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Scene Map 60
# PG SLUGLINE
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EXT SEATTLE WASHINGTON / PARK DAY
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EXT HIGH SCHOOL / BASEBALL FIELD DAY
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EXT SEATTLE YOUTH BALLET DAY
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EXT NEIGHBORHOOD STREETS DAY
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EXT HIGH SCHOOL PARKING LOT NIGHT
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INT MARIA’S HOUSE / LIVING ROOM NIGHT
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INT HOSPITAL NURSES’ STATION DAY
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EXT SERENA’S BEAUTY PARLOR DAY
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INT HOSPITAL ROOM DAY
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INT AUDITORIUM NIGHT
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INT MARTINO HOUSE / KITCHEN DAY
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INT ELEMENTARY SCHOOL OFFICE DAY
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EXT MARTINO HOUSE / BACK YARD DAY
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INT DAVID AND SERENA’S BEDROOM NIGHT
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INT MARTINO HOUSE / LIVING ROOM DAY
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INT HOSPITAL / BREAKROOM NIGHT
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EXT REC CENTER PARKING LOT NIGHT
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INT HOSPITAL NIGHT
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INT SERENA'S BEAUTY PARLOR DAY
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EXT HIGH SCHOOL / BASEBALL FIELD DAY
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INT MARTINO HOUSE / KITCHEN NIGHT
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INT MARIA’S HOUSE / KITCHEN DAY
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INT HOSPITAL DAY
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INT HOSPITAL EMERGENCY ROOM DAY
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INT MARTINO HOUSE / ISABELLA’S BEDROOM DAY
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INT MARTINO HOUSE / KITCHEN NIGHT
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INT MARTINO’S HOUSE / UPSTAIRS HALLWAY LATER
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EXT MARTINO HOUSE / BACK YARD DAY
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INT MARTINO HOUSE / LIVING ROOM - SAME
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EXT MARTINO HOUSE / BACK YARD DAY
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INT GROCERY STORE EVENING
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EXT MARTINO HOUSE / BACK YARD NIGHT
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INT HOSPITAL / HALLWAY DAY
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INT HOSPITAL / COVID UNIT LATER
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INT MARIA’S HOUSE / BATHROOM NIGHT
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INT MARTINO HOUSE / KITCHEN DAY
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INT MARIA'S BEDROOM NIGHT
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INT ISABELLA’S BEDROOM - SAME
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INT MARIA’S BEDROOM - SAME
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INT MARTINO HOUSE / DINING ROOM DAY
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INT MARIA’S HOUSE / KITCHEN DAY
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INT MARIA’S HOUSE / BEDROOM DAY
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INT MARTINO HOUSE / SMALL OFFICE DAY
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EXT NEIGHBORHOOD PARK DAY
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INT MARTINO HOUSE / LIVING ROOM NIGHT
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INT DAVID’S CAR NIGHT
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INT HOLDING CELL NIGHT
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INT HOSPITAL / BREAKROOM DAY
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INT SERENA'S BEAUTY PARLOR DAY
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INT SEATTLE YOUTH BALLET DAY
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EXT SEATTLE WASHINGTON / DOWNTOWN NIGHT
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INT MARTINO HOUSE / LIVING ROOM NIGHT
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INT HOSPITAL / PATIENT ROOM DAY
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EXT. SEATTLE SKYLINE DAY
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INT. HARBORVIEW MEDICAL CENTER / VACCINE CLINIC DAY
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INT MARIA’S HOUSE / BEDROOM NIGHT
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INT HOSPITAL / NURSES’ STATION DAY
