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Scene Map 60
# PG SLUGLINE
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INT OFFICE - AUCKLAND, NEW ZEALAND DAY
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EXT COTTAGE - ZEALAND, NEW ZEALAND DAY
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INT COTTAGE - BEDROOM DAY
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INT WAR OFFICE - LONDON DAY
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EXT WANBOROUGH MANOR - SURREY DAY
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EXT WANBOROUGH MANOR - TRAINING GROUNDS DAY
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INT WANBOROUGH MANOR - CLASSROOM DAY
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EXT WANBOROUGH MANOR - WEAPONS RANGE DAY
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INT WANBOROUGH MANOR - DORMITORY NIGHT
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EXT WANBOROUGH MANOR - TRAINING GROUNDS DAY
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INT WANBOROUGH MANOR - BATHROOM NIGHT
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INT WANBOROUGH MANOR - PEMBERTON'S OFFICE DAY
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EXT RINGWAY AIRFIELD - MANCHESTER DAY
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EXT RINGWAY AIRFIELD - TRAINING TOWER DAY
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EXT RINGWAY AIRFIELD - BALLOON PLATFORM DAY
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EXT HIGHLANDS - TRAINING CAMP DAY
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INT TRAINING CAMP - CLASSROOM DAY
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EXT HIGHLANDS - FOREST NIGHT
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EXT TRAINING CAMP - FIRING RANGE DAY
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EXT TRAINING CAMP - GROUNDS DAY
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INT MANOR HOUSE - BRIEFING ROOM DAY
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INT MANOR HOUSE - EQUIPMENT ROOM DAY
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EXT AIRFIELD NIGHT
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INT HALIFAX BOMBER LATER
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EXT FRENCH COUNTRYSIDE NIGHT
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INT MOREAU FARMHOUSE NIGHT
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EXT CHERBOURG DAY
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INT CAFÉ MARTIN - PHYLLIS'S ROOM DAY
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INT DUBOIS PARFUMERIE DAY
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INT CAFÉ MARTIN - PHYLLIS'S ROOM NIGHT
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EXT COUNTRYSIDE NIGHT
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INT COTTAGE - BEDROOM DAY
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EXT RIVER ROAD NIGHT
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INT CAFÉ MARTIN - PHYLLIS'S ROOM NIGHT
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INT DUBOIS PARFUMERIE DAY
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INT CHURCH NIGHT
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INT SIMONE'S APARTMENT NIGHT
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EXT COUNTRYSIDE DAY
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INT DURAND FARMHOUSE DAY
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EXT DURAND FARM MORNING
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INT BARN NIGHT
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EXT VILLAGE MARKET - DAY - THREE DAYS LATER
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INT DURAND FARMHOUSE DAY
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EXT TRAIN STATION - CHERBOURG DAY
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INT TRAIN DAY
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EXT RENNES STATION EVENING
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INT LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT EVENING
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INT LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT MORNING
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INT LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT AFTERNOON
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EXT ABANDONED WAREHOUSE NIGHT
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INT BAKERY - BACK ROOM DAY
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INT CHURCH - CONFESSIONAL DAY
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EXT STREET DAY
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INT LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT NIGHT
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EXT POST OFFICE MORNING
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EXT FARM MORNING
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INT MILK HOUSE CONTINUOUS
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INT LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT DAY
