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Scene Map 60
# PG SLUGLINE
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INT OFFICE - AUCKLAND, NEW ZEALAND DAY
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INT COTTAGE - BEDROOM DAY
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INT WAR OFFICE - LONDON DAY
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EXT WANBOROUGH MANOR - SURREY DAY
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EXT WANBOROUGH MANOR - TRAINING GROUNDS DAY
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INT WANBOROUGH MANOR - CLASSROOM DAY
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EXT WANBOROUGH MANOR - WEAPONS RANGE DAY
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INT WANBOROUGH MANOR - DORMITORY NIGHT
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EXT WANBOROUGH MANOR - TRAINING GROUNDS DAY
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INT WANBOROUGH MANOR - BATHROOM NIGHT
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INT WANBOROUGH MANOR - PEMBERTON'S OFFICE DAY
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EXT RINGWAY AIRFIELD - MANCHESTER DAY
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EXT RINGWAY AIRFIELD - TRAINING TOWER DAY
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INT HANGAR - CLASSROOM DAY
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EXT RINGWAY AIRFIELD - BALLOON PLATFORM DAY
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INT BARRACKS NIGHT
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INT TRAINING CAMP - RADIO ROOM NIGHT
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INT TRAINING CAMP - CLASSROOM DAY
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EXT HIGHLANDS - FOREST NIGHT
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EXT TRAINING CAMP - FIRING RANGE DAY
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EXT TRAINING CAMP - GROUNDS DAY
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INT MANOR HOUSE - BRIEFING ROOM DAY
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INT MANOR HOUSE - EQUIPMENT ROOM DAY
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EXT AIRFIELD NIGHT
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INT HALIFAX BOMBER LATER
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EXT FRENCH COUNTRYSIDE NIGHT
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INT MOREAU FARMHOUSE NIGHT
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EXT CHERBOURG DAY
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INT CAFÉ MARTIN - PHYLLIS'S ROOM DAY
30 51
INT DUBOIS PARFUMERIE DAY
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INT CAFÉ MARTIN - PHYLLIS'S ROOM NIGHT
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EXT COUNTRYSIDE NIGHT
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EXT RIVER ROAD NIGHT
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INT CAFÉ MARTIN - PHYLLIS'S ROOM NIGHT
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INT DUBOIS PARFUMERIE DAY
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INT CHURCH NIGHT
37 64
INT SIMONE'S APARTMENT NIGHT
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EXT COUNTRYSIDE DAY
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INT DURAND FARMHOUSE DAY
40 69
EXT DURAND FARM MORNING
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INT BARN NIGHT
42 75
EXT VILLAGE MARKET - DAY - THREE DAYS LATER
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INT DURAND FARMHOUSE DAY
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EXT TRAIN STATION - CHERBOURG DAY
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INT TRAIN DAY
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EXT RENNES STATION EVENING
47 82
INT LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT EVENING
48 84
INT LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT MORNING
49 86
INT LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT AFTERNOON
50 88
EXT ABANDONED WAREHOUSE NIGHT
51 91
INT BAKERY - BACK ROOM DAY
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INT CHURCH - CONFESSIONAL DAY
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EXT STREET DAY
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INT LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT NIGHT
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EXT POST OFFICE MORNING
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EXT FARM MORNING
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INT MILK HOUSE CONTINUOUS
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INT LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT DAY
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INT ABANDONED FACTORY NIGHT