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INT HOSPITAL / STAFF MEETING DAY
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INT AUDITORIUM NIGHT
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EXT UNIVERSITY OF WASHINGTON/ BALL FIELD NIGHT
Scene Map
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# PG SLUGLINE
1 2
EXT SEATTLE WASHINGTON / PARK DAY
EXT. SEATTLE WASHINGTON / PARK - DAY
EXT. SEATTLE WASHINGTON / PARK - DAY SUPER: APRIL 3, 2020 An empty city park. No joggers. No bicyclists. Swings, slides, see-saws, climbing frames all void of children - roped off with bright yellow warning tape.
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EXT HIGH SCHOOL / BASEBALL FIELD DAY
EXT. HIGH SCHOOL / BASEBALL FIELD - DAY
EXT. HIGH SCHOOL / BASEBALL FIELD - DAY Dressed in a team-branded shirt, DAVID MARTINO (40s), dark hair, strong medium build, stands off to the side of the third base line. He scans the players, bases loaded. BRADY MARTINO (16), tall and slender, takes a few practice
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EXT SEATTLE YOUTH BALLET DAY
EXT. SEATTLE YOUTH BALLET - DAY
EXT. SEATTLE YOUTH BALLET - DAY Trees line the sidewalks of this historic district. A large building with arched windows, separated by columns and ornate details, sits among other impressive architecture. INT. SEATTLE YOUTH BALLET - DAY
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EXT NEIGHBORHOOD STREETS DAY
EXT. NEIGHBORHOOD STREETS - DAY
EXT. NEIGHBORHOOD STREETS - DAY Isabella, on her bike, pedals fast, wind tugs at her loose, long curls. A gym bag jostles on her back. Her ballet slippers dangle from the handlebars. She passes FAMILIES gathered on porches, an ice cream shop, a
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EXT HIGH SCHOOL PARKING LOT NIGHT
EXT. HIGH SCHOOL PARKING LOT - NIGHT
EXT. HIGH SCHOOL PARKING LOT - NIGHT The crowd has thinned. Distant cheers still echo like embers. David loads Isabella’s bike into the back of their SUV. Serena directs Matteo into the car, trying to shush his excitement.
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INT MARIA’S HOUSE / LIVING ROOM NIGHT
INT. MARIA’S HOUSE / LIVING ROOM - NIGHT
INT. MARIA’S HOUSE / LIVING ROOM - NIGHT Maria slips out of her shoes with a sigh of relief, relaxes back on the sofa. Her lab leaps up beside her, lays down, rests her head on Maria’s lap. Maria rubs its head, massages its ears.
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INT HOSPITAL NURSES’ STATION DAY
INT. HOSPITAL NURSES’ STATION - DAY
INT. HOSPITAL NURSES’ STATION - DAY Maria, solemn in demeanor, in RN light blue scrubs, stands before the NURSE SUPERVISOR (40s), who scans a medical chart. NURSE SUPERVISOR The attending logged a formal
8 11
EXT SERENA’S BEAUTY PARLOR DAY
EXT. SERENA’S BEAUTY PARLOR - DAY
EXT. SERENA’S BEAUTY PARLOR - DAY A side street lined with mom-and-pop shops. INT. SERENA'S BEAUTY PARLOR - DAY A small, two-chair shop. The salon glows in amber light. A diffuser drifts lavender
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INT HOSPITAL ROOM DAY
INT. HOSPITAL ROOM - DAY
INT. HOSPITAL ROOM - DAY MR. YANKO (mid 80s), lies in bed. Eyes closed. Thin, frail. Maria enters, places a small pitcher of fresh water on his cart, along with a protein drink. She glances at the monitor - blood pressure and heart rate steady.
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INT AUDITORIUM NIGHT
INT. AUDITORIUM - NIGHT
INT. AUDITORIUM - NIGHT Seats filled. Maria sits by Brady. Next is Matteo, practically vibrating with energy. Beside him, an empty seat - then David, a bouquet of flowers on his lap, reading the recital program.
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INT MARTINO HOUSE / KITCHEN DAY
INT. MARTINO HOUSE / KITCHEN - DAY
INT. MARTINO HOUSE / KITCHEN - DAY A spacious kitchen hums with activity. Steam curls from a casserole dish. Clinking glasses. Folded napkins. Maria pours ice tea. Serena plates salad.
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INT ELEMENTARY SCHOOL OFFICE DAY
INT. ELEMENTARY SCHOOL OFFICE - DAY
INT. ELEMENTARY SCHOOL OFFICE - DAY The sterile office hums with a low buzz. David and Serena sit side-by-side across a long desk. Maria sits just behind them - not officially part of the meeting, but very much present.
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EXT MARTINO HOUSE / BACK YARD DAY
EXT. MARTINO HOUSE / BACK YARD - DAY
EXT. MARTINO HOUSE / BACK YARD - DAY Dressed in a superhero cape, Matteo jumps on a small back yard trampoline. Arms stretched forward, ready to take off. Today, he’s Superman. MARIA (V.O.)
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INT DAVID AND SERENA’S BEDROOM NIGHT
INT. DAVID AND SERENA’S BEDROOM - NIGHT
INT. DAVID AND SERENA’S BEDROOM - NIGHT Serena lies under the comforter, flips through Matteo’s school recommendation form. David sits at a small desk, researches A.D.H.D. on his laptop.