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INT ABANDONED FACTORY NIGHT
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INT COTTAGE - BEDROOM DAY
Scene Map
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# PG SLUGLINE
1 1
INT OFFICE - AUCKLAND, NEW ZEALAND DAY
INT. OFFICE - AUCKLAND, NEW ZEALAND - DAY (2016)
THE SPARROW OF NORMANDY Written by Giacomo Giammatteo Based on the true story of Phyllis Latour Giacomo Giammatteo
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EXT COTTAGE - ZEALAND, NEW ZEALAND DAY
EXT. COTTAGE - ZEALAND, NEW ZEALAND - DAY
EXT. COTTAGE - ZEALAND, NEW ZEALAND - DAY David's car pulls up to a modest cottage. He sits for a moment, looking at the papers, then at the house where he grew up. He then gets out carrying the documents. INT. COTTAGE - LIVING ROOM - DAY
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INT COTTAGE - BEDROOM DAY
INT. COTTAGE - BEDROOM - DAY
INT. COTTAGE - BEDROOM - DAY David helps his mother into bed. She settles against the pillows, and he pulls a chair close. He sets his phone on the nightstand and turns the recorder on. DAVID
4 7
INT WAR OFFICE - LONDON DAY
INT. WAR OFFICE - LONDON - DAY (1942)
INT. WAR OFFICE - LONDON - DAY (1942) Long corridors stretch through the stark government building, and women in military uniforms hurry past with files and papers. PHYLLIS (19) sits in a hard wooden chair outside an office.
5 11
EXT WANBOROUGH MANOR - SURREY DAY
EXT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - SURREY - DAY
EXT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - SURREY - DAY A grand Tudor manor house sits at the end of a long gravel drive. Ancient oaks surround the property, and the grounds stretch into rolling parkland. Several military vehicles are parked near the entrance.
6 13
EXT WANBOROUGH MANOR - TRAINING GROUNDS DAY
EXT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - TRAINING GROUNDS - DAY
EXT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - TRAINING GROUNDS - DAY Dawn breaks over the estate as Phyllis and fifteen other trainees — men and women — stand in formation wearing physical training gear. Their breath forms clouds of mist in the cold morning air.
7 14
INT WANBOROUGH MANOR - CLASSROOM DAY
INT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - CLASSROOM - DAY
INT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - CLASSROOM - DAY Phyllis sits at a desk covered with maps, charts, and reconnaissance photographs. Her feet are blistered from the morning run, and she flexes them carefully. INSTRUCTOR PEMBERTON (40s), precise and professorial, stands
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EXT WANBOROUGH MANOR - WEAPONS RANGE DAY
EXT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - WEAPONS RANGE - DAY
EXT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - WEAPONS RANGE - DAY The crack of gunfire echoes across the grounds. Trainees line up at firing positions, each with a pistol. SGT. MACKENZIE (50s), a Scotsman with a weathered face, walks behind them.
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INT WANBOROUGH MANOR - DORMITORY NIGHT
INT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - DORMITORY - NIGHT
INT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - DORMITORY - NIGHT The women lie in their beds, exhausted. Moonlight streams through the windows. Yvonne is already asleep, snoring softly. Phyllis examines her blistered hands in the dim light.
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EXT WANBOROUGH MANOR - TRAINING GROUNDS DAY
EXT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - TRAINING GROUNDS - DAY
EXT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - TRAINING GROUNDS - DAY Rain pours down. Phyllis and five other trainees crawl through mud under barbed wire. Live ammunition cracks overhead — not close, but close enough to be terrifying. Phyllis's face is covered in mud, her uniform soaked through.
11 20
INT WANBOROUGH MANOR - BATHROOM NIGHT
INT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - BATHROOM - NIGHT
INT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - BATHROOM - NIGHT Phyllis stands in front of a mirror, slowly washing mud from her face and arms. Her hands shake from exhaustion. The door opens and Jackie enters, equally filthy. JACKIE
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INT WANBOROUGH MANOR - PEMBERTON'S OFFICE DAY
INT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - PEMBERTON'S OFFICE - DAY
INT. WANBOROUGH MANOR - PEMBERTON'S OFFICE - DAY Phyllis sits across from Pemberton, who reviews a file. Her uniform is clean now, pressed. Three weeks have passed, and she looks harder, more confident. PEMBERTON
13 22
EXT RINGWAY AIRFIELD - MANCHESTER DAY
EXT. RINGWAY AIRFIELD - MANCHESTER - DAY
EXT. RINGWAY AIRFIELD - MANCHESTER - DAY Gray skies hang over a military airfield. Phyllis steps off a transport truck with Jackie, Yvonne, and six male trainees. Wind whips across the tarmac, and in the distance, a training aircraft circles for landing.
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EXT RINGWAY AIRFIELD - TRAINING TOWER DAY
