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Scene Map 53
# PG SLUGLINE
1 1
SON OF A PREACHER MAN
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EXT FOREST - OVERFLOW DAM DAY
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INT HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE DAY
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE DAY
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INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM (1990)
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EXT SIERRA CITY - MOUNTAIN ROAD DAY
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INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY - SAME
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - PORCH CONTINUOUS
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EXT HIDDEN CREEK MOMENTS LATER
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE MOMENTS LATER
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INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE NIGHT
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE NIGHT
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INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LATER THAT NIGHT
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INT HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE NIGHT
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INT HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE - SAME
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INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - C.J.’S ROOM DAWN
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EXT FIELD MOMENTS LATER
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE MORNING
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EXT BUS STOP CONTINUOUS
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INT SCHOOL BUS MORNING
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EXT SIERRA CITY ELEMENTARY SCHOOL DAY
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EXT DEER RIVER MOMENTS LATER
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EXT DEER RIVER MOMENTS LATER
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EXT SIERRA COUNTY FAIRGROUNDS EVENING
25 57
INT CATHY’S VW BUG DAY
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INT OLD SIERRA THEATER - LOBBY MOMENTS LATER
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EXT SHAWN’S COTTAGE DAY
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INT OLD SIERRA THEATER - SANCTUARY DAY
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EXT HIDDEN CREEK - ANOTHER DAY (1982)
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EXT SAN FRANCISCO - MARKET STREET DAY
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INT HIS WAY CHURCH - SANCTUARY NIGHT
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EXT OVERFLOW DAM DAY
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INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM MORNING
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EXT FOREST - OVERFLOW DAM DAY
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EXT DEER RIVER NIGHT
36 83
INT HIS WAY CHURCH - LOBBY MOMENTS LATER
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EXT HIS WAY CHURCH - SUNRISE CONTINUOUS
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INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - C.J.'S ROOM - LATER THAT DAWN
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INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - KITCHEN MORNING
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE MOMENTS LATER
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE DAY
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EXT SIERRA CITY - DOWNTOWN - (1990)
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INT HIS WAY CHURCH - FELLOWSHIP HALL DAY
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INT HIS WAY CHURCH - SANCTUARY LATER
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INT HIS WAY CHURCH - MEN’S ROOM LATER
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY LATER
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INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM CONTINUOUS
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INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM DAY
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT YARD DAY
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT LATER
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INT HARRIS HOUSE - C.J.’S BEDROOM LATER
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT PORCH DAY
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INT ROTTEN ROBBIE TRUCK STOP LATER
Scene Map
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# PG SLUGLINE
1 1
SON OF A PREACHER MAN
SON OF A PREACHER MAN
SON OF A PREACHER MAN Written by P.J. Palmer -- White lines of a distant jet ripple across a crystal sky.
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EXT FOREST - OVERFLOW DAM DAY
EXT. FOREST - OVERFLOW DAM - DAY (1982)
EXT. FOREST - OVERFLOW DAM - DAY (1982) Water glides silent and heavy across the spillway into a deep green basin below. At the edge, C.J. HARRIS (10) - skinny in cutoffs and a tank top - his hair in a bowl-cut, sits cross-legged.
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INT HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE DAY
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE - DAY (1990)
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE - DAY (1990) SUPER: 1990 Muffled preaching bleeds through the walls. C.J. (17), sits atop the desk. His dirty-blonde hair in a short mullet. A suit jacket. Pegged pants. Red Converse.
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE DAY
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY (1990)
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY (1990) C.J. exits the van with Jessie, Erin, Andy and Ryan. CATHY Mom. You can’t stay with us if you’re gonna smoke with the oxygen
5 14
INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM (1990)
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM (1990)
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM (1990) The kids watch TV. Cathy dumps laundry onto the couch. CATHY Nope. Jessie, Erin, help fold. Boys, get your butts outside.
6 16
EXT SIERRA CITY - MOUNTAIN ROAD DAY
EXT. SIERRA CITY - MOUNTAIN ROAD - DAY (1982)
EXT. SIERRA CITY - MOUNTAIN ROAD - DAY (1982) A deafening roar. Sunlight flashes off chrome. A pack of Harleys rip below the pines, engines snarling in the soft mountain air. Craig Harris (28), shirtless and lean, leads the pack. His
7 17
INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY - SAME
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY - SAME
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY - SAME Music blares from a turntable on moving boxes. Lawn chairs for furniture. Cocaine on a plate. Rifles against the wall. The Brady Bunch flickers on a small TV. On the floor: a five-gallon glass jug filled with coins,
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - PORCH CONTINUOUS
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - PORCH - CONTINUOUS
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - PORCH - CONTINUOUS UNCLE MARK (19), long hair and wispy goatee, in an Oakland Raiders t-shirt, lies on a skateboard, his polio-twisted legs dragging behind him. He nods toward REBECCA (30s), sweeping the porch of the
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EXT HIDDEN CREEK MOMENTS LATER
EXT. HIDDEN CREEK - MOMENTS LATER
EXT. HIDDEN CREEK - MOMENTS LATER C.J. wanders down a narrow path to a small clearing where sunbeams fracture across shallow pools. The creek winds around discarded milling machines. He kicks off his flip-flops and steps into the water. Popeye
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE MOMENTS LATER
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - MOMENTS LATER
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - MOMENTS LATER Cathy (28), summer dress, hair pulled back with a bandanna, whistles again with her fingers. C.J. comes running from the woods: C.J.
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INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE NIGHT
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - NIGHT (1982)
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - NIGHT (1982) C.J., bathed and in his pajamas, locks the back door, closes the blinds, turns off unused lights. Lady follows him. He looks past the blanket door into the -- BEDROOM
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE NIGHT
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - NIGHT
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - NIGHT Music plays from the El Camino’s radio. C.J. trots with Lady to the dairy truck, peers inside: a gas lantern glows. CRAIG (O.C.) Which hand?
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INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LATER THAT NIGHT
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LATER THAT NIGHT
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LATER THAT NIGHT ‘70’s rock plays on the radio. Sugar Ray Leonard boxes on TV. C.J. in a tank top, wipes the tears from his red eyes with the back of his boxing glove. Craig warns C.J.: CRAIG
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INT HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE NIGHT
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE - NIGHT (1990)
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE - NIGHT (1990) The office turned youth group meeting room. About twenty TEENS sit scattered on the carpet, loose and tired at the tail end of youth group. Beside the door, a TALENT SHOW SIGN-UP sheet. C.J.’s name is
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INT HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE - SAME
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE - SAME
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE - SAME C.J.'s eyes snap open. Owen jerks awake -- and off C.J. so fast he nearly knocks into Derek beside him. Zach, Ezra, Jessie and the other teens sit dead still. Craig stares at Owen.
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INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - C.J.’S ROOM DAWN
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - C.J.’S ROOM - DAWN (1990)
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - C.J.’S ROOM - DAWN (1990) The sharp cries of Baby Scotty echo through the dark house. C.J. (17) stirs awake, groans. His mullet at odd angles. He pulls on his jeans, finds coins in the pocket - drops into his glass jug.
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EXT FIELD MOMENTS LATER
EXT. FIELD - MOMENTS LATER
EXT. FIELD - MOMENTS LATER The ranch is a world of silhouettes. The sky shifts from black to deep blue. C.J. trails Craig into a stand of cherry trees. Craig drops
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE MORNING
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - MORNING (1982)
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - MORNING (1982) C.J. (10), with his bowl-cut combed tight and dressed for school, stands with Jessie (8). They stare at the neighbor’s cottage - Lady and Popeye at their side. Shawn, bounds out of his house in his Boy Scouts uniform with
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EXT BUS STOP CONTINUOUS
EXT. BUS STOP - CONTINUOUS
EXT. BUS STOP - CONTINUOUS The kids and pets emerge from the pine trees at a turn-out where Derek and Ezra (10), compare “Star Wars” trading cards. SHAWN (under his breath)
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INT SCHOOL BUS MORNING
INT. SCHOOL BUS - MORNING (1990)
INT. SCHOOL BUS - MORNING (1990) C.J. (17) sleeps, his head against the window. ZACH (O.C.) Mind if I sit? C.J. opens one eye to find Zach (17) standing next to his
21 47
EXT SIERRA CITY ELEMENTARY SCHOOL DAY
EXT. SIERRA CITY ELEMENTARY SCHOOL - DAY (1982)
