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# PG SLUGLINE
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EXT OCEAN NIGHT
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INT SAFE HAVEN MOTORBOAT DAY
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INT OPEN WATER DAY
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INT SAFE HAVEN MOTORBOAT LATER
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INT BAR EVENING
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INT BAR LATER
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EXT RESORT NIGHT
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EXT RESORT ROOM DAY
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INT RESEARCH VESSEL - STERN DAY
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INT RESEARCH VESSEL - BOW DAY
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INT RESEARCH VESSEL - STERN CONTINUOUS
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INT OPEN WATER CONTINUOUS
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EXT SHIPWRECK ENTRANCE DAY
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INT SHIPWRECK MAIN CARGO HOLD CONTINUOUS
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INT SHIPWRECK CREW QUARTERS CONTINUOUS
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INT SHIPWRECK DECK CONTINUOUS
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INT SHIPWRECK DECK CONTINUOUS
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The water around her takes on a GLACIAL TINT.
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INT SHIPWRECK – CORRIDOR – CONTINUOUS
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INT SHIPWRECK ENTRANCE CONTINUOUS
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INT OPEN WATER CONTINUOUS
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EXT RESORT ROOM DAY
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INT OPEN WATER DAY
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INT OPEN WATER CONTINUOUS
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INT SUBMERSIBLE CONTINUOUS
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EXT /INT. SUBMERSIBLE CONTINUOUS
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INT SUBMERSIBLE CONTINUOUS
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INT SUBMERSIBLE CONTINUOUS
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INT OPEN WATER CONTINUOUS
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INT SUBMERSIBLE CONTINUOUS
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INT OPEN WATER CONTINUOUS
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EXT SHIPWRECK ENTRANCE – CONTINUOUS
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INT BAR DAY
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INT SHIPWRECK ENTRANCE DAY
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INT SHIPWRECK CREW'S QUARTERS DAY
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INT SHIPWRECK – CAPTAIN'S CABIN – DAY
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EXT DOCK DAY
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INT /EXT. SHIPWRECK ENTRANCE DAY
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INT KELP FOREST CONTINUOUS
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INT OPEN WATER DAY
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INT SAFE HAVEN MOTORBOAT DAY
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INT SHIPWRECK DAY
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INT ISLA'S CHILDHOOD BEDROOM – EARLY MORNING
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INT SHIPWRECK ENTRANCE DAY
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INT SAFE HAVEN MOTORBOAT DAY
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INT SHIPWRECK DECK – DAY
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INT OPEN WATER DAY
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EXT OCEAN DAY
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INT SAFE HAVEN MOTORBOAT CONTINUOUS
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INT RESEARCH VESSEL - STERN CONTINUOUS
51 91
INT RESEARCH VESSEL DAY
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INT LAKE – DAY
Scene Map
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# PG SLUGLINE
1 2
EXT OCEAN NIGHT
EXT. OCEAN - NIGHT
EXT. OCEAN - NIGHT Moonlight washes a LUXURIOUS YACHT. MUSIC and DRUNKEN LAUGHTER spill from below deck. A PONYTAILED MAN stumbles out, BEER CAN in hand. He staggers to the railing. Fumbles with his zipper. A bad
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INT SAFE HAVEN MOTORBOAT DAY
INT. SAFE HAVEN MOTORBOAT - DAY
INT. SAFE HAVEN MOTORBOAT - DAY THROUGH A STREAKED DIVING MASK-- Sunlight fractures across the glass. Blue sky warps and wavers beyond it. ISLA FALK (24, doesn't take no for an answer, scar on her
3 5
INT OPEN WATER DAY
INT. OPEN WATER - DAY
INT. OPEN WATER - DAY Markus and Isla descend through a shimmering beam of sunlight, HANDS LINKED. A school of silverfish swirls ahead. Markus SQUEEZES Isla's hand ONCE, a signal between them.
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INT SAFE HAVEN MOTORBOAT LATER
INT. SAFE HAVEN MOTORBOAT - LATER
INT. SAFE HAVEN MOTORBOAT - LATER Isla reclines against the bench, sunglasses on, face turned to the sun. SPLASHING nearby-- The dog paddles in circles around the boat.
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INT BAR EVENING
INT. BAR - EVENING
INT. BAR - EVENING The faint hum of insects drifts over an island at sunset, the sky a canvas of orange and pink. Palm fronds sway. Their shadows dance across the sand. In the distance, hills roll, speckled with painted houses and
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INT BAR LATER
INT. BAR - LATER
INT. BAR - LATER Isla and Wouter in conversation, easy. Empty beer cans litter their table. The dog sleeps at their feet. ISLA
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EXT RESORT NIGHT
EXT. RESORT - NIGHT
EXT. RESORT - NIGHT They stroll. No rush. WOUTER I like mapping places nobody's seen before.
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EXT RESORT ROOM DAY
EXT. RESORT ROOM - DAY
EXT. RESORT ROOM - DAY Early morning light. Quiet. Isla slips out of her room, dog's harness in one hand, phone in the other. She speaks into the phone as they move down the walkway.