EXT. RINGWAY AIRFIELD - TRAINING TOWER - DAY
EXT. RINGWAY AIRFIELD - TRAINING TOWER - DAY A forty-foot tower looms against the sky. Phyllis stands at the top, wearing a harness attached to a cable system. The ground looks impossibly far below. Davies stands beside her, calm and businesslike.
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EXT RINGWAY AIRFIELD - BALLOON PLATFORM DAY
EXT. RINGWAY AIRFIELD - BALLOON PLATFORM - DAY
EXT. RINGWAY AIRFIELD - BALLOON PLATFORM - DAY A massive observation balloon floats eight hundred feet above the ground, tethered by cables. A wicker basket hangs beneath it, large enough for six people. Phyllis stands in the basket with Davies and Richard, both
16 28
EXT HIGHLANDS - TRAINING CAMP DAY
EXT. HIGHLANDS - TRAINING CAMP - DAY
EXT. HIGHLANDS - TRAINING CAMP - DAY Mountains rise in the distance, their peaks shrouded in mist. Phyllis and the remaining trainees — now down to eight — march along a muddy track carrying full packs and weapons. They've been walking for hours, and everyone is exhausted.
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INT TRAINING CAMP - CLASSROOM DAY
INT. TRAINING CAMP - CLASSROOM - DAY
INT. TRAINING CAMP - CLASSROOM - DAY Phyllis sits alone at a desk, surrounded by blank paper and pencils. MAJOR PALMER (50s), severe and unsmiling, places a sealed envelope in front of her. PALMER
18 31
EXT HIGHLANDS - FOREST NIGHT
EXT. HIGHLANDS - FOREST - NIGHT
EXT. HIGHLANDS - FOREST - NIGHT Rain falls through darkness. Phyllis moves through thick undergrowth, trying to stay quiet. She's alone, separated from her group during a navigation exercise, and completely lost.
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EXT TRAINING CAMP - FIRING RANGE DAY
EXT. TRAINING CAMP - FIRING RANGE - DAY
EXT. TRAINING CAMP - FIRING RANGE - DAY Phyllis lies prone on the ground, a rifle tucked against her shoulder. Targets are set up at various distances, some partially obscured by terrain. Sgt. Mackenzie crouches beside her, watching through
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EXT TRAINING CAMP - GROUNDS DAY
EXT. TRAINING CAMP - GROUNDS - DAY
EXT. TRAINING CAMP - GROUNDS - DAY Phyllis walks alone through the grounds, the dossier clutched in her hands. Her breath catches as she glances down, seeing the thick stack of pages that bind her fate. Jackie finds her sitting on a bench overlooking the valley.
21 39
INT MANOR HOUSE - BRIEFING ROOM DAY
INT. MANOR HOUSE - BRIEFING ROOM - DAY
INT. MANOR HOUSE - BRIEFING ROOM - DAY Phyllis sits at a long table covered with maps, photographs, and documents. A middle-aged woman, MME. ROUSSEAU (50s), sits across from her speaking rapid French. MME. ROUSSEAU
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INT MANOR HOUSE - EQUIPMENT ROOM DAY
INT. MANOR HOUSE - EQUIPMENT ROOM - DAY
INT. MANOR HOUSE - EQUIPMENT ROOM - DAY A QUARTERMASTER (60s) spreads items across a table: a worn suitcase, French cosmetics, clothing with French labels, a small pistol, and other items. Phyllis examines each piece carefully. The Quartermaster
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EXT AIRFIELD NIGHT
EXT. AIRFIELD - NIGHT
EXT. AIRFIELD - NIGHT A full moon illuminates the runway where a Halifax bomber waits, its engines idling. A ground crew loads equipment and check the systems. Phyllis stands with Jackie and Yvonne near the aircraft. All
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INT HALIFAX BOMBER LATER
INT. HALIFAX BOMBER - LATER
INT. HALIFAX BOMBER - LATER The Channel passes below, the dark water visible in the moonlight. The dispatcher moves forward to consult with the pilot, then returns. DISPATCHER
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EXT FRENCH COUNTRYSIDE NIGHT
EXT. FRENCH COUNTRYSIDE - NIGHT
EXT. FRENCH COUNTRYSIDE - NIGHT Phyllis falls through darkness, the parachute snapping open above her. Fear grips her as the ground rushes up faster than she expects. She hits hard, rolling as trained, but the impact drives the air from her lungs.
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INT MOREAU FARMHOUSE NIGHT
INT. MOREAU FARMHOUSE - NIGHT
INT. MOREAU FARMHOUSE - NIGHT The house is dark and cold. Henri lights a single candle. The main room is simple — a table, chairs, a stove, religious pictures on the walls. Claire goes to the stove and starts a fire. Within minutes,
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EXT CHERBOURG DAY
EXT. CHERBOURG - DAY
EXT. CHERBOURG - DAY The morning sun breaks through clouds over the port city. German soldiers are everywhere — on street corners, checking papers, and usually patrolling in pairs. A German truck filled with soldiers rumbles past as two
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INT CAFÉ MARTIN - PHYLLIS'S ROOM DAY
INT. CAFÉ MARTIN - PHYLLIS'S ROOM - DAY
INT. CAFÉ MARTIN - PHYLLIS'S ROOM - DAY One small window overlooks the alley behind the shop. A small bed, a chair, and a basin for washing almost fill the tiny room. Phyllis's suitcase sits on the floor. She opens the case and carefully removes the radio,
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INT DUBOIS PARFUMERIE DAY
