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Scene Map 52
# PG SLUGLINE
1 1
SON OF A PREACHER MAN
2 2
EXT FOREST - OVERFLOW DAM DAY
3 3
INT HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE DAY
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE DAY
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INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM (1990)
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EXT SIERRA CITY - MOUNTAIN ROAD DAY
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INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY - SAME
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - PORCH CONTINUOUS
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EXT HIDDEN CREEK MOMENTS LATER
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE MOMENTS LATER
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INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE NIGHT
12 27
EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE NIGHT
13 30
INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LATER THAT NIGHT
14 32
INT HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE NIGHT
15 34
INT HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE - SAME
16 34
INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - C.J.’S ROOM DAWN
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EXT FIELD MOMENTS LATER
18 41
EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE MORNING
19 43
INT SCHOOL BUS CONTINUOUS
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INT SCHOOL BUS MORNING
21 47
EXT SIERRA CITY ELEMENTARY SCHOOL DAY
22 48
EXT DEER RIVER - BRIDGE MOMENTS LATER
23 51
EXT DEER RIVER MOMENTS LATER
24 55
EXT SIERRA COUNTY FAIRGROUNDS EVENING
25 58
INT CATHY’S VW BUG DAY
26 59
INT OLD SIERRA THEATER - LOBBY MOMENTS LATER
27 65
EXT SHAWN’S COTTAGE DAY
28 66
EXT HIDDEN CREEK - ANOTHER DAY (1982)
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EXT SAN FRANCISCO - MARKET STREET DAY
30 70
INT HIS WAY CHURCH - SANCTUARY NIGHT
31 76
EXT OVERFLOW DAM DAY
32 76
INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM MORNING
33 77
EXT FOREST - OVERFLOW DAM DAY
34 80
EXT DEER RIVER NIGHT
35 84
INT HIS WAY CHURCH - LOBBY MOMENTS LATER
36 88
EXT HIS WAY CHURCH - SUNRISE CONTINUOUS
37 89
INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - C.J.'S ROOM - LATER THAT DAWN
38 89
INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - KITCHEN MORNING
39 91
EXT BUS STOP CONTINUOUS
40 93
EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE DAY
41 95
EXT SIERRA CITY - DOWNTOWN - (1990)
42 96
INT HIS WAY CHURCH - FELLOWSHIP HALL DAY
43 99
INT HIS WAY CHURCH - SANCTUARY LATER
44 101
INT HIS WAY CHURCH - MEN’S ROOM LATER
45 105
EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY LATER
46 106
INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM CONTINUOUS
47 111
INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM DAY
48 112
EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT YARD DAY
49 114
EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT LATER
50 117
INT HARRIS HOUSE - C.J.’S BEDROOM LATER
51 119
EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT PORCH DAY
52 121
INT ROTTEN ROBBIE TRUCK STOP LATER
Scene Map
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# PG SLUGLINE
1 1
SON OF A PREACHER MAN
SON OF A PREACHER MAN
SON OF A PREACHER MAN Written by P.J. Palmer -- White lines of a distant jet ripple across a crystal sky.
2 2
EXT FOREST - OVERFLOW DAM DAY
EXT. FOREST - OVERFLOW DAM - DAY (1982)
EXT. FOREST - OVERFLOW DAM - DAY (1982) Water glides silent and heavy across the spillway into a deep green basin below. At the edge, C.J. HARRIS (10) - skinny in cutoffs and a tank top - his hair in a bowl-cut, sits cross-legged.
3 3
INT HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE DAY
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE - DAY (1990)
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE - DAY (1990) SUPER: 1990 Muffled preaching bleeds through the walls. C.J. (17), sits atop the desk. His dirty-blonde hair in a short mullet. A suit jacket. Pegged pants. Red Converse.
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE DAY
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY (1990)
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY (1990) C.J. exits the van with Jessie, Erin, Andy and Ryan. CATHY Mom. You can’t stay with us if you’re gonna smoke with the oxygen
5 14
INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM (1990)
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM (1990)
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM (1990) The kids watch TV. Cathy dumps laundry onto the couch. CATHY Nope. Jessie, Erin, help fold. Boys, get your butts outside.
6 17
EXT SIERRA CITY - MOUNTAIN ROAD DAY
EXT. SIERRA CITY - MOUNTAIN ROAD - DAY (1982)
EXT. SIERRA CITY - MOUNTAIN ROAD - DAY (1982) A deafening roar. Sunlight flashes off chrome. A pack of Harleys rip below the pines, engines snarling in the soft mountain air. Craig Harris (28), shirtless and lean, leads the pack. His
7 17
INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY - SAME
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY - SAME
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY - SAME Music blares from a turntable on moving boxes. Lawn chairs for furniture. Cocaine on a plate. Rifles against the wall. The Brady Bunch flickers on a small TV. On the floor: a five-gallon glass jug filled with coins,
