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Scene Map 49
# PG SLUGLINE
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SON OF A PREACHER MAN
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EXT FOREST - OVERFLOW DAM DAY
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INT HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE DAY
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE DAY
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INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM
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EXT SIERRA CITY - MOUNTAIN ROAD DAY
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INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE DAY
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - PORCH
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EXT HIDDEN CREEK MOMENTS LATER
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE MOMENTS LATER
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INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE NIGHT
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE NIGHT
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INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE NIGHT
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INT HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE NIGHT
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INT HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE - SAME
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INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - C.J.’S ROOM DAWN
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EXT FIELD MOMENTS LATER
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE MORNING
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INT SCHOOL BUS
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INT SCHOOL BUS DAY
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EXT SIERRA CITY ELEMENTARY SCHOOL DAY
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EXT DEER RIVER DAY
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EXT DEER RIVER - FALLS
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EXT SIERRA COUNTY FAIRGROUNDS EVENING
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INT CATHY’S VW BUG DAY
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INT OLD SIERRA THEATER - LOBBY
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EXT SHAWN’S COTTAGE DAY
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INT OLD SIERRA THEATER - SANCTUARY DAY
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EXT HIDDEN CREEK - ANOTHER DAY
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EXT SAN FRANCISCO - MARKET STREET DAY
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INT HIS WAY CHURCH - SANCTUARY NIGHT
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EXT OVERFLOW DAM DAY
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EXT FOREST - OVERFLOW DAM DAY
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EXT DEER RIVER NIGHT
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INT HIS WAY CHURCH - LOBBY - DAWN MOMENTS LATER
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EXT HIS WAY CHURCH - SUNRISE
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INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE MORNING
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EXT BUS STOP
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE DAY
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INT HIS WAY CHURCH - FELLOWSHIP HALL DAY
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INT HIS WAY CHURCH - SANCTUARY - DAY LATER
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INT HIS WAY CHURCH - MEN’S ROOM LATER
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY LATER
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INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM
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INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM DAY
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT YARD DAY
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT LATER
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INT HARRIS HOUSE - C.J.’S BEDROOM LATER
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT PORCH DAY
Scene Map
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# PG SLUGLINE
1 1
SON OF A PREACHER MAN
SON OF A PREACHER MAN
SON OF A PREACHER MAN Written by P.J. Palmer - White lines of a distant jet ripple across a crystal sky.
2 2
EXT FOREST - OVERFLOW DAM DAY
EXT. FOREST - OVERFLOW DAM - DAY (1982)
EXT. FOREST - OVERFLOW DAM - DAY (1982) Water glides silent and heavy across the spillway into a deep green basin below. At the edge, C.J. HARRIS (10) - skinny in cutoffs and a tank top - his hair in a bowl-cut, sits cross-legged.
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INT HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE DAY
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE - DAY (1990)
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE - DAY (1990) SUPER: 1990 Muffled preaching bleeds through the walls. C.J. (17), sits atop the desk. His dirty-blonde hair in a
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE DAY
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY C.J. exits the van with Jessie, Erin, Andy and Ryan. CATHY Mom. You can’t stay with us if