INT. DUBOIS PARFUMERIE - DAY
INT. DUBOIS PARFUMERIE - DAY The shop is small but elegant and it’s filled with bottles, powders, and creams. The scent of lavender and rose fills the air. Several customers browse the shelves. Phyllis stands behind the counter with Madame Dubois,
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INT CAFÉ MARTIN - PHYLLIS'S ROOM NIGHT
INT. CAFÉ MARTIN - PHYLLIS'S ROOM - NIGHT
INT. CAFÉ MARTIN - PHYLLIS'S ROOM - NIGHT Phyllis lies on the bed, staring at the ceiling and listening to German voices drift up from the café below — soldiers laughing, drinking, and playing cards. Henri knocks softly on the door, and enters carrying a
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EXT COUNTRYSIDE NIGHT
EXT. COUNTRYSIDE - NIGHT
EXT. COUNTRYSIDE - NIGHT Phyllis rides a battered bicycle along a dark road. A large wicker basket is strapped to the front, filled with loose hay and farm tools. The handle of her suitcase is barely visible, buried deep beneath the hay.
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INT COTTAGE - BEDROOM DAY
INT. COTTAGE - BEDROOM - DAY (2016)
INT. COTTAGE - BEDROOM - DAY (2016) David stares at his mother, nodding as she speaks. DAVID They almost caught you. Right then. PHYLLIS
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EXT RIVER ROAD NIGHT
EXT. RIVER ROAD - NIGHT
EXT. RIVER ROAD - NIGHT Pascal and Phyllis move quickly along a narrow path beside a river. The water reflects starlight. Trees overhang the path, providing cover. Pascal carries his rifle casually but his eyes constantly
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INT CAFÉ MARTIN - PHYLLIS'S ROOM NIGHT
INT. CAFÉ MARTIN - PHYLLIS'S ROOM - NIGHT
INT. CAFÉ MARTIN - PHYLLIS'S ROOM - NIGHT Phyllis lies on her bed fully clothed, too tense to sleep. The suitcase sits beside her, innocent-looking but deadly if discovered. Footsteps sound on the stairs. Heavy boots. German voices.
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INT DUBOIS PARFUMERIE DAY
INT. DUBOIS PARFUMERIE - DAY
INT. DUBOIS PARFUMERIE - DAY Morning light filters through the shop windows. Phyllis arranges bottles on shelves while Madame Dubois works at the counter with ledgers. The door opens and a young woman enters — SIMONE (22), pretty
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INT CHURCH NIGHT
INT. CHURCH - NIGHT
INT. CHURCH - NIGHT The church is dark except for candles burning at the altar. Phyllis enters through a side door and waits. Shadows move in the pews. As she approaches, she counts six people: Henri, Pascal, Simone, and three others she doesn't
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INT SIMONE'S APARTMENT NIGHT
INT. SIMONE'S APARTMENT - NIGHT
INT. SIMONE'S APARTMENT - NIGHT The apartment is tiny — one room with a bed, a table, a hot plate for cooking. Photographs of a man in French army uniform sit on a shelf. SIMONE
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EXT COUNTRYSIDE DAY
EXT. COUNTRYSIDE - DAY
EXT. COUNTRYSIDE - DAY Henri drives a battered farm truck along a rutted road. Phyllis sits beside him, her suitcase at her feet. They pass German checkpoints but Henri knows the routes the patrols use and avoids them.
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INT DURAND FARMHOUSE DAY
INT. DURAND FARMHOUSE - DAY
INT. DURAND FARMHOUSE - DAY The kitchen is warm and clean. A fire burns in the large hearth. Marie sets bread and cheese on the table. MARIE Sit. Eat.
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EXT DURAND FARM MORNING
EXT. DURAND FARM - MORNING
EXT. DURAND FARM - MORNING Dawn breaks over the fields. Phyllis stands in the yard with Marie, learning to scatter grain for the chickens. The birds rush forward, pecking and fighting over food. MARIE
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INT BARN NIGHT
INT. BARN - NIGHT
INT. BARN - NIGHT Phyllis sits in the loft with her radio assembled. An oil lamp provides dim light. Henri stands nearby with several handwritten pages. HENRI
42 77
EXT VILLAGE MARKET - DAY - THREE DAYS LATER
EXT. VILLAGE MARKET - DAY - THREE DAYS LATER
EXT. VILLAGE MARKET - DAY - THREE DAYS LATER Phyllis stands at a vegetable stall, examining a bruised cabbage. She carries a woven string bag—no suitcase, no cosmetics. She looks like a housewife. Pascal appears beside her, picking up a potato. He doesn't
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INT DURAND FARMHOUSE DAY
INT. DURAND FARMHOUSE - DAY
INT. DURAND FARMHOUSE - DAY Phyllis sits at the kitchen table with Marie and Robert. The package lies open between them — identity papers for someone named Catherine Blanc, train tickets, and a small amount of money.
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EXT TRAIN STATION - CHERBOURG DAY
EXT. TRAIN STATION - CHERBOURG - DAY
EXT. TRAIN STATION - CHERBOURG - DAY The station is crowded with civilians and German soldiers. Phyllis joins a queue for the ticket window, her suitcase heavy in her hand. Gestapo officers check papers at the platform entrance. She
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INT TRAIN DAY