8 18
EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - PORCH CONTINUOUS
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - PORCH - CONTINUOUS
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - PORCH - CONTINUOUS UNCLE MARK (19), long hair and wispy goatee, in an Oakland Raiders t-shirt, lies on a skateboard, his polio-twisted legs dragging behind him. He nods toward REBECCA (30s), sweeping the porch of the
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EXT HIDDEN CREEK MOMENTS LATER
EXT. HIDDEN CREEK - MOMENTS LATER
EXT. HIDDEN CREEK - MOMENTS LATER C.J. wanders down a narrow path to a small clearing where sunbeams fracture across shallow pools. The creek winds around discarded milling machines. He kicks off his flip-flops and steps into the water. Popeye
10 22
EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE MOMENTS LATER
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - MOMENTS LATER
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - MOMENTS LATER Cathy (28), summer dress, hair pulled back with a bandanna, whistles again with her fingers. C.J. comes running from the woods:
11 26
INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE NIGHT
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - NIGHT (1982)
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - NIGHT (1982) C.J., bathed and in his pajamas, locks the back door, closes the blinds, turns off unused lights. Lady follows him. He looks past the blanket door into the -- BEDROOM
12 27
EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE NIGHT
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - NIGHT
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - NIGHT Music plays from the El Camino’s radio. C.J. trots with Lady to the dairy truck, peers inside: a gas lantern glows. CRAIG (O.C.) Which hand?
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INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LATER THAT NIGHT
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LATER THAT NIGHT
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LATER THAT NIGHT ‘70’s rock plays on the radio. Sugar Ray Leonard boxes on TV. C.J. in a tank top, wipes the tears from his red eyes with the back of his boxing glove. Craig warns C.J.: CRAIG
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INT HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE NIGHT
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE - NIGHT (1990)
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE - NIGHT (1990) The office turned youth group meeting room. About twenty TEENS sit scattered on the carpet, loose and tired at the tail end of youth group.
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INT HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE - SAME
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE - SAME
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - CRAIG’S OFFICE - SAME C.J.'s eyes snap open. Owen jerks awake -- and off C.J. so fast he nearly knocks into Derek beside him. Zach, Ezra, Jessie and the other teens sit dead still. Craig stares at Owen.
16 34
INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - C.J.’S ROOM DAWN
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - C.J.’S ROOM - DAWN (1990)
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - C.J.’S ROOM - DAWN (1990) The sharp cries of Baby Scotty echo through the dark house. C.J. (17) stirs awake, groans. His mullet at odd angles. He pulls on his jeans, finds coins in the pocket - drops into his glass jug.
17 39
EXT FIELD MOMENTS LATER
EXT. FIELD - MOMENTS LATER
EXT. FIELD - MOMENTS LATER The ranch is a world of silhouettes. The sky shifts from black to deep blue. C.J. trails Craig into a stand of cherry trees. Craig drops behind the low stone wall and motions C.J. to
18 41
EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE MORNING
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - MORNING (1982)
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - MORNING (1982) C.J. (10), with his bowl-cut combed tight and dressed for school, stands with Jessie (8). They stare at the neighbor’s cottage - Lady and Popeye at their side. Shawn, bounds out of his house in his Boy Scouts uniform with
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INT SCHOOL BUS CONTINUOUS
INT. SCHOOL BUS - CONTINUOUS
INT. SCHOOL BUS - CONTINUOUS Derek, Ezra and Sarah make their way to the backseats where Owen (10), sits. C.J., Shawn and Jessie follow. OWEN (to Sarah)
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INT SCHOOL BUS MORNING
INT. SCHOOL BUS - MORNING (1990)
INT. SCHOOL BUS - MORNING (1990) C.J. (17) sleeps, his head against the window. ZACH (O.C.) Mind if I sit? C.J. opens one eye to find Zach (17) standing next to his
21 47
EXT SIERRA CITY ELEMENTARY SCHOOL DAY
EXT. SIERRA CITY ELEMENTARY SCHOOL - DAY (1982)
EXT. SIERRA CITY ELEMENTARY SCHOOL - DAY (1982) Bells ring. Doors push open. SCHOOL CHILDREN flood out toward yellow buses. C.J. (10), and Jessie (8), spot Craig across the street on his Harley. St. Nick and Genie share a bike. Uncle Mark waits
22 48
EXT DEER RIVER - BRIDGE MOMENTS LATER
EXT. DEER RIVER - BRIDGE - MOMENTS LATER
EXT. DEER RIVER - BRIDGE - MOMENTS LATER The hot sun beats down on bikers and El Camino. They cross a high bridge. The river churns far below. EXT. DEER RIVER - DIRT ROAD - MOMENTS LATER