EXT. SIERRA CITY ELEMENTARY SCHOOL - DAY (1982) Bells ring. Doors push open. SCHOOL CHILDREN flood out toward yellow buses. C.J. (10), and Jessie (8), spot Craig across the street on his Harley. St. Nick and Genie share a bike. Uncle Mark waits
22 48
EXT DEER RIVER MOMENTS LATER
EXT. DEER RIVER - MOMENTS LATER
EXT. DEER RIVER - MOMENTS LATER The bikers and El Camino pull up near an old school bus painted with rainbows, flowers, crosses: “THE JESUS BUS” C.J. and Jessie hop out with Lady and sprint to the water. Downriver, Pastor Norm (40s), loose white linen, flowing
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EXT DEER RIVER MOMENTS LATER
EXT. DEER RIVER - MOMENTS LATER
EXT. DEER RIVER - MOMENTS LATER The El Camino parks near a waterfall thundering into a clear pool, out of sight of the Jesus Bus. NUDISTS soak in the last heat of summer. St. Nick and Genie strip and dive in.
24 54
EXT SIERRA COUNTY FAIRGROUNDS EVENING
EXT. SIERRA COUNTY FAIRGROUNDS - EVENING (1990)
EXT. SIERRA COUNTY FAIRGROUNDS - EVENING (1990) Hidden behind the Log Flume, Owen, Ezra and Derek (all 17) pass an apple made into a bong. C.J. (17) stays focused on pegging his jeans above his red Converse, pretending not to care.
25 57
INT CATHY’S VW BUG DAY
INT. CATHY’S VW BUG - DAY (1982)
INT. CATHY’S VW BUG - DAY (1982) Wind blows C.J.’s (10) fresh, tight new haircut. His hand riding the wind out the window of Cathy’s VW. Orange and yellow leaves drift down to blanket the road. Jessie (8) stands on the backseat, her hair in new ribbons.
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INT OLD SIERRA THEATER - LOBBY MOMENTS LATER
INT. OLD SIERRA THEATER - LOBBY - MOMENTS LATER
INT. OLD SIERRA THEATER - LOBBY - MOMENTS LATER A rush of bodies and music and welcome. Handshakes and coffee. Kids darts past. Somebody laughing too loud. C.J. takes in the crowd: Young, happy, clean people. He spots a scale-model of a modern house-shaped building on
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EXT SHAWN’S COTTAGE DAY
EXT. SHAWN’S COTTAGE - DAY (1982)
EXT. SHAWN’S COTTAGE - DAY (1982) Fog lifts between the evergreens into the overcast sky above. C.J. waits in his Royal Ranger uniform with Lady and Popeye. Shawn bursts out of his cottage in his Boy Scout uniform and a buck knife strapped to his leg. They run off shoulder-to-
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INT OLD SIERRA THEATER - SANCTUARY DAY
INT. OLD SIERRA THEATER - SANCTUARY - DAY (1982)
INT. OLD SIERRA THEATER - SANCTUARY - DAY (1982) C.J., Jessie and Cathy stand stiff in the front row, hair combed tight, dressed modestly. They try to sing with Craig. Pastor Norm and Janis perform onstage in flowing white linen. Owen plays the tambourine.
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EXT HIDDEN CREEK - ANOTHER DAY (1982)
EXT. HIDDEN CREEK - ANOTHER DAY (1982)
EXT. HIDDEN CREEK - ANOTHER DAY (1982) A light rain drizzles as fall moves to winter. C.J. and Shawn, in raincoats, pull a huge cedar branch. C.J. Sometimes we drink blood. But
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EXT SAN FRANCISCO - MARKET STREET DAY
EXT. SAN FRANCISCO - MARKET STREET - DAY (1982)
EXT. SAN FRANCISCO - MARKET STREET - DAY (1982) A PERFORMANCE TROUPE in matching overalls and yellow t-shirts hold a sheet painted with: “JESUS SAVES” Craig and a very pregnant Cathy stand with Pastor Norm,
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INT HIS WAY CHURCH - SANCTUARY NIGHT
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - SANCTUARY - NIGHT (1990)
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - SANCTUARY - NIGHT (1990) C.J. (17) in his mullet and Miami Vice-esque jacket, sits in a pew with Owen, Derek and Ezra (all 17, in Cosby sweaters). Ahead of them: Cathy and Jessie with their Aqua-Net hair and the younger Harris kids.
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EXT OVERFLOW DAM DAY
EXT. OVERFLOW DAM - DAY (1990)
EXT. OVERFLOW DAM - DAY (1990) Fog lifts off the deep lake, drifting through the evergreens. C.J. walks the narrow dam alone. He pulls chalk from his pocket, draws on the concrete like he did as a kid. He stands at the edge, red hi-tops peeking over open space.
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INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM MORNING
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM - MORNING (1990)
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM - MORNING (1990) C.J. jolts awake on the couch, gasping. Disoriented. He looks down. A wet spot spreads across his pants. Evelyn crosses past in her robe and wig, coffee in hand. EVELYN
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EXT FOREST - OVERFLOW DAM DAY
EXT. FOREST - OVERFLOW DAM - DAY (1982)
EXT. FOREST - OVERFLOW DAM - DAY (1982) Light snow drifts over the partially frozen lake. C.J. (10) and Shawn (10) sit on the narrow dam, bundled in layers. C.J. wears plastic Wonder Bread bags over his socks. Lady and Popeye trail behind.
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EXT DEER RIVER NIGHT
EXT. DEER RIVER - NIGHT (1990)
EXT. DEER RIVER - NIGHT (1990) A massive BONFIRE roars beside the river, throwing wild light across TEENS in graduation caps and gowns - their silhouettes dance against smoke and the waterfall. A CHAINSAW screams somewhere in the dark.
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INT HIS WAY CHURCH - LOBBY MOMENTS LATER
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - LOBBY - MOMENTS LATER
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - LOBBY - MOMENTS LATER Silhouettes of C.J., cowboy hat on, and Owen with keys outside the glass front doors. OWEN (O.C.)
37 88
EXT HIS WAY CHURCH - SUNRISE CONTINUOUS
EXT. HIS WAY CHURCH - SUNRISE - CONTINUOUS
EXT. HIS WAY CHURCH - SUNRISE - CONTINUOUS Owen storms into the empty parking lot, still buttoning his jeans. His fingers miss the buttonholes. C.J. follows, barefoot, soaked, clutching his clothes and the cowboy hat.