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INT COTTAGE - BEDROOM DAY
Scene Map
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# PG SLUGLINE
1 1
INT OFFICE - AUCKLAND, NEW ZEALAND DAY
INT. OFFICE - AUCKLAND, NEW ZEALAND - DAY (2016)
THE SPARROW OF NORMANDY Written by Giacomo Giammatteo Based on the true story of Phyllis Latour Giacomo Giammatteo
2 5
INT COTTAGE - BEDROOM DAY
INT. COTTAGE - BEDROOM - DAY
INT. COTTAGE - BEDROOM - DAY David helps his mother into bed. She settles against the pillows, and he pulls a chair close. He sets his phone on the nightstand and turns the recorder on. DAVID
3 7
INT WAR OFFICE - LONDON DAY
INT. WAR OFFICE - LONDON - DAY (1942)
INT. WAR OFFICE - LONDON - DAY (1942) Long corridors stretch through the stark government building, and women in military uniforms hurry past with files and papers. PHYLLIS (19) sits in a hard wooden chair outside an office.
4 11
EXT WANBOROUGH MANOR - SURREY DAY
EXT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - SURREY - DAY
EXT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - SURREY - DAY A grand Tudor manor house sits at the end of a long gravel drive. Ancient oaks surround the property, and the grounds stretch into rolling parkland. Several military vehicles are parked near the entrance.
5 13
EXT WANBOROUGH MANOR - TRAINING GROUNDS DAY
EXT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - TRAINING GROUNDS - DAY
EXT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - TRAINING GROUNDS - DAY Dawn breaks over the estate as Phyllis and fifteen other trainees — men and women — stand in formation wearing physical training gear. Their breath forms clouds of mist in the cold morning air.
6 14
INT WANBOROUGH MANOR - CLASSROOM DAY
INT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - CLASSROOM - DAY
INT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - CLASSROOM - DAY Phyllis sits at a desk covered with maps, charts, and reconnaissance photographs. Her feet are blistered from the morning run, and she flexes them carefully. INSTRUCTOR PEMBERTON (40s), precise and professorial, stands
7 16
EXT WANBOROUGH MANOR - WEAPONS RANGE DAY
EXT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - WEAPONS RANGE - DAY
EXT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - WEAPONS RANGE - DAY The crack of gunfire echoes across the grounds. Trainees line up at firing positions, each with a pistol. SGT. MACKENZIE (50s), a Scotsman with a weathered face, walks behind them.
8 17
INT WANBOROUGH MANOR - DORMITORY NIGHT
INT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - DORMITORY - NIGHT
INT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - DORMITORY - NIGHT The women lie in their beds, exhausted. Moonlight streams through the windows. Yvonne is already asleep, snoring softly. Phyllis examines her blistered hands in the dim light.
9 18
EXT WANBOROUGH MANOR - TRAINING GROUNDS DAY
EXT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - TRAINING GROUNDS - DAY
EXT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - TRAINING GROUNDS - DAY Rain pours down. Phyllis and five other trainees crawl through mud under barbed wire. Live ammunition cracks overhead — not close, but close enough to be terrifying.
10 19
INT WANBOROUGH MANOR - BATHROOM NIGHT
INT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - BATHROOM - NIGHT
INT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - BATHROOM - NIGHT Phyllis stands in front of a mirror, slowly washing mud from her face and arms. Her hands shake from exhaustion. The door opens and Jackie enters, equally filthy. JACKIE
11 20
INT WANBOROUGH MANOR - PEMBERTON'S OFFICE DAY
INT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - PEMBERTON'S OFFICE - DAY
INT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - PEMBERTON'S OFFICE - DAY Phyllis sits across from Pemberton, who reviews a file. Her uniform is clean now, pressed. Three weeks have passed, and she looks harder, more confident. PEMBERTON
12 22
EXT RINGWAY AIRFIELD - MANCHESTER DAY
EXT. RINGWAY AIRFIELD - MANCHESTER - DAY
EXT. RINGWAY AIRFIELD - MANCHESTER - DAY Gray skies hang over a military airfield. Phyllis steps off a transport truck with Jackie, Yvonne, and six male trainees. Wind whips across the tarmac, and in the distance, a training aircraft circles for landing.
13 24
EXT RINGWAY AIRFIELD - TRAINING TOWER DAY
EXT. RINGWAY AIRFIELD - TRAINING TOWER - DAY
EXT. RINGWAY AIRFIELD - TRAINING TOWER - DAY A forty-foot tower looms against the sky. Phyllis stands at the top, wearing a harness attached to a cable system. The ground looks impossibly far below. Davies stands beside her, calm and businesslike.
14 25
INT HANGAR - CLASSROOM DAY
INT. HANGAR - CLASSROOM - DAY