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INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM The kids watch TV. Cathy dumps laundry onto the couch. CATHY Nope. Jessie, Erin, help fold. Boys, get your butts outside.
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EXT SIERRA CITY - MOUNTAIN ROAD DAY
EXT. SIERRA CITY - MOUNTAIN ROAD - DAY (1982)
EXT. SIERRA CITY - MOUNTAIN ROAD - DAY (1982) Sunlight flashes off chrome. A pack of Harleys rip below the pines, engines snarling in the soft mountain air. Craig Harris (28), shirtless and lean, leads the pack. His long, thinning hair whips in the wind. Fearless. Alive.
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INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE DAY
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY Music blares from a turntable on moving boxes. Lawn chairs for furniture. Cocaine on a plate. Rifles against the wall. The Brady Bunch flickers on a small TV. On the floor: a five-gallon glass jug filled with coins,
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - PORCH
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - PORCH
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - PORCH UNCLE MARK (19), long hair and wispy goatee, in an Oakland Raiders t-shirt, lies on a skateboard, his polio-twisted legs dragging behind him. He nods toward REBECCA (30s), sweeping the porch of the
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EXT HIDDEN CREEK MOMENTS LATER
EXT. HIDDEN CREEK - MOMENTS LATER
EXT. HIDDEN CREEK - MOMENTS LATER C.J. wanders down a narrow path to a small clearing where sunbeams fracture across shallow pools. The creek winds around discarded milling machines. He kicks off his flip-flops and steps into the water. Popeye
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE MOMENTS LATER
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - MOMENTS LATER
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - MOMENTS LATER Cathy (28), summer dress, hair pulled back with a bandanna, whistles again with her fingers. C.J. comes running from the woods: C.J.
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INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE NIGHT
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - NIGHT
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - NIGHT C.J., bathed and in his pajamas, locks the back door, closes the blinds, turns off unused lights. Lady follows him. He looks past the blanket door into the -- -- BEDROOM
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE NIGHT
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - NIGHT
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - NIGHT Music plays from the El Camino’s radio. C.J. trots with Lady to the dairy truck, peers inside: a gas lantern glows. CRAIG (O.C.) Which hand?
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INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE NIGHT
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - NIGHT
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - NIGHT ‘70’s rock plays on the radio. Sugar Ray Leonard boxes on TV. C.J. in a tank top, wipes the tears from his red eyes with the back of his boxing glove. Craig warns C.J.: CRAIG
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INT HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE NIGHT
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE - NIGHT (1990)
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE - NIGHT (1990) The office turned youth group meeting room. About twenty TEENS sit scattered on the carpet, loose and tired at the tail end of youth group. Beside the door, a TALENT SHOW SIGN-UP sheet. C.J.’s name is
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INT HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE - SAME
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE - SAME
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE - SAME C.J.'s eyes snap open. Owen jerks awake -- and off C.J. so fast he nearly knocks into Derek beside him. Zach, Ezra, Jessie and the other teens sit dead still. Craig stares at Owen.
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INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - C.J.’S ROOM DAWN
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - C.J.’S ROOM - DAWN (1990)
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - C.J.’S ROOM - DAWN (1990) The sharp cries of Baby Scotty echo through the dark house. C.J. (17) stirs awake, groans. His mullet at odd angles. He pulls on his jeans, finds coins in the pocket - drops into his glass jug.
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EXT FIELD MOMENTS LATER
EXT. FIELD - MOMENTS LATER
EXT. FIELD - MOMENTS LATER The ranch is a world of silhouettes. The sky shifts from black to deep blue. C.J. trails Craig into a stand of cherry trees. Craig drops behind the low stone wall and motions C.J. to
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE MORNING
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - MORNING (1982)
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - MORNING (1982) C.J. (10), with his bowl-cut combed tight and dressed for school, stands with Jessie (8). They stare at the neighbor’s cottage - Lady and Popeye at their side. Shawn, bounds out of his house in his Boy Scouts uniform with
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INT SCHOOL BUS
INT. SCHOOL BUS