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INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - C.J.'S ROOM - LATER THAT DAWN
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - C.J.'S ROOM - LATER THAT DAWN
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - C.J.'S ROOM - LATER THAT DAWN C.J. carefully closes the door, trying not to wake the house. He rests Owen’s hat on the nightstand. The hat faces him. He turns the brim toward the wall. He sits on his bed. His hands shake.
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INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - KITCHEN MORNING
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - KITCHEN - MORNING (1982)
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - KITCHEN - MORNING (1982) Re-runs play on the T.V. Cathy (34) - long hair, visibly pregnant - clears plates. A thick Bible lies open. Jessie (8) counts as Craig (34) does push-ups in his boxers. C.J (10) pets Popeye, who lies listless in a cardboard box.
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE MOMENTS LATER
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - MOMENTS LATER
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - MOMENTS LATER Rain drizzles on Shawn and Sarah as they bound out of their cottage across the road. C.J. and Jessie come out their own front door with Lady. SARAH
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE DAY
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY (1982)
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY (1982) C.J. stands in a shirt and tie, tears streaming down his face. He holds a shoebox labeled: POPEYE. He places the box in a hole under a cross made of sticks surrounded by wildflowers.
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EXT SIERRA CITY - DOWNTOWN - (1990)
EXT. SIERRA CITY - DOWNTOWN - (1990)
EXT. SIERRA CITY - DOWNTOWN - (1990) A quarter drops into a payphone. C.J. dials the Glendale number on Zach’s scrap of paper. He fishes out several more coins from his pocket. Drops them into the phone. His conversation is muted by passing traffic.
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INT HIS WAY CHURCH - FELLOWSHIP HALL DAY
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - FELLOWSHIP HALL - DAY (1990)
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - FELLOWSHIP HALL - DAY (1990) Dozens of TEENS rehearse their various talents: ribbon dancing, foam puppets, tambourines. Jessie practices at the piano. Owen tunes his guitar. Over-tightens a peg. A string snaps.
44 99
INT HIS WAY CHURCH - SANCTUARY LATER
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - SANCTUARY - LATER
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - SANCTUARY - LATER The sanctuary is packed. The heavy, driving rock of PETRA - “Judas’ Kiss” cranks from the speakers. OWEN (O.S.) (singing)
45 101
INT HIS WAY CHURCH - MEN’S ROOM LATER
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - MEN’S ROOM - LATER
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - MEN’S ROOM - LATER C.J., still in his disco-suit, steps up to the urinal beside Zach. C.J. pees. C.J. Hey Zach.
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY LATER
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY - LATER
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY - LATER Craig slams the Youth Ministry van into the driveway and storms into the house. The family follows in silence, passing Evelyn on the porch: leisure suit, Dolly Parton wig, oxygen tube, cigarette.
47 106
INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM CONTINUOUS
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM - CONTINUOUS
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM - CONTINUOUS Andy and Ryan sprawl with Erin, watching THE COSBY SHOW reruns on a small TV. CANNED LAUGHTER fills the room. C.J. enters, still in his disco suit. He steps over the kids and heads for the stairs. Another LAUGH TRACK HIT. Jessie
48 111
INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM DAY
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM - DAY (1982)
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM - DAY (1982) Rain at the windows. Sit-com reruns low on the TV. C.J. (10), in his Royal Ranger uniform, cuts travel ads beside his 5-gallon coin jug, already covered with the Hollywood sign, the Brady Bunch house, a four-door car, and
49 111
EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT YARD DAY
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT YARD - DAY (1990)
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT YARD - DAY (1990) Limp balloons and loose streamers. A crooked banner reads: HAPPY 18TH BIRTHDAY A table holds the remains of a strawberry-topped cake. The Harris kids run and play. Janis and a few CHURCH LADIES
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT LATER
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT - LATER
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT - LATER Uncle Mark’s El Camino sits in the driveway. C.J. stands beside it, waiting for the punchline. UNCLE MARK Don’t look so excited.
51 117
INT HARRIS HOUSE - C.J.’S BEDROOM LATER
INT. HARRIS HOUSE - C.J.’S BEDROOM - LATER
INT. HARRIS HOUSE - C.J.’S BEDROOM - LATER C.J. packs clothes into boxes. Photos of Popeye and Lady sit nearby. Jessie enters: JESSIE What’s with everyone being here
52 118
EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT PORCH DAY
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT PORCH - DAY (1990)
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT PORCH - DAY (1990) Sunlight dances through the evergreens onto C.J. sitting on a kitchen stool. Cathy cuts his hair with clippers. Lady rests at his feet. CATHY
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INT ROTTEN ROBBIE TRUCK STOP LATER
INT. ROTTEN ROBBIE TRUCK STOP - LATER
INT. ROTTEN ROBBIE TRUCK STOP - LATER C.J. pays for gas and a new Thomas Guide with coins. The ATTENDANT (60s) watches him count, says nothing. EXT. ROTTEN ROBBIE TRUCK STOP - MOMENTS LATER