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INT MARTINO HOUSE / LIVING ROOM DAY
INT. MARTINO HOUSE / LIVING ROOM - DAY
INT. MARTINO HOUSE / LIVING ROOM - DAY SUPER: DECEMBER 25, 2019 A decorated tree glows in the corner. Presents sit in little piles for each child. The sound of a crackling fire mixes with faint music from the kitchen radio - Nat King Cole’s
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INT HOSPITAL / BREAKROOM NIGHT
INT. HOSPITAL / BREAKROOM - NIGHT
INT. HOSPITAL / BREAKROOM - NIGHT A wall-mounted TV plays a local news segment. INSERT TV SCREEN Footage of the Space Needle bathed in shifting colors, pulsing beams of light.
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EXT REC CENTER PARKING LOT NIGHT
EXT. REC CENTER PARKING LOT - NIGHT
EXT. REC CENTER PARKING LOT - NIGHT SUPER: January 15, 2020 Early evening. Cloudy skies. Light rain falls. KIDS in oversized sweatshirts swarm into the center like
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INT HOSPITAL NIGHT
INT. HOSPITAL - NIGHT
INT. HOSPITAL - NIGHT SUPER: JANUARY 18th, 2020 The hallway hums with low fluorescent light. Maria walks toward the nurses’ station with calm, steady steps. A few charts tucked under her arm.
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INT SERENA'S BEAUTY PARLOR DAY
INT. SERENA'S BEAUTY PARLOR - DAY
INT. SERENA'S BEAUTY PARLOR - DAY SUPER: MARCH 2, 2020 In a stylish smock, Serena - scissors in hand - cuts layers into a CLIENT’s hair (50s), while a SECOND CLIENT sits under the dryer, scrolling her phone.
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EXT HIGH SCHOOL / BASEBALL FIELD DAY
EXT. HIGH SCHOOL / BASEBALL FIELD - DAY
EXT. HIGH SCHOOL / BASEBALL FIELD - DAY SUPER: MARCH 13th, 2020 Late afternoon sun. Crisp wind. STUDENTS (ages 14-18), run warm-up laps along the edge of the fence.
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INT MARTINO HOUSE / KITCHEN NIGHT
INT. MARTINO HOUSE / KITCHEN - NIGHT
INT. MARTINO HOUSE / KITCHEN - NIGHT The kitchen quiet. A few dishes dry on a rack. A half-eaten casserole sets cold on the stove. Brady leans against the counter, scrolls his phone. INSERT: College websites, flooded with Covid-19 updates.
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INT MARIA’S HOUSE / KITCHEN DAY
INT. MARIA’S HOUSE / KITCHEN - DAY
INT. MARIA’S HOUSE / KITCHEN - DAY SUPER: MARCH 23, 2020 Maria, in fresh scrubs, sits at a small table, a half-eaten sandwich in front of her. She sips her coffee. Her yellow lab curled at her feet.
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INT HOSPITAL DAY
INT. HOSPITAL - DAY
INT. HOSPITAL - DAY Maria enters, slips her blue surgical mask over her nose, and walks into the eerily quiet lobby. A large sign rests on an easel in the middle of the entryway: UNTIL FURTHER NOTICE VISITATION IS RESTRICTED.
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INT HOSPITAL EMERGENCY ROOM DAY
INT. HOSPITAL EMERGENCY ROOM - DAY
INT. HOSPITAL EMERGENCY ROOM - DAY An overcrowded E.R. PATIENTS lie on gurneys outside occupied rooms. Gloved, gowned and masked NURSES move from patient to patient. Vitals documented. Patients swabbed for testing.
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INT MARTINO HOUSE / ISABELLA’S BEDROOM DAY
INT. MARTINO HOUSE / ISABELLA’S BEDROOM - DAY
INT. MARTINO HOUSE / ISABELLA’S BEDROOM - DAY A virtual classroom blinks to life on an open Chromebook. Isabella, surrounded by books and journals, sits in a hoodie, cross-legged on her bed. On the wall behind her, the word DREAM spelled out in big
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INT MARTINO HOUSE / KITCHEN NIGHT
INT. MARTINO HOUSE / KITCHEN - NIGHT
INT. MARTINO HOUSE / KITCHEN - NIGHT Serena chops vegetables for a salad. David stands at the stove, flips pork chops in the skillet. SERENA Is this what she did to him in
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INT MARTINO’S HOUSE / UPSTAIRS HALLWAY LATER
INT. MARTINO’S HOUSE / UPSTAIRS HALLWAY - LATER
INT. MARTINO’S HOUSE / UPSTAIRS HALLWAY - LATER David knocks on Brady’s bedroom door. No answer. BRADY (O.S.) Hey, man! You stole my kill. David opens the door.
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EXT MARTINO HOUSE / BACK YARD DAY
EXT. MARTINO HOUSE / BACK YARD - DAY
EXT. MARTINO HOUSE / BACK YARD - DAY Large, fenced-in. Tall evergreens run down the one side, and a raised garden area on the other. Matteo stands at the farthest end from the house, grips the bat. His knees wobble.
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INT MARTINO HOUSE / LIVING ROOM - SAME
INT. MARTINO HOUSE / LIVING ROOM - SAME
INT. MARTINO HOUSE / LIVING ROOM - SAME Classical music plays. The furniture pushed back, creating a small open space. Isabella, in ballet slippers, poses in front of the TV - tuned to a YouTube Ballet Tutorial.