INT. SCHOOL BUS Derek, Ezra and Sarah make their way to the backseats where Owen (10), sits. C.J., Shawn and Jessie follow. OWEN (to Sarah)
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INT SCHOOL BUS DAY
INT. SCHOOL BUS - DAY (1990)
INT. SCHOOL BUS - DAY (1990) C.J. (17) sleeps, his head against the window. ZACH (O.C.) Mind if I sit? C.J. opens one eye to find Zach (17) standing next to his
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EXT SIERRA CITY ELEMENTARY SCHOOL DAY
EXT. SIERRA CITY ELEMENTARY SCHOOL - DAY (1982)
EXT. SIERRA CITY ELEMENTARY SCHOOL - DAY (1982) Bells ring. Doors push open. SCHOOL CHILDREN flood out toward yellow buses. C.J. (10), and Jessie (8), spot Craig across the street on his Harley. St. Nick and Genie share a bike. Uncle Mark waits
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EXT DEER RIVER DAY
EXT. DEER RIVER - DAY
EXT. DEER RIVER - DAY The bikers and El Camino pull up near an old school bus painted with rainbows, flowers, crosses: “THE JESUS BUS” C.J. and Jessie hop out with Lady and sprint to the water. Downriver, Pastor Norm (40s), loose white linen, flowing
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EXT DEER RIVER - FALLS
EXT. DEER RIVER - FALLS
EXT. DEER RIVER - FALLS The El Camino parks near a waterfall thundering into a clear pool, out of sight of the Jesus Bus. NUDISTS soak in the last heat of summer. St. Nick and Genie strip and dive in.
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EXT SIERRA COUNTY FAIRGROUNDS EVENING
EXT. SIERRA COUNTY FAIRGROUNDS - EVENING (1990)
EXT. SIERRA COUNTY FAIRGROUNDS - EVENING (1990) Hidden behind the Log Flume, Owen, Ezra and Derek (all 17) pass an apple made into a bong. C.J. (17) stays focused on pegging his jeans above his red Converse, pretending not to care.
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INT CATHY’S VW BUG DAY
INT. CATHY’S VW BUG - DAY (1982)
INT. CATHY’S VW BUG - DAY (1982) Wind blows C.J.’s (10) fresh, tight new haircut. His hand riding the wind out the window of Cathy’s VW. Orange and yellow leaves drift down to blanket the road. Jessie (8) stands on the backseat, her hair in new ribbons.
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INT OLD SIERRA THEATER - LOBBY
INT. OLD SIERRA THEATER - LOBBY
INT. OLD SIERRA THEATER - LOBBY A rush of bodies and music and welcome. Handshakes and coffee. Kids darts past. Somebody laughing too loud. C.J. takes in the crowd: Young, happy, clean people. He spots a scale-model of a modern house-shaped building on
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EXT SHAWN’S COTTAGE DAY
EXT. SHAWN’S COTTAGE - DAY
EXT. SHAWN’S COTTAGE - DAY Fog lifts between the evergreens into the overcast sky above. C.J. waits in his Royal Ranger uniform with Lady and Popeye. Shawn bursts out of his cottage in his Boy Scout uniform and a buck knife strapped to his leg. They run off shoulder-to-
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INT OLD SIERRA THEATER - SANCTUARY DAY
INT. OLD SIERRA THEATER - SANCTUARY - DAY
INT. OLD SIERRA THEATER - SANCTUARY - DAY C.J., Jessie and Cathy stand stiff in the front row, hair combed tight, dressed modestly. They try to sing with Craig. Pastor Norm and Janis perform onstage in flowing white linen. Owen plays the tambourine.
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EXT HIDDEN CREEK - ANOTHER DAY
EXT. HIDDEN CREEK - ANOTHER DAY
EXT. HIDDEN CREEK - ANOTHER DAY A light rain drizzles as fall moves to winter. C.J. and Shawn, in raincoats, pull a cedar branch. C.J. Sometimes we drink blood. But
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EXT SAN FRANCISCO - MARKET STREET DAY
EXT. SAN FRANCISCO - MARKET STREET - DAY (1982)
EXT. SAN FRANCISCO - MARKET STREET - DAY (1982) A PERFORMANCE TROUPE in matching overalls and yellow t-shirts hold a sheet painted with: “JESUS SAVES” Craig and a very pregnant Cathy stand with Pastor Norm,
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INT HIS WAY CHURCH - SANCTUARY NIGHT
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - SANCTUARY - NIGHT (1990)
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - SANCTUARY - NIGHT (1990) C.J. (17) in his mullet and Miami Vice-esque jacket, sits in a pew with Owen, Derek and Ezra (all 17, in Cosby sweaters). Ahead of them: Cathy and Jessie with their Aqua-Net hair and the younger Harris kids.
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EXT OVERFLOW DAM DAY
EXT. OVERFLOW DAM - DAY (1990)
EXT. OVERFLOW DAM - DAY (1990) Fog lifts off the deep lake, drifting through towering evergreens. C.J. walks the narrow dam, heavy with thought. He pulls chalk from his pocket, draws on the concrete like he did as a kid.
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EXT FOREST - OVERFLOW DAM DAY
EXT. FOREST - OVERFLOW DAM - DAY (1982)
EXT. FOREST - OVERFLOW DAM - DAY (1982) Light snow drifts over the partially frozen lake. C.J. (10) and Shawn (10) sit on the narrow dam, bundled in layers. C.J. wears plastic Wonder Bread bags over his socks. Lady and Popeye trail behind.
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EXT DEER RIVER NIGHT
EXT. DEER RIVER - NIGHT (1990)
EXT. DEER RIVER - NIGHT (1990) A massive BONFIRE roars beside the river, throwing wild light across TEENS in graduation caps and gowns - their silhouettes dance against smoke and the waterfall. A CHAINSAW screams somewhere in the dark.