SON OF A PREACHER MAN

As the golden-boy son of a fire-and-brimstone preacher, a closeted teenager performs public faith while privately drowning in desire and doubt, until a talent-show rebellion forces him to choose between salvation and self on the eve of his escape.

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Overview

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Unique Selling Proposition

Where most coming-out narratives build toward a confrontation or liberation, this script withholds both — loss arrives as formal structure rather than dramatic event, and the people who fail C.J. simply disappear from the story the way they disappear from a life, leaving only objects behind: a red Converse, a black cowboy hat, a chalk drawing washed away by water.

AI Verdict

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DeepSeek
 Recommend
Score 7.5
GPT5
 Recommend
Score 7.8
Grok
 Recommend
Score 7.3
Gemini
 Recommend
Score 8.0
Claude
 Recommend
Score 7.8
Average Score: 7.7
Key Takeaways
For the Writer:
To strengthen the script's emotional core, focus on re-anchoring C.J.'s desire in the second act by introducing concrete, scene-specific objectives that drive his actions rather than leaving him reactive. This will enhance narrative momentum and ensure the motif system and POV discipline pay off more powerfully in the climax, while preserving the memory-logic structure that defines the script's artistic voice. Additionally, address tonal inconsistencies in comedic or rebellious sequences by threading in C.J.'s interiority to make them feel more integrated with the overall dread and tenderness.
For Executives:
The script offers strong value as a festival-arthouse drama with distinctive formal elements like a motif-driven structure and strict POV, appealing to prestige audiences through its emotional depth and themes of religious trauma. However, risks include structural weaknesses in the second act that could lead to pacing issues and audience disengagement, potentially limiting commercial appeal beyond niche markets; it's not ready for broad release without revisions, as the tonal shifts and unresolved arcs might confuse general viewers or dilute impact in coverage.
Story Facts
Genres:
Drama 65% Romance 20% Comedy 15%