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EXT DEER RIVER MOMENTS LATER
EXT. DEER RIVER - MOMENTS LATER
EXT. DEER RIVER - MOMENTS LATER The El Camino parks near a waterfall thundering into a clear pool, out of sight of the Jesus Bus. NUDISTS soak in the last heat of summer. St. Nick and Genie strip and dive in.
24 55
EXT SIERRA COUNTY FAIRGROUNDS EVENING
EXT. SIERRA COUNTY FAIRGROUNDS - EVENING (1990)
EXT. SIERRA COUNTY FAIRGROUNDS - EVENING (1990) Hidden behind the Log Flume, Owen, Ezra and Derek (all 17) pass an apple made into a bong. C.J. (17) stays focused on pegging his jeans above his red Converse, pretending not to care.
25 58
INT CATHY’S VW BUG DAY
INT. CATHY’S VW BUG - DAY (1982)
INT. CATHY’S VW BUG - DAY (1982) Wind blows C.J.’s (10) fresh, tight new haircut. His hand riding the wind out the window of Cathy’s VW. Orange and yellow leaves drift down to blanket the road. Jessie (8) stands on the backseat, her hair in new ribbons.
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INT OLD SIERRA THEATER - LOBBY MOMENTS LATER
INT. OLD SIERRA THEATER - LOBBY - MOMENTS LATER
INT. OLD SIERRA THEATER - LOBBY - MOMENTS LATER A rush of bodies and music and welcome. Handshakes and coffee. Kids darts past. Somebody laughing too loud. C.J. takes in the crowd: Young, happy, clean people. He spots a scale-model of a modern house-shaped building on
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EXT SHAWN’S COTTAGE DAY
EXT. SHAWN’S COTTAGE - DAY (1982)
EXT. SHAWN’S COTTAGE - DAY (1982) Fog lifts between the evergreens into the overcast sky above. C.J. waits in his Royal Ranger uniform with Lady and Popeye. Shawn bursts out of his cottage in his Boy Scout uniform and a buck knife strapped to his leg. They run off shoulder-to-
28 66
EXT HIDDEN CREEK - ANOTHER DAY (1982)
EXT. HIDDEN CREEK - ANOTHER DAY (1982)
EXT. HIDDEN CREEK - ANOTHER DAY (1982) A light rain drizzles as fall moves to winter. C.J. and Shawn, in raincoats, pull a huge cedar branch. C.J. Sometimes we drink blood. But
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EXT SAN FRANCISCO - MARKET STREET DAY
EXT. SAN FRANCISCO - MARKET STREET - DAY (1982)
EXT. SAN FRANCISCO - MARKET STREET - DAY (1982) A PERFORMANCE TROUPE in matching overalls and yellow t-shirts hold a sheet painted with: “JESUS SAVES”
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INT HIS WAY CHURCH - SANCTUARY NIGHT
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - SANCTUARY - NIGHT (1990)
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - SANCTUARY - NIGHT (1990) C.J. (17) in his mullet and Miami Vice-esque jacket, sits in a pew with Owen, Derek and Ezra (all 17, in Cosby sweaters). Ahead of them: Cathy and Jessie with their Aqua-Net hair and the younger Harris kids.
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EXT OVERFLOW DAM DAY
EXT. OVERFLOW DAM - DAY (1990)
EXT. OVERFLOW DAM - DAY (1990) Fog lifts off the deep lake, drifting through the evergreens. C.J. walks the narrow dam alone. He pulls chalk from his pocket, draws on the concrete like he did as a kid. He stands at the edge, red hi-tops peeking over open space.
32 76
INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM MORNING
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM - MORNING (1990)
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM - MORNING (1990) C.J. jolts awake on the couch, gasping. Disoriented. He looks down. A wet spot spreads across his pants. Evelyn crosses past in her robe and wig, coffee in hand.
33 77
EXT FOREST - OVERFLOW DAM DAY
EXT. FOREST - OVERFLOW DAM - DAY (1982)
EXT. FOREST - OVERFLOW DAM - DAY (1982) Light snow drifts over the partially frozen lake. C.J. (10) and Shawn (10) sit on the narrow dam, bundled in layers. C.J. wears plastic Wonder Bread bags over his socks. Lady and Popeye trail behind.
34 80
EXT DEER RIVER NIGHT
EXT. DEER RIVER - NIGHT (1990)
EXT. DEER RIVER - NIGHT (1990) A massive BONFIRE roars beside the river, throwing wild light across TEENS in graduation caps and gowns - their silhouettes dance against smoke and the waterfall. A CHAINSAW screams somewhere in the dark.
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INT HIS WAY CHURCH - LOBBY MOMENTS LATER
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - LOBBY - MOMENTS LATER
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - LOBBY - MOMENTS LATER Silhouettes of C.J., cowboy hat on, and Owen with keys outside the glass front doors. OWEN (O.C.) It’s the big one.
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EXT HIS WAY CHURCH - SUNRISE CONTINUOUS
EXT. HIS WAY CHURCH - SUNRISE - CONTINUOUS
EXT. HIS WAY CHURCH - SUNRISE - CONTINUOUS Owen storms into the empty parking lot, still buttoning his jeans. His fingers miss the buttonholes. C.J. follows, barefoot, soaked, clutching his clothes and the cowboy hat.
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INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - C.J.'S ROOM - LATER THAT DAWN
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - C.J.'S ROOM - LATER THAT DAWN
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - C.J.'S ROOM - LATER THAT DAWN C.J. carefully closes the door, trying not to wake the house. He rests Owen’s hat on the nightstand. The hat faces him. He turns the brim toward the wall. He sits on his bed. His hands shake.
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INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - KITCHEN MORNING