INT. TRAIN - DAY
INT. TRAIN - DAY The train rattles through the countryside. Phyllis sits opposite the GERMAN CORPORAL. She is knitting a grey sock, her needles clicking a steady, hypnotic rhythm. Click-clack. Click-clack.
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EXT RENNES STATION EVENING
EXT. RENNES STATION - EVENING
EXT. RENNES STATION - EVENING The train pulls into a larger station. Phyllis steps onto the platform carrying her suitcase. The station is busy with travelers and German military personnel. She checks the address Pascal gave her — 17 rue du Puits. She
47 84
INT LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT EVENING
INT. LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT - EVENING
INT. LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT - EVENING The apartment above the bakery is small and cluttered. Lucienne closes all the curtains before turning on a lamp. LUCIENNE They arrested Henri three days ago.
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INT LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT MORNING
INT. LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT - MORNING
INT. LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT - MORNING Phyllis wakes up on a narrow couch, disoriented. Sunlight streams through gaps in the curtains, and the smell of bread baking drifts up from the shop below. Lucienne enters carrying two cups of coffee.
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INT LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT AFTERNOON
INT. LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT - AFTERNOON
INT. LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT - AFTERNOON Six people crowd into the small apartment. Phyllis recognizes the type — ordinary French citizens who've chosen to resist. ANDRÉ (50), a postal worker, sits near the window watching the street. MARGUERITE (28), a nurse, perches on the arm of a
50 90
EXT ABANDONED WAREHOUSE NIGHT
EXT. ABANDONED WAREHOUSE - NIGHT
EXT. ABANDONED WAREHOUSE - NIGHT The warehouse sits on the edge of the city near the river. Windows are broken, and weeds grow through cracks in the pavement. It looks completely abandoned.
51 93
INT BAKERY - BACK ROOM DAY
INT. BAKERY - BACK ROOM - DAY
INT. BAKERY - BACK ROOM - DAY Phyllis sits at a small table encoding a message. The room is cramped, filled with sacks of flour and baking supplies. Marguerite enters through the back door, her nurse's uniform spotted with blood.
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INT CHURCH - CONFESSIONAL DAY
INT. CHURCH - CONFESSIONAL - DAY
INT. CHURCH - CONFESSIONAL - DAY Phyllis sits in the confessional booth. Through the screen, she can see the vague outline of André on the other side. ANDRÉ Bless me, Father, for I have
53 97
EXT STREET DAY
EXT. STREET - DAY
EXT. STREET - DAY Phyllis walks through the city, hyper-aware of everyone. PHYLLIS (to herself) Is that man following me? Is that
54 99
INT LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT NIGHT
INT. LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT - NIGHT
INT. LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT - NIGHT Phyllis paces the small room while Lucienne and André listen to her account of the meeting with Becker. PHYLLIS He knows. Maybe not everything, but
55 101
EXT POST OFFICE MORNING
EXT. POST OFFICE - MORNING
EXT. POST OFFICE - MORNING The morning sun creeps over the city as André loads mail sacks into his truck. Phyllis watches from across the street. Two German soldiers stand at the corner smoking cigarettes. One yawns. The other checks his watch.
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EXT FARM MORNING
EXT. FARM - MORNING
EXT. FARM - MORNING The farm is isolated, surrounded by fields and forest. André pulls up to a weathered farmhouse. An old woman — MADAME LAURENT (70) — emerges from the house. MADAME LAURENT
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INT MILK HOUSE CONTINUOUS
INT. MILK HOUSE - CONTINUOUS
INT. MILK HOUSE - CONTINUOUS As the German soldier moves closer, the flashlight beam inches across the wall toward Phyllis's hiding place. A voice calls from outside. GERMAN VOICE
58 106
INT LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT DAY
INT. LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT - DAY
INT. LUCIENNE'S APARTMENT - DAY Phyllis bursts through the door. Lucienne sits at the table with Marguerite and François. They're listening to a small radio, volume low. LUCIENNE
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INT ABANDONED FACTORY NIGHT
INT. ABANDONED FACTORY - NIGHT
INT. ABANDONED FACTORY - NIGHT Phyllis transmits from a different location each night. Tonight it's an abandoned factory on the edge of town. Her fingers fly across the keys, sending intelligence back to
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INT COTTAGE - BEDROOM DAY
INT. COTTAGE - BEDROOM - DAY (2016)
INT. COTTAGE - BEDROOM - DAY (2016) Phyllis lies in bed, David still sitting beside her. His phone continues recording. DAVID How long did you keep transmitting?