Setting: 1982 and 1990, Harris farm house, Sierra City, California, and various outdoor settings

Themes: Self-Acceptance and Authentic Identity, The Failure of Institutions (Religion and Family), Loss of Innocence and Coming of Age, The Search for Belonging and Connection, Existential Doubt and Faith Crisis, The Complexity of Family Dynamics, Freedom vs. Confinement, The Nature of Love and Relationships

Conflict & Stakes: C.J.'s struggle with his identity and family expectations, particularly regarding his sexuality and aspirations, against the backdrop of a conservative religious environment.

Mood: Bittersweet and introspective

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The exploration of a young man's journey to self-acceptance within a conservative religious family.
  • Innovative Ideas: The use of childhood memories and symbolism, such as the chalk drawings and the El Camino, to represent C.J.'s aspirations.
  • Distinctive Settings: The contrast between the rural setting of the Harris farm and the vibrant, chaotic atmosphere of church events.
  • Character Dynamics: The complex relationships between family members, particularly the tension between C.J. and Craig.

Comparable Scripts: The Perks of Being a Wallflower, Boyhood, Stand by Me, The Catcher in the Rye, A Separate Peace, The Fault in Our Stars, The Wonder Years, The Graduate, The Outsiders, The Edge of Seventeen

How 5 AI Readers Scored The Script

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Premise i
7.6
Plot i
6.6
Structure i
8.0
Character i
8.0
Dialogue i
7.2
Tone / Voice i
8.8
Theme i
8.6
Marketability i
7.6
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Script Level Analysis

Writer Exec

This section delivers a top-level assessment of the screenplay’s strengths and weaknesses — covering overall quality (P/C/R/HR), character development, emotional impact, thematic depth, narrative inconsistencies, and the story’s core philosophical conflict. It helps identify what’s resonating, what needs refinement, and how the script aligns with professional standards.

Screenplay Insights

Breaks down your script along various categories.

Overall Score: 7.99
Key Suggestions:
To elevate 'Son of a Preacher Man,' focus on deepening the emotional stakes of supporting characters like Owen and Shawn by adding subtle, reflective moments that explore their relationships with C.J. more thoroughly. This will enhance character arcs and emotional resonance, ensuring that their abrupt exits feel more impactful and tied to the central themes of loss and identity, ultimately making the narrative more cohesive and engaging from a craft perspective.
Story Critique

Big-picture feedback on the story’s clarity, stakes, cohesion, and engagement.

Key Suggestions:
To refine 'Son of a Preacher Man', emphasize strengthening foreshadowing throughout the script to make key events and character exits feel more inevitable and emotionally resonant, drawing from C.J.'s internal conflicts and past experiences. Additionally, enhance pacing by expanding introspective moments and adding clearer narrative hooks, such as connecting C.J.'s childhood dreams to present challenges early on, to create a more cohesive and impactful story that deeply explores themes of identity and loss.
Characters

Explores the depth, clarity, and arc of the main and supporting characters.

Key Suggestions:
The character analysis reveals that while the script effectively portrays internal conflicts and emotional depth, particularly in C.J. and Owen, there is room to enhance character arcs by incorporating more flashbacks and internal monologues to deepen emotional resonance. Focusing on exploring backstories and vulnerabilities, especially for C.J. and Craig, can make the narrative more compelling, ensuring that themes of identity and family are fully realized through nuanced character development and stronger relational dynamics.
Emotional Analysis

Breaks down the emotional journey of the audience across the script.

Key Suggestions:
The script's emotional core is strong in depicting C.J.'s struggles, but it suffers from a lack of variety and recovery in the 1990 timeline, leading to repetitive sadness and intensity that could fatigue audiences. To improve, incorporate more balanced emotions like unalloyed joy or quiet reflection in key scenes, ensure characters have moments to process trauma, and add depth to secondary characters' motivations for greater empathy. This will create a more nuanced, engaging narrative that allows C.J.'s arc to breathe and resonate more deeply.
Goals and Philosophical Conflict

Evaluates character motivations, obstacles, and sources of tension throughout the plot.