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EXT MARTINO HOUSE / BACK YARD DAY
EXT. MARTINO HOUSE / BACK YARD - DAY
EXT. MARTINO HOUSE / BACK YARD - DAY The sun sets. MATTEO Just one more, Dad. I know I can do it!
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INT GROCERY STORE EVENING
INT. GROCERY STORE - EVENING
INT. GROCERY STORE - EVENING 80s music plays overhead - ironically upbeat. A few SHOPPERS wander the store, carts full. Some masked, some not. They all keep their distance. Arrows drawn at the ends of each aisle, point in one
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EXT MARTINO HOUSE / BACK YARD NIGHT
EXT. MARTINO HOUSE / BACK YARD - NIGHT
EXT. MARTINO HOUSE / BACK YARD - NIGHT The flood light illuminates the yard. Brady tosses a frisbee to Maria’s yellow lab. The dog anticipates the flight path, springs into the air, and lands with the frisbee in her jaws. INT. MARTINO HOUSE / KITCHEN - SAME
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INT HOSPITAL / HALLWAY DAY
INT. HOSPITAL / HALLWAY - DAY
INT. HOSPITAL / HALLWAY - DAY Maria, in surgical mask and gown, walks from a patient’s room. She removes her blue gloves. Dr. Stevens approaches, also masked, but in his usual white coat.
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INT HOSPITAL / COVID UNIT LATER
INT. HOSPITAL / COVID UNIT - LATER
INT. HOSPITAL / COVID UNIT - LATER NURSES, unrecognizable in their face shields and personal protective equipment, fill the halls. Some enter rooms, while others stand at a cart, enter data into their laptops. The sound is different on this floor. Low beeps drowned by a
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INT MARIA’S HOUSE / BATHROOM NIGHT
INT. MARIA’S HOUSE / BATHROOM - NIGHT
INT. MARIA’S HOUSE / BATHROOM - NIGHT Steam fills the room. Maria showers. The stream of hot water cascades over her, mixing with her tears. Desperate to wash the day away, she scrubs her skin roughly.
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INT MARTINO HOUSE / KITCHEN DAY
INT. MARTINO HOUSE / KITCHEN - DAY
INT. MARTINO HOUSE / KITCHEN - DAY The hum of a morning news broadcast fills the room. SUPER: APRIL 6th, 2020 Serena stands at the stove, flips pancakes. The radio murmurs in the background - another update on
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INT MARIA'S BEDROOM NIGHT
INT. MARIA'S BEDROOM - NIGHT
INT. MARIA'S BEDROOM - NIGHT A small lamp casts a warm glow. Maria sits at her desk, pen in hand. A blank card rests in front of her. MARIA (V.O.)
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INT ISABELLA’S BEDROOM - SAME
INT. ISABELLA’S BEDROOM - SAME
INT. ISABELLA’S BEDROOM - SAME Isabella lies on her stomach across her bed, legs bent at the knees, feet swaying. Her phone plays a silly TikTok dance video, muffled against a pillow. Her laptop glows nearby. A Zoom call in progress.
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INT MARIA’S BEDROOM - SAME
INT. MARIA’S BEDROOM - SAME
INT. MARIA’S BEDROOM - SAME The sound of a pen scratching against paper. Maria writes. MARIA (V.O.) Dear Alicia, I sat with your grandfather that night. He smiled
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INT MARTINO HOUSE / DINING ROOM DAY
INT. MARTINO HOUSE / DINING ROOM - DAY
INT. MARTINO HOUSE / DINING ROOM - DAY David, Serena, Brady, Isabella and Matteo gather around the dining table. A large ham and a baking dish filled with lasagna sit at the center. Bowls of side dishes pass from hand to hand.
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INT MARIA’S HOUSE / KITCHEN DAY
INT. MARIA’S HOUSE / KITCHEN - DAY
INT. MARIA’S HOUSE / KITCHEN - DAY Maria sits at her small kitchen table. She’s dressed in her Sunday best. A cup of coffee beside her, her laptop open in front of her. A Zoom church service plays on the screen. ON SCREEN
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INT MARIA’S HOUSE / BEDROOM DAY
INT. MARIA’S HOUSE / BEDROOM - DAY
INT. MARIA’S HOUSE / BEDROOM - DAY Maria sits at her computer desk, robe loosely tied, a cup of tea cooling beside her. Her dog lays at her feet. She opens Facebook: INSERT COMPUTER SCREEN
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INT MARTINO HOUSE / SMALL OFFICE DAY
INT. MARTINO HOUSE / SMALL OFFICE - DAY
INT. MARTINO HOUSE / SMALL OFFICE - DAY THUMP! THUMP! THUMP! Serena flinches. She sits at a cluttered desk, phone pressed to her ear. A stack of unpaid bills spread out before her. A client calendar is open - appointments crossed out in red.
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EXT NEIGHBORHOOD PARK DAY
EXT. NEIGHBORHOOD PARK - DAY
EXT. NEIGHBORHOOD PARK - DAY A beautiful spring day. The sun shines brightly. Cherry blossoms in peak bloom. A dozen or so PEOPLE roam the trails. Most masked. All keep their distance.