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - KITCHEN - MORNING (1982)
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - KITCHEN - MORNING (1982) Re-runs play on the T.V. Cathy (34) - long hair, visibly pregnant - clears plates. A thick Bible lies open. Jessie (8) counts as Craig (34) does push-ups in his boxers. C.J (10) pets Popeye, who lies listless in a cardboard box.
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EXT BUS STOP CONTINUOUS
EXT. BUS STOP - CONTINUOUS
EXT. BUS STOP - CONTINUOUS C.J. and Jessie reach the bus stop. Jessie waves to Sarah and Shawn across the road. An over-loaded pick-up truck lumbers between them with a line of cars behind it. The School Bus approaches in the distance.
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE DAY
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY (1982)
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY (1982) C.J. stands in a shirt and tie, tears streaming down his face. He holds a shoebox labeled: POPEYE. He places the box in a hole under a cross made of sticks surrounded by wildflowers.
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EXT SIERRA CITY - DOWNTOWN - (1990)
EXT. SIERRA CITY - DOWNTOWN - (1990)
EXT. SIERRA CITY - DOWNTOWN - (1990) A quarter drops into a payphone. C.J. dials the Glendale number on Zach’s scrap of paper. He fishes out several more coins from his pocket. Drops them into the phone. His conversation is muted by passing traffic.
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INT HIS WAY CHURCH - FELLOWSHIP HALL DAY
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - FELLOWSHIP HALL - DAY (1990)
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - FELLOWSHIP HALL - DAY (1990) Dozens of TEENS rehearse their various talents: ribbon dancing, foam puppets, tambourines. Jessie practices at the piano. Owen tunes his guitar. Over-tightens a peg. A string snaps.
43 99
INT HIS WAY CHURCH - SANCTUARY LATER
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - SANCTUARY - LATER
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - SANCTUARY - LATER The sanctuary is packed. The heavy, driving rock of PETRA - “Judas’ Kiss” cranks from the speakers. OWEN (O.S.) (singing)
44 101
INT HIS WAY CHURCH - MEN’S ROOM LATER
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - MEN’S ROOM - LATER
INT. HIS WAY CHURCH - MEN’S ROOM - LATER C.J., still in his disco-suit, steps up to the urinal beside Zach. C.J. pees. C.J. Hey Zach.
45 105
EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY LATER
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY - LATER
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - DAY - LATER Craig slams the Youth Ministry van into the driveway and storms into the house. The family follows in silence, passing Evelyn on the porch:
46 106
INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM CONTINUOUS
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM - CONTINUOUS
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM - CONTINUOUS Andy and Ryan sprawl with Erin, watching THE COSBY SHOW reruns on a small TV. CANNED LAUGHTER fills the room. C.J. enters, still in his disco suit. He steps over the kids and heads for the stairs. Another LAUGH TRACK HIT. Jessie
47 111
INT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM DAY
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM - DAY (1982)
INT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - LIVING ROOM - DAY (1982) Embers glow inside the wood burning stove. The TV plays 70’s sit-com re-runs, the volume turned low. C.J. (10), in his Royal Ranger uniform, sits on the living room floor surrounded by magazines.
48 112
EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT YARD DAY
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT YARD - DAY (1990)
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT YARD - DAY (1990) Limp balloons and loose streamers. A crooked banner reads: HAPPY 18TH BIRTHDAY A table holds the remains of a strawberry-topped cake. The Harris kids run and play. Janis and a few CHURCH LADIES
49 114
EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT LATER
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT - LATER
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT - LATER Uncle Mark’s El Camino sits in the driveway, washed for the first time in years. C.J. stands beside it, waiting for the punchline. UNCLE MARK
50 117
INT HARRIS HOUSE - C.J.’S BEDROOM LATER
INT. HARRIS HOUSE - C.J.’S BEDROOM - LATER
INT. HARRIS HOUSE - C.J.’S BEDROOM - LATER C.J. packs clothes into boxes. Photos of Popeye and Lady sit nearby. Jessie enters: JESSIE What’s with everyone being here
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EXT HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT PORCH DAY
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT PORCH - DAY (1990)
EXT. HARRIS FARM HOUSE - FRONT PORCH - DAY (1990) Sunlight dances through the evergreens onto C.J. sitting on a kitchen stool. Cathy cuts his hair with clippers. Lady rests at his feet. CATHY
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INT ROTTEN ROBBIE TRUCK STOP LATER
INT. ROTTEN ROBBIE TRUCK STOP - LATER
INT. ROTTEN ROBBIE TRUCK STOP - LATER C.J. pays for gas and a new Thomas Guide with coins. The ATTENDANT (60s) watches him count, says nothing. EXT. ROTTEN ROBBIE TRUCK STOP - MOMENTS LATER C.J. stands at the hood of the El Camino, parked among dozens