INT. HANGAR - CLASSROOM - DAY The trainees sit in rows of chairs facing a wall covered with diagrams of parachutes, wind patterns, and landing positions. Davies points to a cross-section of a parachute canopy. DAVIES
15 26
EXT RINGWAY AIRFIELD - BALLOON PLATFORM DAY
EXT. RINGWAY AIRFIELD - BALLOON PLATFORM - DAY
EXT. RINGWAY AIRFIELD - BALLOON PLATFORM - DAY A massive observation balloon floats eight hundred feet above the ground, tethered by cables. A wicker basket hangs beneath it, large enough for six people. Phyllis stands in the basket with Davies and Richard, both
16 27
INT BARRACKS NIGHT
INT. BARRACKS - NIGHT
INT. BARRACKS - NIGHT Phyllis lies in her bunk, staring at the ceiling. Her body aches from the landing, and she can still feel the sensation of falling. Yvonne, in the next bunk, speaks quietly into the darkness.
17 28
INT TRAINING CAMP - RADIO ROOM NIGHT
INT. TRAINING CAMP - RADIO ROOM - NIGHT
INT. TRAINING CAMP - RADIO ROOM - NIGHT Phyllis sits in front of a radio transmitter, wearing headphones. Her fingers tap out Morse code on the key, fast and precise. An INSTRUCTOR watches over her shoulder with a stopwatch.
18 29
INT TRAINING CAMP - CLASSROOM DAY
INT. TRAINING CAMP - CLASSROOM - DAY
INT. TRAINING CAMP - CLASSROOM - DAY Phyllis sits alone at a desk, surrounded by blank paper and pencils. MAJOR PALMER (50s), severe and unsmiling, places a sealed envelope in front of her. PALMER
19 30
EXT HIGHLANDS - FOREST NIGHT
EXT. HIGHLANDS - FOREST - NIGHT
EXT. HIGHLANDS - FOREST - NIGHT Rain falls through darkness. Phyllis moves through thick undergrowth, trying to stay quiet. She's alone, separated from her group during a navigation exercise, and completely lost.
20 33
EXT TRAINING CAMP - FIRING RANGE DAY
EXT. TRAINING CAMP - FIRING RANGE - DAY
EXT. TRAINING CAMP - FIRING RANGE - DAY Phyllis lies prone on the ground, a rifle tucked against her shoulder. Targets are set up at various distances, some partially obscured by terrain. Sgt. Mackenzie crouches beside her, watching through
21 37
EXT TRAINING CAMP - GROUNDS DAY
EXT. TRAINING CAMP - GROUNDS - DAY
EXT. TRAINING CAMP - GROUNDS - DAY Phyllis walks alone through the grounds, the dossier clutched in her hands. Her breath catches as she glances down, seeing the thick stack of pages that bind her fate. Jackie finds her sitting on a bench overlooking the valley.
22 38
INT MANOR HOUSE - BRIEFING ROOM DAY
INT. MANOR HOUSE - BRIEFING ROOM - DAY
INT. MANOR HOUSE - BRIEFING ROOM - DAY Phyllis sits at a long table covered with maps, photographs, and documents. A middle-aged woman, MME. ROUSSEAU (50s), sits across from her speaking rapid French. MME. ROUSSEAU
23 41
INT MANOR HOUSE - EQUIPMENT ROOM DAY
INT. MANOR HOUSE - EQUIPMENT ROOM - DAY
INT. MANOR HOUSE - EQUIPMENT ROOM - DAY A QUARTERMASTER (60s) spreads items across a table: a worn suitcase, French cosmetics, clothing with French labels, a small pistol, and other items. Phyllis examines each piece carefully. The Quartermaster
24 42
EXT AIRFIELD NIGHT
EXT. AIRFIELD - NIGHT
EXT. AIRFIELD - NIGHT A full moon illuminates the runway where a Halifax bomber waits, its engines idling. A ground crew loads equipment and check the systems. Phyllis stands with Jackie and Yvonne near the aircraft. All
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INT HALIFAX BOMBER LATER
INT. HALIFAX BOMBER - LATER
INT. HALIFAX BOMBER - LATER The Channel passes below, the dark water visible in the moonlight. The dispatcher moves forward to consult with the pilot, then returns.
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EXT FRENCH COUNTRYSIDE NIGHT
EXT. FRENCH COUNTRYSIDE - NIGHT
EXT. FRENCH COUNTRYSIDE - NIGHT Phyllis falls through darkness, the parachute snapping open above her. Fear grips her as the ground rushes up faster than she expects. She hits hard, rolling as trained, but the impact drives the air from her lungs.
27 46
INT MOREAU FARMHOUSE NIGHT
INT. MOREAU FARMHOUSE - NIGHT
INT. MOREAU FARMHOUSE - NIGHT The house is dark and cold. Henri lights a single candle. The main room is simple — a table, chairs, a stove, religious pictures on the walls. Claire goes to the stove and starts a fire. Within minutes,
28 48
EXT CHERBOURG DAY
EXT. CHERBOURG - DAY
EXT. CHERBOURG - DAY The morning sun breaks through clouds over the port city. German soldiers are everywhere — on street corners, checking papers, and usually patrolling in pairs. A German truck filled with soldiers rumbles past as two
29 49
INT CAFÉ MARTIN - PHYLLIS'S ROOM DAY
INT. CAFÉ MARTIN - PHYLLIS'S ROOM - DAY
INT. CAFÉ MARTIN - PHYLLIS'S ROOM - DAY One small window overlooks the alley behind the shop. A small bed, a chair, and a basin for washing almost fill the tiny room. Phyllis's suitcase sits on the floor. She opens the case and carefully removes the radio,