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INT HIS WAY CHURCH - LOBBY - DAWN MOMENTS LATER
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - LOBBY - DAWN - MOMENTS LATER
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - LOBBY - DAWN - MOMENTS LATER Silhouettes of C.J., cowboy hat on, and Owen with keys outside the glass front doors. OWEN (O.C.) It’s the big one.
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EXT HIS WAY CHURCH - SUNRISE
EXT. HIS WAY CHURCH - SUNRISE
EXT. HIS WAY CHURCH - SUNRISE Owen storms into the empty parking lot, still buttoning his jeans, shaking with adrenaline. C.J. follows, barefoot, soaked, clutching his clothes and the cowboy hat.
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INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE MORNING
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - MORNING (1982)
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - MORNING (1982) Re-runs play on the T.V. Cathy (34) - long hair, visibly pregnant - clears plates. A thick Bible lies open. Jessie (8) counts as Craig (34) does push-ups in his boxers. C.J (10) pets Popeye, who lies listless in a cardboard box.
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EXT BUS STOP
EXT. BUS STOP
EXT. BUS STOP An over-loaded pick-up truck lumbers up the wet, narrow road with a line of cars behind it. The School Bus approaches in the distance. Jessie calls out to Shawn and Sarah, between the slow cars:
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE DAY
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY C.J. stands in a shirt and tie, tears streaming down his face. He holds a shoebox labeled: POPEYE. He places the box in a hole under a cross made of sticks surrounded by wildflowers.
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INT HIS WAY CHURCH - FELLOWSHIP HALL DAY
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - FELLOWSHIP HALL - DAY (1990)
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - FELLOWSHIP HALL - DAY (1990) Dozens of TEENS rehearse their various talents: ribbon dancing, foam puppets, tambourines. Jessie (15) practices at the piano. Owen (17) tunes his guitar. Over-tightens a peg. A string
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INT HIS WAY CHURCH - SANCTUARY - DAY LATER
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - SANCTUARY - DAY - LATER
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - SANCTUARY - DAY - LATER The sanctuary is packed. The heavy, driving rock of PETRA - “Judas’ Kiss” cranks from the speakers. OWEN (O.S.) (singing)
42 100
INT HIS WAY CHURCH - MEN’S ROOM LATER
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - MEN’S ROOM - LATER
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - MEN’S ROOM - LATER C.J., still in his disco-suit, steps up to the urinal beside Zach. C.J. pees. C.J. Hey Zach.
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY LATER
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY - LATER
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY - LATER Craig slams the Youth Ministry van into the driveway and storms into the house. The family follows in silence, passing Evelyn on the porch: leisure suit, Dolly Parton wig, oxygen tube, cigarette.
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INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM Andy and Ryan sprawl with Erin, watching THE COSBY SHOW reruns on a small TV. CANNED LAUGHTER fills the room. C.J. enters, still in his disco suit. He steps over the kids and heads for the stairs.
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INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM DAY
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM - DAY (1982)
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM - DAY (1982) Embers glow inside the wood burning stove. The TV plays 70’s sit-com re-runs, the volume turned low. C.J. (10), in his Royal Ranger uniform, sits on the living room floor surrounded by magazines. He concentrates on
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT YARD DAY
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT YARD - DAY (1990)
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT YARD - DAY (1990) Limp balloons and loose streamers. A crooked banner reads: HAPPY 18TH BIRTHDAY A folding table holds the remains of a sheet cake. The Harris kids run and play. Janis and a few CHURCH LADIES
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT LATER
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT - LATER
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT - LATER C.J. hangs his graduation tassel on the rearview mirror of Uncle Mark’s El Camino. His 5-gallon coin jug sits on the floor boards. Lady sits nearby, watching. ST. NICK (O.C.)
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INT HARRIS HOUSE - C.J.’S BEDROOM LATER
INT. HARRIS HOUSE - C.J.’S BEDROOM - LATER
INT. HARRIS HOUSE - C.J.’S BEDROOM - LATER C.J. packs clothes into boxes with photos of Popeye and Lady. Jessie enters: JESSIE What’s with everyone being here
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT PORCH DAY
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT PORCH - DAY
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT PORCH - DAY C.J. on a kitchen stool. Cathy cuts his hair with clippers plugged into an extension cord. Lady rests at his feet. CATHY I always knew this day would come.