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INT RESEARCH VESSEL - STERN DAY
INT. RESEARCH VESSEL - STERN - DAY
INT. RESEARCH VESSEL - STERN - DAY Wouter adjusts a SEISMIC AIR GUN mounted along the rail-- sleek, metallic, cannon-like. Cables snake to a CONSOLE with dial, buttons, a monitor. He checks a tank marked COMPRESSED AIR. Turns the dial to
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INT RESEARCH VESSEL - BOW DAY
INT. RESEARCH VESSEL - BOW - DAY
INT. RESEARCH VESSEL - BOW - DAY A bright yellow, teardrop-shaped SUBMERSIBLE is strapped to the deck--nine feet long, compact, sturdy. Its name painted on the hull reads Le Citron Plongeur. A butt wiggles out of the cockpit, cheerfully unaware.
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INT RESEARCH VESSEL - STERN CONTINUOUS
INT. RESEARCH VESSEL - STERN - CONTINUOUS
INT. RESEARCH VESSEL - STERN - CONTINUOUS All dialogue in italics is in French. Wouter and Isla suit up. The dog sits close, watchful. Behind them, Caro and Fred prep the sub. Isla lifts her face to the sky.
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INT OPEN WATER CONTINUOUS
INT. OPEN WATER - CONTINUOUS
INT. OPEN WATER - CONTINUOUS POV ISLA Darkness--not total, but thick. Scattered flecks of pale light drift like distant sparks. A massive, indistinct SHADOW looms ahead, close.
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EXT SHIPWRECK ENTRANCE DAY
EXT. SHIPWRECK ENTRANCE - DAY
EXT. SHIPWRECK ENTRANCE - DAY They reach the ship's entrance. The doorway has been torn wide--wood splintered, iron twisted. Like a warped, gaping maw. Faint lettering above it reads Ocean's Fang.
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INT SHIPWRECK MAIN CARGO HOLD CONTINUOUS
INT. SHIPWRECK MAIN CARGO HOLD - CONTINUOUS
INT. SHIPWRECK MAIN CARGO HOLD - CONTINUOUS A vast chamber opens before them. Shadow-heavy. Torn nets on rusted hooks drift like shrouds. WOUTER Some say it was dragged down by--
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INT SHIPWRECK CREW QUARTERS CONTINUOUS
INT. SHIPWRECK CREW QUARTERS - CONTINUOUS
INT. SHIPWRECK CREW QUARTERS - CONTINUOUS Narrow compartments. Hammocks hang in tatters from rusted hooks. Their lights sweep over scattered relics--a tarnished belt buckle, a cracked lantern half-swallowed by silt.
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INT SHIPWRECK DECK CONTINUOUS
INT. SHIPWRECK DECK - CONTINUOUS
INT. SHIPWRECK DECK - CONTINUOUS They drift toward the HARPOON LAUNCHER--hulking, corroded, stubbornly intact. A relic that refuses to die. WOUTER That harpoon was the ship's beating
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INT SHIPWRECK DECK CONTINUOUS
INT. SHIPWRECK DECK - CONTINUOUS
INT. SHIPWRECK DECK - CONTINUOUS Wouter beams at Isla. WOUTER So? Worth the trip, right? Suddenly, a SHADOW passes behind him, sending a faint TREMOR
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The water around her takes on a GLACIAL TINT.
The water around her takes on a GLACIAL TINT.
The water around her takes on a GLACIAL TINT. ISLA (CONT'D) It got colder. WOUTER Uh? Our models showed warmer
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INT SHIPWRECK – CORRIDOR – CONTINUOUS
INT. SHIPWRECK – CORRIDOR – CONTINUOUS
INT. SHIPWRECK – CORRIDOR – CONTINUOUS They kick hard through narrow passages. Isla's heart leaps into her throat--BABUMBABUMBABUM! ISLA What is it?
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INT SHIPWRECK ENTRANCE CONTINUOUS
INT. SHIPWRECK ENTRANCE - CONTINUOUS
INT. SHIPWRECK ENTRANCE - CONTINUOUS They hover at the torn doorway. Wouter leans out, careful. Scans the water, nervous. Still. Too still.
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INT OPEN WATER CONTINUOUS
INT. OPEN WATER - CONTINUOUS
INT. OPEN WATER - CONTINUOUS They kick hard toward the sunlit water above. It's calm and serene...until-- A BODY drifts into view-- PONYTAILED MAN.
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EXT RESORT ROOM DAY
EXT. RESORT ROOM - DAY
EXT. RESORT ROOM - DAY A fist KNOCKS on a door. MARKUS Rise and shine, sleepyhead. Markus stands outside Isla's door. Backpack slung. Yawning.
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INT OPEN WATER DAY
INT. OPEN WATER - DAY
INT. OPEN WATER - DAY Isla floats in red haze, anchored in place by shock and fear. WOMAN'S COMPUTERIZED VOICE Oxygen level: fifty percent. The words cut through the fog.