Key Suggestions:
The analysis highlights C.J.'s compelling journey of self-discovery through internal and external goals, but to enhance the script's craft, focus on tightening the philosophical conflict resolutions to ensure they feel earned and emotionally resonant. By adding more nuanced foreshadowing and deeper interpersonal moments, particularly in scenes involving family dynamics and peer interactions, the writer can amplify thematic depth and character authenticity, making C.J.'s departure more impactful and reducing any potential melodrama in the resolution.
Themes

Analysis of the themes of the screenplay and how well they’re expressed.

Key Suggestions:
To enhance the script's creative impact, focus on deepening C.J.'s internal monologue and key emotional beats, such as his interactions with Owen and Shawn, to make his journey toward self-acceptance more visceral and relatable. Strengthen the integration of supporting themes like institutional failure and loss of innocence by ensuring they serve the primary arc without overwhelming it, perhaps through subtle visual motifs or dialogue that echoes C.J.'s childhood aspirations. This will create a more cohesive narrative and amplify the emotional resonance, making the story a powerful exploration of identity.
Logic & Inconsistencies

Highlights any contradictions, plot holes, or logic gaps that may confuse viewers.

Key Suggestions:
The script's core strength lies in its evocative themes of identity, religion, and loss, but key inconsistencies in character ages and point-of-view breaks undermine narrative cohesion. To enhance craft, focus on tightening timeline continuity and POV adherence to maintain immersive storytelling, while refining dialogue and motifs to avoid repetition and ensure authenticity, ultimately strengthening emotional resonance and audience connection.

Scene Analysis

All of your scenes analyzed individually and compared, so you can zero in on what to improve.

Scene-Level Percentile Chart
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Other Analyses

Writer Exec

This section looks at the extra spark — your story’s voice, style, world, and the moments that really stick. These insights might not change the bones of the script, but they can make it more original, more immersive, and way more memorable. It’s where things get fun, weird, and wonderfully you.

Unique Voice

Assesses the distinctiveness and personality of the writer's voice.

Key Suggestions:
Leverage the script's introspective and poetic voice to deepen character development and thematic resonance, but consider refining the pacing in montage-heavy scenes to maintain audience engagement and ensure that the raw emotional honesty doesn't overwhelm the narrative arc. Focus on balancing the sacred and profane elements to heighten authenticity while exploring subtle ways to infuse more hope or levity, preventing the melancholic tone from alienating viewers and enhancing the overall cathartic impact.
Writer's Craft

Analyzes the writing to help the writer be aware of their skill and improve.

Key Suggestions:
To enhance the screenplay's artistic depth, focus on deepening character backstories and motivations, refining dialogue to better capture subtext and emotional layers, and strengthening visual storytelling to more effectively convey themes and emotions, drawing from the analysis's recommendations to create a more resonant and cohesive narrative that elevates its indie appeal.
Memorable Lines
Spotlights standout dialogue lines with emotional or thematic power.
Tropes
Highlights common or genre-specific tropes found in the script.
World Building

Evaluates the depth, consistency, and immersion of the story's world.

Key Suggestions:
To elevate the script's creative craft, leverage the strong world building by ensuring that the surreal, nostalgic elements consistently reinforce C.J.'s internal conflict and emotional journey, avoiding any dilution of his first-person perspective. Consider refining transitions in the non-linear timeline to heighten thematic depth and pacing, drawing on the atmospheric contrasts (e.g., sacred vs. mundane) to amplify moments of failure and self-discovery, ultimately making C.J.'s arc more visceral and relatable for an art house audience.
Correlations

Identifies patterns in scene scores.

Key Suggestions:
The script's strength lies in its emotional depth and character-driven dialogue, but analysis reveals pacing issues in reflective and nostalgic scenes that could dilute tension and engagement. To enhance craft, focus on dynamically integrating motifs and tightening low-conflict sections to maintain introspective tone while ensuring the narrative progresses fluidly, preserving the indie art house essence without risking audience disinterest.
Loglines
Presents logline variations based on theme, genre, and hook.