The Sparrow of Normandy

A true-story wartime thriller following Phyllis Latour from brutal SOE training through high-risk transmissions, as she navigates betrayal, close calls, and the moral cost of keeping secrets — until her seventies son stumbles on the truth.

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Overview

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Unique Selling Point

This screenplay offers a fresh perspective on WWII espionage by focusing on a female agent's experience, blending spy thriller tension with intimate family drama through a unique dual timeline structure that reveals a mother's hidden war history to her son decades later.

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Average Score: 8.2
Key Takeaways
For the Writer:
You have a strong, cinematic true-story with a compelling dual timeline and an exceptional central arc for Phyllis. To lift the script to production-ready level, tighten pacing in Act One (condense repetitive training beats), and deepen the dramatic throughlines that carry momentum into the second half: either sharpen and finish the arcs of key secondary players (Jackie, Yvonne, Henri, the Durands) or deliberately reduce the cast so the remaining relationships get satisfying payoffs. Most importantly, give the Gestapo presence — especially Hauptmann Becker — a clearer, personal cat‑and‑mouse dynamic with Phyllis. Show his investigative method and put him in direct, escalating conflict with her so each appearance raises stakes and emotional tension. Finally, extend the post‑war resolution slightly to show the real cost of Phyllis’s secrecy on family life (one or two short scenes or a tightening montage) so the modern frame lands with greater resonance.
For Executives:
This is a marketable, female‑led WWII biopic with clear USP: authentic SOE tradecraft, an emotional son‑discovers‑mother framing, and D‑Day stakes — all attractive to mid‑budget prestige buyers and streaming platforms targeting historical drama audiences. The script is close to ready but carries production risks if left as is: pacing lulls (lengthy training sequences) and underused supporting characters/antagonist dilute the emotional payoff and could blunt audience engagement. Cost risk is moderate — period locations and practical set‑pieces are needed — but the project’s strong emotional core and true‑story hook make it commercially viable if you shore up the antagonist and secondary arcs and tighten Act One to improve runtime and momentum.
Story Facts
Genres:
War 60% Drama 30% Thriller 40% Action 15%

Setting: World War II (1940s) and present day (2016), Primarily set in France during World War II, with scenes in New Zealand in 2016.

Themes: Resilience and Strength in the Face of Adversity, Hidden Identities and the Duality of Life, Courage and Sacrifice, The Impact of War and Trauma Across Generations, Duty Versus Personal Life, The Importance of Truth and Revelation, Skepticism and Trust, The Female Experience in War

Conflict & Stakes: Phyllis's struggle to survive as a spy during World War II while keeping her identity hidden, with the stakes being her life and the safety of her network.

Mood: Tense and reflective, with moments of emotional depth and urgency.

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The story of a female spy's hidden life during WWII, revealing the personal sacrifices made for the greater good.
  • Plot Twist: The revelation of Phyllis's past and her emotional journey as David uncovers her history.
  • Distinctive Setting: The contrast between the wartime espionage in France and the modern-day discovery of family secrets in New Zealand.
  • Innovative Ideas: The integration of real historical events with personal narratives, highlighting the impact of war on individual lives.