30 51
INT DUBOIS PARFUMERIE DAY
INT. DUBOIS PARFUMERIE - DAY
INT. DUBOIS PARFUMERIE - DAY The shop is small but elegant and it’s filled with bottles, powders, and creams. The scent of lavender and rose fills the air. Several customers browse the shelves. Phyllis stands behind the counter with Madame Dubois,
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INT CAFÉ MARTIN - PHYLLIS'S ROOM NIGHT
INT. CAFÉ MARTIN - PHYLLIS'S ROOM - NIGHT
INT. CAFÉ MARTIN - PHYLLIS'S ROOM - NIGHT Phyllis lies on the bed, staring at the ceiling and listening to German voices drift up from the café below — soldiers laughing, drinking, and playing cards. Henri knocks softly on the door, and enters carrying a
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EXT COUNTRYSIDE NIGHT
EXT. COUNTRYSIDE - NIGHT
EXT. COUNTRYSIDE - NIGHT Phyllis rides a battered bicycle along a dark road. A large wicker basket is strapped to the front, filled with loose hay and farm tools. The handle of her suitcase is barely visible, buried deep beneath the hay.
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EXT RIVER ROAD NIGHT
EXT. RIVER ROAD - NIGHT
EXT. RIVER ROAD - NIGHT Pascal and Phyllis move quickly along a narrow path beside a river. The water reflects starlight. Trees overhang the path, providing cover. Pascal carries his rifle casually but his eyes constantly
34 58
INT CAFÉ MARTIN - PHYLLIS'S ROOM NIGHT
INT. CAFÉ MARTIN - PHYLLIS'S ROOM - NIGHT
INT. CAFÉ MARTIN - PHYLLIS'S ROOM - NIGHT Phyllis lies on her bed fully clothed, too tense to sleep. The suitcase sits beside her, innocent-looking but deadly if discovered. Footsteps sound on the stairs. Heavy boots. German voices.
35 59
INT DUBOIS PARFUMERIE DAY
INT. DUBOIS PARFUMERIE - DAY
INT. DUBOIS PARFUMERIE - DAY Morning light filters through the shop windows. Phyllis arranges bottles on shelves while Madame Dubois works at the counter with ledgers. The door opens and a young woman enters — SIMONE (22), pretty
36 62
INT CHURCH NIGHT
INT. CHURCH - NIGHT
INT. CHURCH - NIGHT The church is dark except for candles burning at the altar. Phyllis enters through a side door and waits. Shadows move in the pews. As she approaches, she counts six people: Henri, Pascal, Simone, and three others she doesn't
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INT SIMONE'S APARTMENT NIGHT
INT. SIMONE'S APARTMENT - NIGHT
INT. SIMONE'S APARTMENT - NIGHT The apartment is tiny — one room with a bed, a table, a hot plate for cooking. Photographs of a man in French army uniform sit on a shelf. SIMONE
38 65
EXT COUNTRYSIDE DAY
EXT. COUNTRYSIDE - DAY
EXT. COUNTRYSIDE - DAY Henri drives a battered farm truck along a rutted road. Phyllis sits beside him, her suitcase at her feet. They pass German checkpoints but Henri knows the routes the patrols use and avoids them.
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INT DURAND FARMHOUSE DAY
INT. DURAND FARMHOUSE - DAY
INT. DURAND FARMHOUSE - DAY The kitchen is warm and clean. A fire burns in the large hearth. Marie sets bread and cheese on the table. MARIE Sit. Eat.
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EXT DURAND FARM MORNING
EXT. DURAND FARM - MORNING
EXT. DURAND FARM - MORNING Dawn breaks over the fields. Phyllis stands in the yard with Marie, learning to scatter grain for the chickens. The birds rush forward, pecking and fighting over food. MARIE
41 71
INT BARN NIGHT
INT. BARN - NIGHT
INT. BARN - NIGHT Phyllis sits in the loft with her radio assembled. An oil lamp provides dim light. Henri stands nearby with several handwritten pages. HENRI
42 75
EXT VILLAGE MARKET - DAY - THREE DAYS LATER
EXT. VILLAGE MARKET - DAY - THREE DAYS LATER
EXT. VILLAGE MARKET - DAY - THREE DAYS LATER Phyllis stands at a vegetable stall, examining a bruised cabbage. She carries a woven string bag—no suitcase, no cosmetics. She looks like a housewife. Pascal appears beside her, picking up a potato. He doesn't
43 77
INT DURAND FARMHOUSE DAY
INT. DURAND FARMHOUSE - DAY
INT. DURAND FARMHOUSE - DAY Phyllis sits at the kitchen table with Marie and Robert. The package lies open between them — identity papers for someone named Catherine Blanc, train tickets, and a small amount of money.
44 78
EXT TRAIN STATION - CHERBOURG DAY
EXT. TRAIN STATION - CHERBOURG - DAY
EXT. TRAIN STATION - CHERBOURG - DAY The station is crowded with civilians and German soldiers. Phyllis joins a queue for the ticket window, her suitcase heavy in her hand. Gestapo officers check papers at the platform entrance. She
45 80
INT TRAIN DAY
INT. TRAIN - DAY
INT. TRAIN - DAY The train rattles through the countryside. Phyllis sits opposite the GERMAN CORPORAL. She is knitting a grey sock, her needles clicking a steady, hypnotic rhythm. Click-clack. Click-clack.