SON OF A PREACHER MAN

A memory-driven coming-of-age drama set across two timelines—1982 and 1990—in which a preacher's son pieces together the losses that shaped him: a childhood friend's sudden death, a father's conditional love, and the slow erosion of faith, all leading to a single, open-road departure.

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Overview

Poster
Unique Selling Proposition

Where comparable films (Boy Erased, Moonlight) grant the protagonist at least one relationship that holds, this script withholds that comfort structurally — Shawn dies, Owen self-destructs, God stays silent — so that the motif objects (red Converse, black cowboy hat, chalk drawings) carry the full emotional weight of what the story refuses to resolve, making the form itself the argument.

AI Verdict


Synthesis Where readers agree and split
7.6

The ensemble recommends the script with moderate-to-strong advocacy, contingent on targeted revision to the middle movement's causal pressure and pre-rupture stakes framing.

Readers read as Specialty2 Prestige1 Festival arthouse2 Coming of age Drama majority

A festival-arthouse/prestige coming-of-age drama that asks the reader to accept a POV-constrained, memory-driven structure in exchange for cumulative emotional pressure, motif-based meaning-making, and the deliberate withholding of catharsis.

Would readers champion it?
Not yetNot yetReaders wouldn’t actively push for it.
WeaklyWeaklyMentioned, but no real push behind it.
ModeratelyModeratelyMentioned favorably to the right buyer.
StronglyStronglyActively championed across their network.
DeepSeekModeratelyGrokModeratelyClaudeStronglyGPT5StronglyGeminiStrongly
How much rewrite does it need?
Start from scratchStart from scratchPremise or core engine isn’t working. Page-one rebuild.
Structural rewriteStructural rewriteRe-architecting acts and arcs. Multi-month effort.
Targeted rewriteTargeted rewriteSpecific scenes or threads need rework. ~1 month.
Just polishJust polishLines and pacing tweaks. A few weeks.
ClaudeTargeted rewriteDeepSeekTargeted rewriteGPT5Targeted rewriteGeminiTargeted rewriteGrokTargeted rewrite
How distinctive is the voice?
GenericGenericReads like other scripts in the genre.
EmergingEmergingHints of a distinctive voice, not yet locked in.
DistinctiveDistinctiveA clear, recognizable authorial voice.
One-of-a-kindOne-of-a-kindA voice that couldn’t be anyone else’s.
ClaudeDistinctiveDeepSeekDistinctiveGPT5DistinctiveGrokDistinctiveGeminiOne-of-a-kind

On the score: The score sits at the high edge of its band — a focused revision could push it to the next verdict.