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INT MARTINO HOUSE / LIVING ROOM NIGHT
INT. MARTINO HOUSE / LIVING ROOM - NIGHT
INT. MARTINO HOUSE / LIVING ROOM - NIGHT The house dim. The lamp glows in the corner. Its shade still slightly bent from the fall. Isabella’s ballet shoes lie on the floor. Brady paces, jaw clenched, cell phone in hand.
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INT DAVID’S CAR NIGHT
INT. DAVID’S CAR - NIGHT
INT. DAVID’S CAR - NIGHT David sits in the parking lot of the police station. His eyes locked on the entrance. OFFICERS come and go. He runs his fingers through his hair, nearly pulling it out. He exhales, grabs his cell phone, makes a call.
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INT HOLDING CELL NIGHT
INT. HOLDING CELL - NIGHT
INT. HOLDING CELL - NIGHT Dim. Empty. Serena sits alone on a narrow bench, arms wrapped around herself. A flickering fluorescent light hums overhead.
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INT HOSPITAL / BREAKROOM DAY
INT. HOSPITAL / BREAKROOM - DAY
INT. HOSPITAL / BREAKROOM - DAY Maria sips her coffee. The TV’s tuned to a news channel. The Covid tracker scrolls across the bottom of the screen. ON SCREEN Footage of Dallas entrepreneur, Shelly Luther, owner of Salon
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INT SERENA'S BEAUTY PARLOR DAY
INT. SERENA'S BEAUTY PARLOR - DAY
INT. SERENA'S BEAUTY PARLOR - DAY A bell DINGS as the door opens. Serena steps inside, carrying a sign. A bag hangs off her shoulder. She removes her mask. A sigh of relief escapes her. A smile
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INT SEATTLE YOUTH BALLET DAY
INT. SEATTLE YOUTH BALLET - DAY
INT. SEATTLE YOUTH BALLET - DAY Hauntingly beautiful music fills the room. Miss Alonso stands before a few STUDENTS in dancing tights, all masked. Each student remains in her own bubble - an area circled off for her and her alone.
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EXT SEATTLE WASHINGTON / DOWNTOWN NIGHT
EXT. SEATTLE WASHINGTON / DOWNTOWN - NIGHT
EXT. SEATTLE WASHINGTON / DOWNTOWN - NIGHT SUPER: SATURDAY, MAY 30, 2020 Protests fill the streets. MARIA (V.O.) Or so we thought.
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INT MARTINO HOUSE / LIVING ROOM NIGHT
INT. MARTINO HOUSE / LIVING ROOM - NIGHT
INT. MARTINO HOUSE / LIVING ROOM - NIGHT David and Serena sit in front of the TV. INSERT - TV SCREEN A REPORTER (30s), stands in front of the protest chaos, speaks into his microphone. His face lit by the cameras.
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INT HOSPITAL / PATIENT ROOM DAY
INT. HOSPITAL / PATIENT ROOM - DAY
INT. HOSPITAL / PATIENT ROOM - DAY Maria records the vitals into her laptop, perched on a pushcart. The patient, MR. EDWARDS (50s), overweight, pasty complexion, watches TV.
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EXT. SEATTLE SKYLINE DAY
-EXT. SEATTLE SKYLINE - DAY
-EXT. SEATTLE SKYLINE - DAY Wildfire smoke blankets the city. The Space Needle barely visible. MARIA (V.O.) We stayed inside again. Not for a
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INT. HARBORVIEW MEDICAL CENTER / VACCINE CLINIC DAY
-INT. HARBORVIEW MEDICAL CENTER / VACCINE CLINIC - DAY
-INT. HARBORVIEW MEDICAL CENTER / VACCINE CLINIC - DAY SUPER: DECEMBER 2020 AMY FRY, ICU Nurse, receives the first vaccine. She smiles behind a mask - it shows in her eyes. MARIA (V.O.)
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INT MARIA’S HOUSE / BEDROOM NIGHT
INT. MARIA’S HOUSE / BEDROOM - NIGHT
INT. MARIA’S HOUSE / BEDROOM - NIGHT Maria sits at her desk, on a Zoom meeting with Matteo. INSERT - COMPUTER SCREEN Matteo and Maria’s faces appear side by side. MATTEO (V.O.)
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INT HOSPITAL / NURSES’ STATION DAY
INT. HOSPITAL / NURSES’ STATION - DAY
INT. HOSPITAL / NURSES’ STATION - DAY Maria stands with Doctor Stephens. DOCTOR STEPHENS They’re seeking approval for a third dose - boosters that will
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INT HOSPITAL / STAFF MEETING DAY
INT. HOSPITAL / STAFF MEETING - DAY
INT. HOSPITAL / STAFF MEETING - DAY SUPER: AUGUST 9, 2021 A slide reads: Proclamation 21-14. Vaccine Mandate. The HR Rep stands in front of the room, addresses the STAFF. HR REP
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INT AUDITORIUM NIGHT
INT. AUDITORIUM - NIGHT
INT. AUDITORIUM - NIGHT The room is dark. A girl’s voice calls out. VOICE (V.O.) Hello? Is somebody there? A few murmurs ripple through the AUDIENCE.
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EXT UNIVERSITY OF WASHINGTON/ BALL FIELD NIGHT
EXT. UNIVERSITY OF WASHINGTON/ BALL FIELD - NIGHT (FLASHBACK)
EXT. UNIVERSITY OF WASHINGTON/ BALL FIELD - NIGHT (FLASHBACK) The stadium lights shine down. Brady, in his Huskies uniform, steps up to bat. He spots his family in the stands - David, Serena, Isabella, Matteo, and Maria.