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EXT RENNES STATION EVENING
EXT. RENNES STATION - EVENING
EXT. RENNES STATION - EVENING The train pulls into a larger station. Phyllis steps onto the platform carrying her suitcase. The station is busy with travelers and German military personnel. She checks the address Pascal gave her — 17 rue du Puits. She
47 82
INT LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT EVENING
INT. LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT - EVENING
INT. LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT - EVENING The apartment above the bakery is small and cluttered. Lucienne closes all the curtains before turning on a lamp. LUCIENNE They arrested Henri three days ago.
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INT LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT MORNING
INT. LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT - MORNING
INT. LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT - MORNING Phyllis wakes up on a narrow couch, disoriented. Sunlight streams through gaps in the curtains, and the smell of bread baking drifts up from the shop below. Lucienne enters carrying two cups of coffee.
49 86
INT LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT AFTERNOON
INT. LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT - AFTERNOON
INT. LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT - AFTERNOON Six people crowd into the small apartment. Phyllis recognizes the type — ordinary French citizens who've chosen to resist. ANDRÉ (50), a postal worker, sits near the window watching the street. MARGUERITE (28), a nurse, perches on the arm of a
50 88
EXT ABANDONED WAREHOUSE NIGHT
EXT. ABANDONED WAREHOUSE - NIGHT
EXT. ABANDONED WAREHOUSE - NIGHT The warehouse sits on the edge of the city near the river. Windows are broken, and weeds grow through cracks in the pavement. It looks completely abandoned.
51 91
INT BAKERY - BACK ROOM DAY
INT. BAKERY - BACK ROOM - DAY
INT. BAKERY - BACK ROOM - DAY Phyllis sits at a small table encoding a message. The room is cramped, filled with sacks of flour and baking supplies. Marguerite enters through the back door, her nurse's uniform spotted with blood.
52 93
INT CHURCH - CONFESSIONAL DAY
INT. CHURCH - CONFESSIONAL - DAY
INT. CHURCH - CONFESSIONAL - DAY Phyllis sits in the confessional booth. Through the screen, she can see the vague outline of André on the other side. ANDRÉ Bless me, Father, for I have
53 95
EXT STREET DAY
EXT. STREET - DAY
EXT. STREET - DAY Phyllis walks through the city, hyper-aware of everyone. PHYLLIS (to herself) Is that man following me? Is that
54 97
INT LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT NIGHT
INT. LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT - NIGHT
INT. LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT - NIGHT Phyllis paces the small room while Lucienne and André listen to her account of the meeting with Becker. PHYLLIS He knows. Maybe not everything, but
55 99
EXT POST OFFICE MORNING
EXT. POST OFFICE - MORNING
EXT. POST OFFICE - MORNING The morning sun creeps over the city as André loads mail sacks into his truck. Phyllis watches from across the street. Two German soldiers stand at the corner smoking cigarettes. One yawns. The other checks his watch.
56 100
EXT FARM MORNING
EXT. FARM - MORNING
EXT. FARM - MORNING The farm is isolated, surrounded by fields and forest. André pulls up to a weathered farmhouse. An old woman — MADAME LAURENT (70) — emerges from the house. MADAME LAURENT
57 102
INT MILK HOUSE CONTINUOUS
INT. MILK HOUSE - CONTINUOUS
INT. MILK HOUSE - CONTINUOUS As the German soldier moves closer, the flashlight beam inches across the wall toward Phyllis's hiding place. A voice calls from outside. GERMAN VOICE
58 104
INT LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT DAY
INT. LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT - DAY
INT. LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT - DAY Phyllis bursts through the door. Lucienne sits at the table with Marguerite and François. They're listening to a small radio, volume low. LUCIENNE
59 106
INT ABANDONED FACTORY NIGHT
INT. ABANDONED FACTORY - NIGHT
INT. ABANDONED FACTORY - NIGHT Phyllis transmits from a different location each night. Tonight it's an abandoned factory on the edge of town. Her fingers fly across the keys, sending intelligence back to
60 108
INT COTTAGE - BEDROOM DAY
INT. COTTAGE - BEDROOM - DAY (2016)
INT. COTTAGE - BEDROOM - DAY (2016) Phyllis lies in bed, David still sitting beside her. His phone continues recording. DAVID How long did you keep transmitting?