What's working All 5 readers agree

The motif system — objects like the red Converse, glass jug, chalk drawings, and cowboy hat — is the ensemble's primary advocacy asset, doing structural, thematic, and emotional work simultaneously with craft precision.

What's blocking All 5 readers agree

The middle movement's failure to escalate causal pressure — scenes running in thematic parallel rather than compressive counterpoint — is the ensemble's primary blocker, preventing the script from fully delivering on its cumulative emotional promise.

Why not lower

The script's authorial control at the scene level — motif discipline, sensory specificity, POV coherence — is consistent enough that the structural issues read as solvable craft problems rather than evidence of a writer who does not know what they are doing.

Why not higher

The middle-movement pressure deficit and the underdramatized Owen reversal are not polish problems — they require targeted rewriting to resolve, and in their current state they prevent the script from fully delivering on the cumulative emotional pressure its contract promises.

Fix-first · Protect-while-fixing · Reader splits · Quick credibility wins
Rewrite map

The ensemble converges on a targeted rewrite to sharpen causal pressure in the middle movement while protecting the motif architecture and POV discipline that distinguish the script.

Readers read as Specialty2 Prestige1 Festival arthouse2 majority

Fix first 3
Middle movement causal pressure deficit

The middle act loses forward pull as scenes illuminate C.J.'s interiority without visibly narrowing his options or escalating stakes.

Root cause

The POV constraint is honored at the level of presence but not agency — C.J. reacts to others rather than making choices that alter scene trajectories, and the dual-timeline structure illustrates rather than compresses during this stretch.

Owen's reversal underdramatized Less critical

Owen's abrupt rejection from intimacy to homophobic cruelty feels like a plot convenience rather than a tragic culmination.

Root cause

The script does not seed Owen's internal conflict with micro-beats of fear or hesitation visible to C.J. before the parking lot scene, so the reversal lacks dramatized preparation.

Talent show stakes underframed pre-rupture Medium confidence

The talent show subversion lands as a vivid surprise, but anticipatory tension is muted because the cost of deviation is not framed before C.J. steps onstage.

Root cause

No preceding scene explicitly ties C.J.'s future or a concrete penalty to delivering Craig's sermon, so the reader experiences the consequence retroactively rather than as a payoff of set suspense.

Protect while fixing 3
Motif system as emotional architecture

Sharpening causal pressure in the middle movement risks over-explaining motif objects or inserting plot mechanics that flatten the associative, memory-driven register the motifs currently sustain.

Dual-timeline juxtaposition as recontextualization

Restructuring timeline sequencing to address the middle-movement pressure deficit could break the specific juxtapositions (boxing/talent show, river/baptistry) that currently generate the script's most powerful emotional effects.

Craig's complex father-son characterization

Clarifying antagonistic pressure by consolidating opposition around Craig risks simplifying him into a single note, losing the contradictory love/control dynamic that elevates the drama.

Reader splits 2
Root cause of middle-movement drag
Side A

The drag stems from the protagonist's lack of agency — C.J. endures trauma without making choices that alter his situation.

Side B

The drag stems from the dual-timeline structure running in thematic parallel rather than escalating counterpoint — the past illustrates rather than compresses the present.

Novelistic prose density as a problem
Side A

The dense, novelistic action lines that narrate C.J.'s internals are a primary pacing issue that reduces cinematic immediacy.

Side B

The prose density is not a significant issue — the script's register is appropriate to its festival-arthouse contract.

Quick credibility wins 2
Remove over-signaled emotional labels in action lines
Eliminate on-the-nose thematic dialogue
Story Facts
Genres:
Drama 60% Comedy 25% Romance 15%

Setting: 1982 and 1990, Sierra City, California, primarily around the Harris farmhouse, local church, and surrounding natural areas.

Themes: The Search for Identity and Self-Discovery, Religious Hypocrisy and Questioning Faith, Familial Dysfunction and Brokenness, The Awakening and Suppression of Sexuality, The Failure of Human Systems and Ideals, Loss and Grief, The Nature of Freedom and Escape

Conflict & Stakes: C.J.'s struggle with his identity and family expectations, particularly regarding his sexuality and aspirations, against the backdrop of a dysfunctional family dynamic and societal pressures.