SIX FEET TOO FAR

Through a grandmother's eyes, explore how a global pandemic forces a multigenerational family to confront loss, resilience, and redefined normalcy.

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Overview

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Unique Selling Point

This screenplay offers a unique, multi-generational perspective on the COVID-19 pandemic that balances personal family drama with broader societal commentary, capturing both the intimate struggles of lockdown and the larger political/cultural divisions that emerged during this historic period.

AI Verdict & Suggestions

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GPT5
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Average Score: 7.7
Key Takeaways
For the Writer:
The script's emotional core — Maria, a veteran nurse caught between professional duty and personal conviction — is strong but currently undercut by an unresolved central conflict and frequent voiceover exposition. Focus your next draft on dramatizing Maria’s vaccine/mandate choice into a clear, consequential climax (don’t let it read as a personal aside). Tighten the second act by reducing montage/VO that summarize feelings and instead show the impact of decisions through decisive scenes: an HR showdown that forces a legal or career outcome, a family fracture or reunion that visibly pays off the choice, and one concentrated emotional beat that resolves (or decisively complicates) Serena’s arrest and Brady/Matteo subplots. Trim episodic detours so each subplot feeds the main arc and provide explicit payoffs for the major emotional investments (Brady’s recruitment, Matteo’s evaluation, Serena’s arrest).
For Executives:
SIX FEET TOO FAR is a timely, emotionally rich family drama with commercial appeal to adult and awards-minded audiences — it humanizes the pandemic through vivid domestic scenes and authentic hospital detail. But the script carries material risks: the film currently reads as narratively diffuse and politically ambiguous (especially around the vaccine/mandate plot), which could limit broad audience buy-in and invite polarized critical reaction. To be market-ready, the screenplay needs a tightened structure with a definitive protagonist climax and clear resolution of the largest stakes (Maria’s employment/conscience arc and the legal fallout from Serena’s arrest). With those revisions, this becomes a producible, high‑profile character piece for prestige SVOD or limited theatrical release; without them it may feel episodic and underdelivered.
Story Facts