SON OF PREACHER MAN

A gay teenager raised in a charismatic evangelical household spends his final days before turning eighteen navigating his father's religious authority, his own buried identity, and the accumulated losses of his childhood — until a single reckless night forces a reckoning that sends him driving toward Los Angeles with nothing but a coin jug and a borrowed car.

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Overview

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Unique Selling Proposition

The script is told entirely from the protagonist's point of view across two timelines (1982 and 1990), with characters who abruptly exit the story by design—mirroring the theme that life, God, and people fail you without resolution. It's a deeply subjective, art-house coming-of-age that refuses to tie up loose ends.

AI Verdict

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GPT5
 Recommend
Score 7.5
Grok
 Recommend
Score 7.5
Gemini
 Recommend
Score 7.5
Claude
 Recommend
Score 7.8
DeepSeek
 Recommend
Score 7.5
Average Score: 7.6
Key Takeaways
For the Writer:
The script's strengths lie in its rigorous POV, evocative motifs, and emotional depth, but it needs targeted revisions to bolster the causal chain in the 1990 timeline, particularly by clarifying C.J.'s active desires and reducing repetitive confrontation scenes. Focus on amplifying the motif system to carry more thematic weight without exposition, ensuring that emotional arcs build momentum toward a sharper climax, while preserving the arthouse integrity through subtle adjustments to transitions and character agency.
For Executives:
This script has solid arthouse potential with its distinctive POV and motif-driven storytelling, appealing to festivals and niche audiences interested in queer coming-of-age narratives, but it carries risks from structural drift in the second half that could alienate mainstream viewers or dilute emotional impact. Market perception might see it as a passionate indie project, but without tightening the pacing and causal flow, it risks being dismissed as overly repetitive or unfocused, limiting its commercial appeal beyond specialized circles.
Story Facts
Genres:
Drama 60% Comedy 25% Romance 20%

Setting: 1982 and 1990, Harris family farmhouse and various locations in Sierra City, California

Themes: Sexual Identity and Self-Acceptance, Religious Conflict and Disillusionment, Familial Expectations and Rebellion, Loss, Failure, and Broken Promises, The Power and Subjectivity of Memory and Perspective, Escapism and the Quest for a Better Life, Innocence vs. Corruption/Experience

Conflict & Stakes: C.J.'s struggle with his identity and acceptance within a strict religious family, with the stakes being his emotional well-being and future.

Mood: Bittersweet and introspective

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The exploration of a preacher's family grappling with faith and identity in a modern context.
  • Plot Twist: C.J.'s emotional breakdown and rejection of his family's beliefs culminate in a powerful confrontation.
  • Innovative Ideas: The use of childhood memories and dreams to juxtapose C.J.'s current struggles with his past innocence.
  • Distinctive Settings: The rural backdrop of Sierra City and the contrasting environments of the church and family home.

Comparable Scripts: The Perks of Being a Wallflower, Boy Erased, Stand By Me, A Separate Peace, The Glass Castle, The Fault in Our Stars, Moonlight, The Outsiders, Call Me by Your Name

How 5 AI Readers Scored The Script

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Premise i
7.6
Plot i
6.6
Structure i
7.6
Character i
8.2
Dialogue i
7.6
Tone / Voice i
8.6
Theme i
8.6
Marketability i
6.4
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Script Level Analysis

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Overall Score: 8.06
Key Suggestions:
To improve the script from a creative standpoint, prioritize deepening the character arcs of secondary characters like Owen and Shawn by adding subtle moments that reveal their motivations and emotional struggles, which will enhance the overall emotional resonance and prevent their abrupt exits from feeling unresolved. Additionally, refine pacing and emotional transitions in key scenes, such as those following tragic events, to allow for greater audience immersion and thematic clarity, drawing on techniques from similar character-driven dramas to strengthen the narrative's impact.
Story Critique

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Key Suggestions:
To improve 'Son of a Preacher Man' from a creative and craft perspective, focus on refining scene transitions to achieve smoother pacing and emotional continuity, which will help maintain audience engagement. Additionally, deepen the backstories of secondary characters through C.J.'s reflections to add layers of emotional depth and thematic resonance, ensuring the narrative's exploration of loss and identity feels more nuanced and impactful without shifting focus from the protagonist.
Characters

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Key Suggestions:
The character analysis reveals that while C.J. is a well-developed protagonist with strong emotional resonance and depth, supporting characters like Jessie, Shawn, and others suffer from static arcs and underdeveloped complexity, which can make the narrative feel unbalanced. To improve the script, focus on adding transformative moments and deeper internal conflicts for these characters, enhancing their arcs to mirror C.J.'s journey and create richer emotional layers. This will strengthen overall storytelling by ensuring all characters contribute meaningfully to themes of identity, faith, and family, making the script more engaging and cohesive from a craft perspective.
Emotional Analysis

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Key Suggestions:
To improve the script's emotional craft, incorporate greater variety in emotional tones by adding moments of genuine joy and relief, especially in the middle acts, to balance the predominant sadness and prevent monotony. Enhance character depth by including more layered emotions and introspective scenes, allowing for better pacing of revelations and audience empathy, which will make the protagonist's journey more nuanced and engaging without overwhelming the viewer.
Goals and Philosophical Conflict

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Key Suggestions:
The analysis highlights C.J.'s compelling journey of self-discovery, emphasizing the evolution from innocence to autonomy through internal and external conflicts. To improve the script, focus on refining the pacing of key conflict resolutions to heighten emotional stakes and ensure philosophical elements are woven more subtly into dialogue and actions, avoiding overt exposition to create a more nuanced and engaging character arc that resonates deeply with audiences.
Themes

Analysis of the themes of the screenplay and how well they’re expressed.