Mood: Bittersweet and introspective, with moments of humor and tension.

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The juxtaposition of a coming-of-age story set against a backdrop of religious fervor and familial dysfunction.
  • Character Development: C.J.'s journey from childhood innocence to self-discovery and independence.
  • Emotional Depth: The exploration of complex family relationships and the impact of societal expectations on personal identity.
  • Nostalgic Setting: The 1980s and 1990s rural California setting that evokes a sense of nostalgia and authenticity.

Comparable Scripts: The Perks of Being a Wallflower, Boyhood, Stand by Me, A Separate Peace, The Catcher in the Rye, This Is Us, The Fault in Our Stars, The Wonder Years, The Glass Castle

How 5 AI Readers Scored The Script

Readers graded as Specialty2 Prestige1 Festival arthouse2 majority
Claude GPT5 Gemini DeepSeek Grok Average spread Row tint: weak mid strong excellent
Premise i
7.6
Plot i
6.6
Structure i
8.0
Character i
8.0
Dialogue i
7.4
Tone / Voice i
8.8
Theme i
8.6
Marketability i
7.6
💎 Final Polish Stage

Our stats model looked at how your scores work together and ranked the changes most likely to move your overall rating next draft. Ordered by the most reliable gains first.

You're in refinement mode.

At this level, focused work on Conflict (Script Level) and Originality (Script Level) will have the most impact on the overall rating.

1. Conflict (Script Level)
Big Impact Script Level
Your current Conflict (Script Level) score: 7.2
Moves easily Writers at your level typically gain +0.5 per rewrite — a realistic improvement.
Confidence: High (based on ~1,745 similar revisions)
  • This is your top opportunity right now. Focusing your rewrite energy here gives you the best realistic shot at raising the overall rating.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Conflict (Script Level) by about +0.5 in one rewrite.
2. Originality (Script Level)
Big Impact Script Level
Your current Originality (Script Level) score: 8.2
Typical rewrite gain: +0.3 in Originality (Script Level)
Confidence: High (based on ~654 similar revisions)
  • This is another strong option. If the top item doesn't fit your rewrite plan, this is a solid alternative.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Originality (Script Level) by about +0.3 in one rewrite.
3. Structure (Script Level)
Big Impact Script Level
Your current Structure (Script Level) score: 8.0
Moves easily Writers at your level typically gain +0.37 per rewrite — a realistic improvement.
Confidence: High (based on ~745 similar revisions)
  • This is another strong option. If the top item doesn't fit your rewrite plan, this is a solid alternative.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Structure (Script Level) by about +0.37 in one rewrite.

Script Level Analysis

Writer Exec

This section delivers a top-level assessment of the screenplay’s strengths and weaknesses — covering overall quality (P/C/R/HR), character development, emotional impact, thematic depth, narrative inconsistencies, and the story’s core philosophical conflict. It helps identify what’s resonating, what needs refinement, and how the script aligns with professional standards.

Screenplay Insights

Breaks down your script along various categories.

Overall Score: 7.88
Key Suggestions:
To strengthen the script creatively, focus on refining character arcs for supporting figures like Cathy and Evelyn to add emotional depth and relatability, while smoothing transitions between timelines to improve narrative flow and audience engagement. Additionally, heightening emotional stakes in key confrontations, such as those between C.J. and Craig, will enhance the overall impact and authenticity of the coming-of-age story, making the themes of identity and failure more resonant and compelling.
Story Critique

Big-picture feedback on the story’s clarity, stakes, cohesion, and engagement.

Key Suggestions:
The screenplay 'Son of a Preacher Man' excels in its emotional depth and thematic exploration, but to elevate it creatively, focus on refining character exits and transitions to avoid abruptness, which can disrupt emotional flow. By deepening key relationships, such as C.J.'s bonds with Owen and Shawn, and incorporating subtle foreshadowing, the writer can enhance audience engagement and make the narrative more resonant. Additionally, tightening pacing in descriptive scenes and expanding C.J.'s internal conflicts will strengthen the character arc, delivering a more cohesive and impactful story that better captures the complexities of faith and identity.
Characters

Explores the depth, clarity, and arc of the main and supporting characters.

Key Suggestions:
The character analysis reveals strong foundations for key figures like C.J. and Craig, but to elevate the script's craft, focus on deepening emotional layers and arcs, particularly for C.J. by exploring his internal conflicts more explicitly through additional introspective scenes or dialogue. Enhancing relational dynamics, such as between C.J. and Craig, will create more nuanced conflicts and resolutions, making the themes of identity and family more resonant and engaging, while ensuring secondary characters like Jessie and Shawn avoid stagnation by adding moments of growth or impact.
Emotional Analysis

Breaks down the emotional journey of the audience across the script.