Genres: Drama, Family, Slice of Life, Family Drama, Sports, Thriller, Medical, Mystery, Coming-of-Age, Social Commentary, Musical

Setting: 2019-2021, spanning the COVID-19 pandemic and its aftermath, Seattle, Washington, including various settings such as parks, homes, hospitals, schools, and a beauty parlor

Themes: Isolation and Loneliness, Resilience and Adaptation, Loss of Personal Choice, Family and Connection, Social Justice and Awareness, Hope and Renewal

Conflict & Stakes: The family navigates the emotional and practical challenges posed by the COVID-19 pandemic, including health risks, social isolation, and the impact on their children's futures.

Mood: Reflective and poignant, with moments of warmth and tension.

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The story's exploration of a family's dynamics during the COVID-19 pandemic, highlighting personal and societal challenges.
  • Major Twist: The unexpected arrest of Serena during a peaceful protest, which serves as a pivotal moment in the narrative.
  • Innovative Ideas: The use of Zoom calls and virtual interactions to depict the impact of social distancing on family relationships.
  • Distinctive Settings: The contrast between vibrant pre-pandemic life and the stark realities of lockdown and social distancing.
  • Genre Blend: A mix of family drama, social commentary, and elements of a coming-of-age story.

Comparable Scripts: The Pursuit of Happyness, Little Fires Everywhere, This Is Us, A Beautiful Day in the Neighborhood, The Fault in Our Stars, The Glass Castle, COVID Diaries NYC, The Book Thief, The Help

Script Level Analysis

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Overall Score: 8.08
Key Suggestions:
Tighten the screenplay by deepening key character arcs (especially David and Serena) and by trimming repetitive lockdown beats and voice-over exposition. Give secondary characters clearer internal conflicts and pivotal moments that force choices; show those shifts visually rather than telling them from Maria’s narration. Small structural edits—merging or cutting routine scenes, adding one or two catalytic confrontations, and converting voiced reflections into actions or symbolic visuals—will sharpen emotional stakes and make the ending feel earned.
Story Critique

Big-picture feedback on the story’s clarity, stakes, cohesion, and engagement.

Key Suggestions:
The script’s strength is its humane, multi-generational portrait of a family in crisis, but it currently tries to carry too many major threads. Pick one clear throughline (for example Maria’s conflict with the vaccine mandate and its professional/personal fallout) and make every subplot directly feed that central arc. Reduce expository voice-over by showing character through decisive scenes and tighten the middle so each scene escalates the core dilemma. Finally, give a more decisive, emotionally earned ending that shows how the family has changed because of that central conflict.
Characters

Explores the depth, clarity, and arc of the main and supporting characters.

Key Suggestions:
The character work is strong—Maria functions as the emotional and thematic anchor, with well-drawn supporting family members—but the screenplay relies heavily on voice-over and passive moments to deliver emotional beats. Tighten Maria's arc by converting reflective voice-over into active scenes: give her a clear midpoint decision, visible consequences for her acts of defiance (professional and personal), and a concrete resolution that ties to the family's journey. Do the same for secondary characters by converting static reactions into choices that change relationships (e.g., Brady's pivot to music should be an explicit, earned choice; Serena's arrest should trigger a moral reckoning that furthers her growth). In short: show transformation through behavior and consequence rather than explain it in narration.
Emotional Analysis

Breaks down the emotional journey of the audience across the script.

Key Suggestions:
The screenplay's emotional core is powerful—anchored by Maria and family moments—but the middle third becomes a sustained, high-intensity ledger of anxiety and grief that risks numbing the audience. Rebalance pacing by inserting deliberate emotional 'breathers' (small, genuine levity or human connection), deepen and resolve secondary arcs (especially Serena and Matteo), and make the hopeful beats (reopening, vaccines, final dances) more specific and earned. Practically: add 2–4 short scenes that provide contrast (dark humor among staff, a small family triumph, a private reckoning), lengthen transitional moments after major blows so viewers can process, and tighten payoff scenes so emotional recovery feels earned rather than abrupt.
Goals and Philosophical Conflict

Evaluates character motivations, obstacles, and sources of tension throughout the plot.