The Sparrow of Normandy

Inspired by her refugee mother's grit, 19-year-old Phyllis Latour lies her way into Britain's Special Operations Executive, enduring brutal training to become a covert agent whose coded messages from France help turn the tide of war.

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Overview

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Unique Selling Point

This screenplay offers a rare female perspective on WWII espionage, based on a true story of an overlooked hero. The unique 'sparrow' metaphor - emphasizing how being small and unremarkable became a survival strategy - provides a fresh angle on the spy genre. The intergenerational framing device adds emotional depth rarely seen in war stories.

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Average Score: 8.3
Key Takeaways
For the Writer:
You have a cinematic, character-led WWII story with an exceptional protagonist arc and authentic tradecraft—your biggest creative gains will come from giving the middle of the script a single, decisive turning point that forces Phyllis to change tactics and from making the Gestapo a driving, strategic antagonist rather than an intermittent threat. Condense repetitive transmission-set pieces, deepen or resolve the arcs of early supporting characters, and sharpen the epilogue with one or two specific, dramatic reckonings (a brief flashback or a named loss) so the emotional payoff lands with greater weight.
For Executives:
This is a marketable, female-led historical thriller with awards potential: authentic details, a clear protagonist journey and a resonant mother/son frame make it appealing to prestige buyers and streaming platforms. The principal risk is structural — a middle act that feels episodic and a passive antagonist weaken audience tension and could limit crossover commercial traction. A targeted rewrite to create a clear mid-act crisis and to dramatize the Gestapo’s pursuit will materially increase urgency, audience engagement and festival/awards prospects without major budgetary impact.
Story Facts
Genres:
War 60% Thriller 40% Drama 35% Action 25%

Setting: World War II (1940s) and 2016, Occupied France and New Zealand

Themes: Resilience and Strength in Adversity, Identity and Self-Discovery, Sacrifice and Duty, Courage in the Face of Fear, The Weight of Secrets and the Need for Revelation, Camaraderie and Support Among Women, Legacy and Memory

Conflict & Stakes: Phyllis's struggle to survive as a spy in occupied France while dealing with the emotional burden of her past and the risk of capture, with the stakes involving her life and the lives of others in the resistance.

Mood: Tense and introspective, with moments of suspense and emotional depth.