Comparable Scripts: The Nightingale, Atonement, The Spy Who Came in from the Cold, The Book Thief, The English Patient, The Alice Network, The Cuckoo's Calling, The Guernsey Literary and Potato Peel Pie Society, The Secret Life of Walter Mitty

Script Level Analysis

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Overall Score: 7.95
Key Suggestions:
The script's core — Phyllis's transformation and the female-led WWII espionage premise — is strong. The biggest creative gain will come from deepening the supporting cast (Jackie, Henri, Lucienne, etc.) and tying their personal stakes directly to Phyllis's choices. Do this by adding short, specific scenes or beat changes that reveal motivations, conflicts, and costs (losses, moral compromises) for each key ally, and by pruning long training sequences to keep momentum. Also add a few focused interior moments for Phyllis (brief thoughts, private gestures, or a recurring visual motif) to make her psychological stakes more visible without slowing action.
Story Critique

Big-picture feedback on the story’s clarity, stakes, cohesion, and engagement.

Key Suggestions:
The script's core is strong: a compelling intergenerational hook and a well-drawn female spy protagonist. The primary creative fix is surgical tightening of the middle — condense training beats, remove repetitive set-piece sequences, and replace expository dialogue with visual, character-driven moments that heighten immediate stakes. Use sharper, more dynamic interactions between Phyllis and her peers (and with antagonists) to deliver emotional beats instead of telling them, and smooth transitions between flashbacks and present-day scenes so the emotional arc resolves more naturally.
Characters

Explores the depth, clarity, and arc of the main and supporting characters.

Key Suggestions:
The character work is solid—Phyllis is a compelling, resilient protagonist with clear stakes—but the script needs sharper emotional wiring. Make Phyllis’s internal journey explicit: mark and dramatize the turning points (moments of doubt, near-capture, first successful transmission) so her outward competence is rooted in visible interior change. Give a few supporting players (Jackie, Lucienne, Henri) one scene that reveals a private vulnerability or backstory beat so they stop feeling like functionary archetypes and instead deepen Phyllis’s relationships and the audience’s emotional buy-in. Tighten weak scenes (notably the hiding/close-call moments) by adding sensory detail and micro-reactions that reveal fear, calculation and consequence.
Emotional Analysis

Breaks down the emotional journey of the audience across the script.

Key Suggestions:
The script's emotional core—the courageous, vulnerable Phyllis—works strongly, but the wartime sections sustain near-constant high-intensity tension that risks numbing the audience. Rebalance the emotional pacing by inserting deliberate 'breather' scenes and deeper, quieter moments (after major near-captures, transmissions, and the bridge escape) that allow characters — including key supporting players — to process fear, grief and small joys. Expand a few modern-day framing beats and deepen secondary arcs (Lucienne, Henri, the Durands, Jackie) so stakes feel personal and payoffs resonate. Small additions of camaraderie, subtle humor, and aftermath reflection will amplify the impact of the high-stakes moments without undermining suspense.
Goals and Philosophical Conflict

Evaluates character motivations, obstacles, and sources of tension throughout the plot.

Key Suggestions:
The analysis shows your strongest engine is Phyllis’s arc from insecure recruit to steely operative, anchored by the moral tug between duty and self-preservation. To sharpen the script, heighten the philosophical dilemma by forcing clearer, costed choices throughout (not just at the end): make the consequences of staying vs. leaving visceral and personal, let the secrecy fracture relationships earlier, and let small defeats accumulate so the final reconciliation with David feels earned rather than tidy. Trim or re-focus training beats that risk slowing momentum and instead use them to seed later moral decisions and relationships (Jackie, Henri, Durand) that pay off in the climax and epilogue.
Themes

Analysis of the themes of the screenplay and how well they’re expressed.

Key Suggestions:
The script’s emotional core — Phyllis’s resilience and the late revelation to her son — is powerful, but the past/present structure needs a clearer throughline so neither timeline feels episodic. Tighten training and procedural set pieces that don’t advance character, and instead deepen scenes that show how Phyllis’s choices shaped her inner life and affected David. Make the present-day discovery reverberate: let David’s arc (shock, need for reconciliation, and transformation) mirror and be earned by the wartime arc so the emotional payoff lands. Small, specific beats — a memory that only Phyllis and David share, an object that links the timelines, or a softened scene showing the cost of secrecy on family life — will amplify theme and character cohesion without inflating running time.
Logic & Inconsistencies

Highlights any contradictions, plot holes, or logic gaps that may confuse viewers.