Key Suggestions:
The script's emotional core is strong but suffers from a lack of variety and intense, unrelenting sadness that can lead to audience fatigue. To improve, focus on balancing the emotional spectrum by incorporating more moments of joy, humor, and recovery, such as adding light-hearted scenes in the 1990 timeline and humanizing characters like Craig through subtle vulnerabilities. This would enhance emotional depth, pacing, and overall engagement, making the story more resonant and less exhausting.
Goals and Philosophical Conflict

Evaluates character motivations, obstacles, and sources of tension throughout the plot.

Key Suggestions:
The analysis highlights C.J.'s strong character arc driven by evolving goals and conflicts, but to improve the script's craft, focus on integrating more nuanced internal struggles earlier in the narrative. This would build greater emotional depth and make the late resolutions (around 85-90%) feel more organic and impactful, enhancing the coming-of-age theme and ensuring the philosophical conflicts resonate more authentically with audiences.
Themes

Analysis of the themes of the screenplay and how well they’re expressed.

Key Suggestions:
To improve the script creatively, emphasize the emotional depth of C.J.'s self-discovery journey by incorporating more introspective moments or symbolic imagery, such as expanding on his chalk drawings or interactions with key objects like the glass jug. This will balance the heavy themes of religious hypocrisy and familial dysfunction, ensuring they enhance rather than overwhelm the core narrative, leading to a more cohesive and impactful character arc that resonates with audiences on a personal level.
Logic & Inconsistencies

Highlights any contradictions, plot holes, or logic gaps that may confuse viewers.

Key Suggestions:
The script's core narrative strength lies in its vivid coming-of-age story and thematic depth, but addressing key inconsistencies, such as character portrayals and timeline errors, will enhance authenticity and emotional resonance. Focus on refining high-priority issues like age discrepancies to ensure a cohesive arc, while trimming redundancies and dialogue repetitions to tighten pacing and maintain audience engagement, ultimately elevating the script's craft and impact.

Scene Analysis

All of your scenes analyzed individually and compared, so you can zero in on what to improve.

Scene-Level Percentile Chart
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Other Analyses

Writer Exec

This section looks at the extra spark — your story’s voice, style, world, and the moments that really stick. These insights might not change the bones of the script, but they can make it more original, more immersive, and way more memorable. It’s where things get fun, weird, and wonderfully you.

Unique Voice

Assesses the distinctiveness and personality of the writer's voice.

Key Suggestions:
The script's poetic and introspective voice is a strength, offering rich imagery and emotional depth, but to improve it creatively, focus on refining the deliberate ambiguity in character arcs to provide more emotional closure. This would enhance audience engagement without sacrificing the raw, subversive elements, ensuring the story's themes of identity and family dysfunction resonate more powerfully while maintaining its art-house appeal.
Writer's Craft

Analyzes the writing to help the writer be aware of their skill and improve.

Key Suggestions:
To enhance your screenplay's emotional depth and thematic resonance, focus on deepening character backstories and internal conflicts to create more compelling arcs, while refining dialogue to better reveal subtext and strengthen symbolic elements. This will amplify the exploration of failure and identity, making the narrative more immersive and impactful within its art house indie style.
Memorable Lines
Spotlights standout dialogue lines with emotional or thematic power.
Tropes
Highlights common or genre-specific tropes found in the script.
World Building

Evaluates the depth, consistency, and immersion of the story's world.

Key Suggestions:
The script's world-building masterfully uses vivid, sensory details to create a personal and emotionally charged environment that supports C.J.'s introspective journey, but to enhance craft, consider expanding the diversity of cultural and societal interactions to avoid a overly insular feel, allowing for richer character arcs and more nuanced exploration of themes like identity and failure, which could make the narrative even more compelling and relatable in an indie context.
Correlations

Identifies patterns in scene scores.

Key Suggestions:
Your script excels in creating emotionally resonant, introspective moments that drive character depth, but the analysis reveals that these scenes can slow pacing and reduce narrative momentum. To enhance your craft, focus on subtly tightening transitions in reflective sequences by integrating visual motifs or micro-conflicts that maintain emotional integrity while ensuring the story progresses fluidly, aligning with your indie style and amplifying its festival appeal without altering core themes.
Loglines
Presents logline variations based on theme, genre, and hook.