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The story of a female spy's experiences during WWII, highlighting her emotional journey and the impact of her actions.
  • Major Twist: Phyllis's discovery of her mother's past as a spy, which adds depth to her character and motivations.
  • Innovative Ideas: The use of knitting as a method to conceal secret messages, showcasing creativity in espionage.
  • Distinctive Setting: The contrast between the serene New Zealand countryside and the tense, dangerous atmosphere of occupied France.
  • Character Depth: Phyllis's internal struggles with guilt and the burden of her past, making her a relatable and complex protagonist.

Comparable Scripts: The Spy Who Came in from the Cold, Atonement, The Nightingale, The Book Thief, The English Patient, The Alice Network, The Imitation Game, The Cuckoo's Calling, The Red Tent

Script Level Analysis

Writer Exec

This section delivers a top-level assessment of the screenplay’s strengths and weaknesses — covering overall quality (P/C/R/HR), character development, emotional impact, thematic depth, narrative inconsistencies, and the story’s core philosophical conflict. It helps identify what’s resonating, what needs refinement, and how the script aligns with professional standards.

Screenplay Insights

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Overall Score: 7.89
Key Suggestions:
The script's strongest asset is Phyllis's arc — but the emotional payoff and stakes will rise sharply if supporting players (Lucienne, André, Jackie, Henri) are given clearer inner lives and visible costs. Add a few short, specific beats that reveal each key ally's personal stakes (loss, fear, moral conflict) and let those stakes influence a decision Phyllis must make. Tighten a couple of training/transition montages into scenes that linger on character vulnerability so the audience has faces and relationships to grieve when things go wrong.
Story Critique

Big-picture feedback on the story’s clarity, stakes, cohesion, and engagement.

Key Suggestions:
Lean into cinematic action and emotional immediacy: trim exposition-heavy dialogue (especially early) and show Phyllis’s interior life through active scenes. Strengthen the through-line by giving the middle a clear, focused mission or target that ties training to field stakes, and heighten the German threat with more direct near-misses and tense encounters. Use quieter, visual transitions to move between past and present so the final return to 2016 feels earned rather than abrupt.
Characters

Explores the depth, clarity, and arc of the main and supporting characters.

Key Suggestions:
The analysis shows you have a strong, marketable protagonist and convincing supporting cast, but the screenplay would benefit from making Phyllis's inner life and emotional stakes more visible. Strengthen scenes that currently skim the surface (notably the confrontation in her room with the Feldwebel), deepen her vulnerability and the influence of her mother across beats, and let supporting characters (Jackie, Henri, Lucienne) reveal more of their private fears so the trust dynamics feel earned. Use small, concrete moments of subtext (looks, hesitations, private rituals like knitting) to externalize internal conflict and make the audience feel the cost of every choice.
Emotional Analysis

Breaks down the emotional journey of the audience across the script.

Key Suggestions:
You have a powerful central performance in Phyllis and a compelling through-line, but the middle of the script sustains high tension for too long and flattens emotional texture. Add deliberate emotional valleys — short, quieter scenes where characters process events, show small wins, or share humanizing moments — so the big set-pieces truly land. Deepen two areas: (1) David’s arc in the framing device so his discovery feels earned, and (2) several key resistance members (Lucienne, André, Simone, Jackie) with one or two small personal beats each (a memory, a family detail, a private fear or wish). Also extend and emotionally ground the aftermath of major losses (e.g., Henri’s arrest) and rework the D‑Day sequence to emphasize personal stakes (relief, hope, grief) rather than only operational planning. These are modest, high-leverage changes that increase audience empathy and sharpen climactic payoff.
Goals and Philosophical Conflict

Evaluates character motivations, obstacles, and sources of tension throughout the plot.

Key Suggestions:
Phyllis's external achievements (successful transmissions, survival) are clear and satisfying, but the script should sharpen and thread her internal arc—fear, guilt, need for recognition—throughout so the final confession to her son lands as an earned catharsis. Plant concrete emotional beats and recurring motifs (e.g., 'sparrow', knitting, the L-pill) earlier and use small moments of vulnerability between missions to show how the philosophical conflict (Sacrifice vs. Survival) actually costs her over time. Trim or tighten any training or procedural beats that don't develop her interior life and redistribute that screen time to scenes that escalate moral tension and the consequences of her choices.
Themes

Analysis of the themes of the screenplay and how well they’re expressed.