Key Suggestions:
The biggest weakness is a gap in motivation that undercuts the emotional core. Phyllis's secrecy, her decision to keep the radio despite clear danger, and her sudden willingness to unburden herself to David need concrete, believable beats. Fix this with two small but decisive additions: (1) a short flashback or line that establishes a binding promise/obligation (to London, to a fallen comrade, or to a strategic timetable) that explains why she risked keeping the radio; (2) a present-day connective scene/beat that shows why she finally tells David now (age, illness, guilt, a trigger document, or the need to preserve history). These fixes will reconcile character arc, resolve a major plot hole, and make David’s fast transition emotionally plausible without changing large portions of the script.

Scene Analysis

All of your scenes analyzed individually and compared, so you can zero in on what to improve.

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Writer Exec

This section looks at the extra spark — your story’s voice, style, world, and the moments that really stick. These insights might not change the bones of the script, but they can make it more original, more immersive, and way more memorable. It’s where things get fun, weird, and wonderfully you.

Unique Voice

Assesses the distinctiveness and personality of the writer's voice.

Key Suggestions:
Your voice — gritty, emotionally grounded and historically authentic — is the screenplay's greatest asset. To strengthen the script further, tighten the structure around a clear emotional throughline: anchor the long series of flashbacks to a mounting present-day payoff between David and Phyllis so each wartime episode escalates meaningfully rather than accumulating as episodic set pieces. Trim or compress repetitive training and procedural beats, vary dialogue rhythms between characters, and lean more often on show-not-tell sensory detail that reveals character (small gestures, smells, physical reactions). Finally, sharpen the distinct voices of secondary characters so their presence raises stakes for Phyllis rather than just populating the world.
Writer's Craft

Analyzes the writing to help the writer be aware of their skill and improve.

Key Suggestions:
Lean into subtext and 'show, don't tell.' The screenplay's emotional core — a son discovering his mother's hidden life and the mother's wartime choices — will land far more powerfully if internal conflict and stakes are revealed through behavior, brief exchanges, and visual beats rather than explicit exposition. Tighten pacing by collapsing or trimming quieter transitional scenes, and deepen moral complexity (moments where the protagonist must choose between mission and human cost). Practical next steps: cut lines that state obvious feelings, convert a few high-exposition scenes into silent or small-action beats, and run focused dialogue-only drafts to sharpen what remains unsaid.
Memorable Lines
Spotlights standout dialogue lines with emotional or thematic power.
Tropes
Highlights common or genre-specific tropes found in the script.
World Building

Evaluates the depth, consistency, and immersion of the story's world.

Key Suggestions:
You have a compelling dual-timeline spy drama with a strong emotional hook — a son discovering his mother’s hidden SOE past — and a rich series of episodic wartime set-pieces. To strengthen the script, tighten the throughline that connects 2016 David to 1940s Phyllis so every flashback advances David’s emotional arc and the present-day stakes. Trim or combine repetitive training beats and some procedural transmissions to quicken pacing; instead, invest those minutes in sensory detail and interior moments that make Phyllis a fully realized protagonist (fear, moral choices, the cost of secrecy). Make the contrasts between timelines more vivid (distinct sensory language, motifs, and small objects that echo across time) so the audience always feels the causal and emotional link between past actions and present reckonings.
Correlations

Identifies patterns in scene scores.

Key Suggestions:
Your script’s strength is its emotional core — reflective and supportive scenes deliver high emotional impact and clearly drive character change. However, those same reflective moments often slow plot momentum and lower perceived stakes. To tighten the screenplay, weave emotional beats into high-tension sequences (instead of segregating them) so that action scenes also reveal character change, and give quieter scenes a clearer causal link to plot consequences. Small adjustments — a line that reframes a character’s choice, a moment of decision in the middle of a tense scene, or a brief consequence shown after an introspective beat — will preserve the film’s heart while maintaining forward motion.
Loglines
Presents logline variations based on theme, genre, and hook.

Comparison with Previous Draft

See how your script has evolved from the previous version. This section highlights improvements, regressions, and changes across all major categories, helping you understand what revisions are working and what may need more attention.

Version Comparison Analysis
Summary of Changes
Improvements (4)
  • Character Complexity - characterArcs: 8.0 → 9.0 +1.0
  • Premise - premiseDepth: 8.0 → 9.0 +1.0
  • Story Structure - resolutionSatisfaction: 8.0 → 9.0 +1.0
  • Theme Integration - originalityOfTheme: 7.0 → 8.0 +1.0
Areas to Review (0)

No regressions detected