Key Suggestions:
The script has a rich, humane center in Maria’s arc—balancing care, grief, and moral choice during the pandemic—but the emotional payoff would be stronger if her internal conflict (compassion vs. compliance) were made more concrete and earned. Tighten and front-load the beats that force Maria to choose (e.g., patient advocacy vs. hospital rules, family risk vs. professional duty), and make the consequences of her choices visible so the audience can track how each decision shifts her stance. Trim peripheral plot detours and double down on scenes that escalate the philosophical tension so Maria’s eventual resolution feels inevitable rather than reassuringly summarised in voice-over.
Themes

Analysis of the themes of the screenplay and how well they’re expressed.

Key Suggestions:
The script has a strong, lived-in portrait of a family wresting with pandemic life, but it reads episodic and sometimes diffuse. Tighten the emotional through-line by centering the story on a decisive, character-driven conflict tied to the stated primary theme (the pandemic's impact on personal freedoms and family dynamics). Make Maria’s moral and practical choices (e.g., her return to the COVID unit, her reaction to the vaccine mandate) the catalytic spine that forces other characters to change. Reduce repetitive montage beats and convert some expository voice-over into scenes that dramatize consequence and choice—this will increase urgency and make the themes feel earned rather than summarized.
Logic & Inconsistencies

Highlights any contradictions, plot holes, or logic gaps that may confuse viewers.

Key Suggestions:
The script's emotional core — a family's endurance through the pandemic — is strong, but credibility is weakened by one pivotal sequence: Serena's park arrest and the surrounding escalation. Fixing this will preserve character integrity (Serena's generally patient nature) and keep audience trust. Either deepen the lead-up (show growing tension, clearer enforcement, or Serena's breaking point) or rework the incident so the conflict arises from believable pressure points (an overzealous officer, a viral social-media clip, or prior warnings). Also tighten redundant voice-over beats and consolidate repetitive COVID-update scenes to sharpen pacing and thematic impact.

Scene Analysis

All of your scenes analyzed individually and compared, so you can zero in on what to improve.

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Writer Exec

This section looks at the extra spark — your story’s voice, style, world, and the moments that really stick. These insights might not change the bones of the script, but they can make it more original, more immersive, and way more memorable. It’s where things get fun, weird, and wonderfully you.

Unique Voice

Assesses the distinctiveness and personality of the writer's voice.

Key Suggestions:
Your screenplay's voice is emotionally rich and compassionate, anchored by Maria's quiet strength and the family's lived-in details. To strengthen the script, tighten the narrative by turning internal narration into observable choices: let Maria's inner conflicts and convictions play out through actions and escalating scenes rather than extensive voice-over. Clarify and sharpen Maria’s through-line — her moral/ethical dilemma (compassion vs. rules, choice vs. mandate) — so that each scene pushes that arc forward. Trim or variabilize voice-over usage, deepen show-don't-tell moments, and ensure supporting characters' reactions create clear cause-and-effect stakes for Maria's decisions.
Writer's Craft

Analyzes the writing to help the writer be aware of their skill and improve.

Key Suggestions:
The script has strong emotional beats and a clear thematic throughline, but its impact will hinge on sharpening the dialogue and clarifying interior stakes. Prioritize rewrites that deepen subtext (what characters don’t say), compress scenes that linger, and add small physical beats or silences to reveal internal conflict. Practical work: run focused dialogue exercises, draft short monologues for key characters (especially Maria and Brady), and stage a few table reads to find natural rhythms. Use the recommended screenplay and craft books as models for balancing heart and economy.
Memorable Lines
Spotlights standout dialogue lines with emotional or thematic power.
Tropes
Highlights common or genre-specific tropes found in the script.
World Building

Evaluates the depth, consistency, and immersion of the story's world.

Key Suggestions:
The screenplay has a powerful and timely sweep of events, but its world-scale detail sometimes dilutes the emotional throughline. Anchor the story more tightly to one or two POVs (Maria is the strongest candidate) and prune or re-order scenes that function primarily as news-montage rather than character-driven beats. Make each pandemic or protest image earn its place by showing how it changes characters' choices and relationships — not just as atmospheric backdrop. Tighten transition scenes and clarify the arc (what Maria wants, what she loses, and how she changes) so the audience has a single emotional thread to follow amid the historical sweep.
Correlations

Identifies patterns in scene scores.

Key Suggestions:
To enhance the script's emotional resonance and pacing, consider balancing high emotional impact scenes with stronger narrative momentum. While emotionally charged moments are essential for character development, they should also serve to advance the plot. Evaluate reflective scenes to ensure they lead to character growth rather than stagnation, and explore ways to increase the audience's emotional connection during tense moments to maximize their impact.
Loglines
Presents logline variations based on theme, genre, and hook.