Key Suggestions:
Center and sharpen the emotional through-line: the screenplay's strength is Phyllis's transformation from 'invisible' woman to resilient SOE agent and the long-buried cost of that life. Rework structure so the present-day discovery (David's find) is the dramatic spine that propels and punctuates the flashbacks — each wartime sequence should escalate personal cost and directly inform the present tension between mother and son. Trim or vary repetitive training beats, deepen key relationships (Jackie, Lucienne, Henri) so each sacrifice lands emotionally, and make the final revelation/payoff earn the secrecy by giving David a clear change of heart or mission. Small, specific craft moves: foreground prop motifs (sparrow, knitting, L-pill) as emotional anchors; convert some expository scenes into active conflict; and tighten transitions between timelines to maintain momentum and clarity.
Logic & Inconsistencies

Highlights any contradictions, plot holes, or logic gaps that may confuse viewers.

Key Suggestions:
The script has a powerful emotional core — a son discovering his mother’s hidden life as an SOE agent — but two structural issues undermine audience buy-in: Phyllis’s rapid shift from secrecy to willingness to tell her story, and operational plausibility around her survival and radio work. Strengthen Phyllis’s emotional arc with additional beats that show internal conflict and incremental trust-building with David, and shore up the espionage logistics by showing specific tradecraft, close-calls and a clearer training-to-deployment timeline. Tighten redundant training sequences and convert expository dialogue into active scenes that reveal character under pressure.

Scene Analysis

All of your scenes analyzed individually and compared, so you can zero in on what to improve.

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Writer Exec

This section looks at the extra spark — your story’s voice, style, world, and the moments that really stick. These insights might not change the bones of the script, but they can make it more original, more immersive, and way more memorable. It’s where things get fun, weird, and wonderfully you.

Unique Voice

Assesses the distinctiveness and personality of the writer's voice.

Key Suggestions:
Your screenplay’s voice—gritty, concise, and emotionally resonant—is a major strength. To elevate the script further, tighten the narrative’s throughline: deepen Phyllis’s internal arc and make David’s discovery-driven stakes clearer so every scene serves that emotional spine. Trim or reshape heavy-handed exposition (especially graphic training/ interrogation moments) so the voice’s power comes from character reaction and consequence rather than repeated explanation. Keep the terse, subtext-rich dialogue, but allow quieter beats to breathe so the audience can feel the cost of the spy work instead of only seeing it.
Writer's Craft

Analyzes the writing to help the writer be aware of their skill and improve.

Key Suggestions:
You have a vivid, emotionally rich wartime drama with a strong hook (a son discovering his mother’s secret life) and sustained tension across the mission sequences. To elevate it, focus your next draft on tightening the script: sharpen dialogue so subtext does the heavy lifting, prune or combine scenes that slow momentum, and deepen key characters’ internal arcs (especially Phyllis and David) so choices feel inevitable. Use targeted exercises — short, dialogue-led scenes with hidden agendas and single-character monologues — and study models that balance wartime stakes with human drama to make each scene earn its place and drive escalation toward the invasion and its aftermath.
Memorable Lines
Spotlights standout dialogue lines with emotional or thematic power.
Tropes
Highlights common or genre-specific tropes found in the script.
World Building

Evaluates the depth, consistency, and immersion of the story's world.

Key Suggestions:
The world-building is strong and authentic, giving you vivid period detail and a compelling dual-timeline structure. To lift the script further, make the world serve the emotional throughline more directly: tighten and prioritize scenes that deepen Phyllis's inner arc and David's discovery journey so the historical action always feeds the present-day reconciliation. Trim or combine some training/operational set pieces that don't change character, and use recurring motifs (the 'sparrow', knitting, the radio) to link past danger to present guilt and redemption for clearer payoffs.
Correlations

Identifies patterns in scene scores.

Key Suggestions:
Your screenplay’s emotional core is strong—reflective scenes deliver high audience feeling without heavy conflict—but expository/instructional scenes are undercutting that strength. Rework those teaching-heavy beats so information is earned through active choices, micro-conflicts, or visible vulnerability (show, don’t lecture). Tighten mid-screenplay lulls by breaking long reflective passages with small obstacles or sharper dialogue beats. Finally, prioritize polishing dialogue in the weaker scenes—clear, character-driven lines will restore emotional continuity and keep pacing taut without sacrificing the intimate tone that makes Phyllis resonant.
Loglines
Presents logline variations based on theme, genre, and hook.