emotional depth and conflict into instructional scenes, and distributing revelatory elements evenly to maintain intellectual intrigue and dynamic dialogue, ultimately creating a more balanced and engaging narrative.
Loglines
Presents logline variations based on theme, genre, and hook.

Comparison with Previous Draft

See how your script has evolved from the previous version. This section highlights improvements, regressions, and changes across all major categories, helping you understand what revisions are working and what may need more attention.

Version Comparison Analysis
Summary of Changes
Improvements (5)
  • Theme Integration - messageImpact: 8.0 → 9.0 +1.0
  • Theme Integration - integrationWithPlot: 7.0 → 8.0 +1.0
  • Emotional Impact - emotionalComplexity: 8.5 → 9.0 +0.5
  • Premise - engagementPotential: 8.0 → 8.5 +0.5
  • Premise - contributionToNarrative: 8.0 → 8.5 +0.5
Areas to Review (0)

No regressions detected