Key Suggestions:
From a creative perspective, the script's strength lies in its intimate, subjective POV that deeply explores C.J.'s internal conflicts, but to elevate the craft, focus on tightening the dual-timeline structure to avoid pacing issues and ensure seamless transitions. Emphasize authentic emotional beats in C.J.'s journey of self-discovery, particularly around his sexual identity, by adding more nuanced interactions and subtle foreshadowing to heighten tension and make the rebellion scenes more impactful, ultimately creating a more cohesive and resonant narrative.
Logic & Inconsistencies

Highlights any contradictions, plot holes, or logic gaps that may confuse viewers.

Key Suggestions:
The script's core strength lies in its vivid, poetic imagery and thematic depth around identity and faith, but inconsistencies in POV and character behavior could undermine immersion. Focus on tightening POV adherence and smoothing character arcs to create a more cohesive narrative, ensuring emotional beats land without whiplash, which would elevate the script's craft and make it more compelling for audiences.

Scene Analysis

All of your scenes analyzed individually and compared, so you can zero in on what to improve.

Scene-Level Percentile Chart
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Writer Exec

This section looks at the extra spark — your story’s voice, style, world, and the moments that really stick. These insights might not change the bones of the script, but they can make it more original, more immersive, and way more memorable. It’s where things get fun, weird, and wonderfully you.

Unique Voice

Assesses the distinctiveness and personality of the writer's voice.

Key Suggestions:
To refine the script, focus on balancing the poetic, introspective voice with tighter pacing in emotionally dense scenes to prevent audience disengagement, while amplifying the dreamlike imagery that defines your style. This will enhance character arcs and thematic depth, making the story more accessible and impactful without losing its raw, authentic essence, ultimately strengthening the narrative's emotional resonance.
Writer's Craft

Analyzes the writing to help the writer be aware of their skill and improve.

Key Suggestions:
The screenplay showcases a compelling voice in exploring themes of failure and loss, but to elevate its craft, focus on deepening character development by fleshing out internal conflicts and motivations, refining dialogue to uncover richer subtext and emotional layers, and ensuring thematic consistency to strengthen the narrative's emotional resonance and coherence, ultimately enhancing the story's impact for an art house audience.
Memorable Lines
Spotlights standout dialogue lines with emotional or thematic power.
Tropes
Highlights common or genre-specific tropes found in the script.
World Building

Evaluates the depth, consistency, and immersion of the story's world.

Key Suggestions:
The world-building in the script masterfully creates a subjective, emotionally resonant environment that amplifies C.J.'s internal conflicts and the story's themes of failure and identity, but to improve craft, focus on refining repetitive motifs like the dam and red Converse to ensure they evolve dynamically with character development rather than feeling static. This would heighten narrative tension and prevent symbolic overload, making the non-linear structure more impactful and accessible while preserving the art house aesthetic.
Correlations

Identifies patterns in scene scores.

Key Suggestions:
The script's strength lies in its introspective and emotional depth, particularly through CJ's POV, which effectively advances the narrative and reinforces themes of failure. However, to enhance craft, focus on adding subtle hooks in reflective and nostalgic scenes to combat potential slow pacing, and refine dialogue in low-conflict moments to better bridge emotional transitions, ensuring the story remains engaging while preserving its art house integrity.
Loglines
Presents logline variations based on theme, genre, and hook.

Comparison with Previous Draft

See how your script has evolved from the previous version. This section highlights improvements, regressions, and changes across all major categories, helping you understand what revisions are working and what may need more attention.

Version Comparison Analysis
Summary of Changes
Improvements (4)
  • Premise: 7.3 → 8.0 +0.7
  • Visual Imagery: 8.0 → 8.7 +0.7
  • Story Structure: 7.4 → 8.0 +0.6
  • Emotional Impact: 8.0 → 8.5 +0.5
Areas to Review (0)

No regressions detected