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INT OPEN WATER CONTINUOUS
INT. OPEN WATER - CONTINUOUS
INT. OPEN WATER - CONTINUOUS Isla floats in the cone of light. The water around her is deathly still. ISLA Caro? Fred?
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INT SUBMERSIBLE CONTINUOUS
INT. SUBMERSIBLE - CONTINUOUS
INT. SUBMERSIBLE - CONTINUOUS Caro shoots a look at Fred. He averts his eyes. Clears his throat. FRED Probably a glitch in the AI
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EXT /INT. SUBMERSIBLE CONTINUOUS
EXT./INT. SUBMERSIBLE - CONTINUOUS
EXT./INT. SUBMERSIBLE - CONTINUOUS Caro and Fred are slammed against their harnesses. FRED We know! CRACK.
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INT SUBMERSIBLE CONTINUOUS
INT. SUBMERSIBLE - CONTINUOUS
INT. SUBMERSIBLE - CONTINUOUS Caro sweeps the spotlight across the black. Searching. Fred's knee bounces uncontrollably. A ball of nerves. Nothing in sight. Caro swings the beam back on Isla drifting closer to the
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INT SUBMERSIBLE CONTINUOUS
INT. SUBMERSIBLE - CONTINUOUS
INT. SUBMERSIBLE - CONTINUOUS Fred's brow knits as he considers the question. FRED Well...sharks can detect vibration. Caro shoots him a look--"not helping."
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INT OPEN WATER CONTINUOUS
INT. OPEN WATER - CONTINUOUS
INT. OPEN WATER - CONTINUOUS Isla swims. Suddenly, a violent surge of displaced water hits her and knocks her sideways. ISLA
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INT SUBMERSIBLE CONTINUOUS
INT. SUBMERSIBLE - CONTINUOUS
INT. SUBMERSIBLE - CONTINUOUS Caro peers through a narrow clear patch in the cracked glass. CARO I can't see her anymore. The octopus peels off the window...
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INT OPEN WATER CONTINUOUS
INT. OPEN WATER - CONTINUOUS
INT. OPEN WATER - CONTINUOUS The sub ascends, when-- The shark surges from the blue. WHAM. It SLAMS the cockpit window. Snout pinned to the glass.
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EXT SHIPWRECK ENTRANCE – CONTINUOUS
EXT. SHIPWRECK ENTRANCE – CONTINUOUS
EXT. SHIPWRECK ENTRANCE – CONTINUOUS Isla turns toward the rising chaos. IN THE CURVED REFLECTION OF HER MASK-- The sub SMASHES into the seabed. A blinding FLASH.
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INT BAR DAY
INT. BAR - DAY
INT. BAR - DAY Empty. Just Famke wiping down the counter, tired. The door slams open. Markus bursts in--tense, wired, barely holding it together. Famke doesn't look up. Used to such outburst.
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INT SHIPWRECK ENTRANCE DAY
INT. SHIPWRECK ENTRANCE - DAY
INT. SHIPWRECK ENTRANCE - DAY Isla hangs in the water, still, her face pale. Blood drifts faintly from her shoulder. The only sound is her breathing, mechanical-- In.
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INT SHIPWRECK CREW'S QUARTERS DAY
INT. SHIPWRECK CREW'S QUARTERS - DAY
INT. SHIPWRECK CREW'S QUARTERS - DAY Isla moves through the cramped space--one hand on the wall, the other searching. Her fingers snag on a hook bolted into a beam. A KNIFE dangles there.
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INT SHIPWRECK – CAPTAIN'S CABIN – DAY
INT. SHIPWRECK – CAPTAIN'S CABIN – DAY
INT. SHIPWRECK – CAPTAIN'S CABIN – DAY Isla ducks under the tilted desk, sifting through the silt. ISLA The Captain's gotta have something...
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EXT DOCK DAY
EXT. DOCK - DAY
EXT. DOCK - DAY WIND HOWLS. Rain slashes sideways. Palm trees bend sideways, fronds ripping loose into the air. Markus runs. Fast.
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INT /EXT. SHIPWRECK ENTRANCE DAY
INT./EXT. SHIPWRECK ENTRANCE - DAY
INT./EXT. SHIPWRECK ENTRANCE - DAY Isla hovers at the torn mouth of the wreck. She slams her fist against the hull-- BANG. She waits.
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INT KELP FOREST CONTINUOUS
INT. KELP FOREST - CONTINUOUS
INT. KELP FOREST - CONTINUOUS Isla crouches low beneath the swaying kelp canopy, fingers wrapped tight around slick strands. She holds her breath like a secret. The shark glides overhead. Bumps kelp strands.
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INT OPEN WATER DAY
INT. OPEN WATER - DAY
INT. OPEN WATER - DAY Isla hovers in the open blue. Turns slowly. ISLA Entrance...? She swims left. Counts her strokes. Slows. Floats, uncertain.
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INT SAFE HAVEN MOTORBOAT DAY
INT. SAFE HAVEN MOTORBOAT - DAY
INT. SAFE HAVEN MOTORBOAT - DAY POV MARKUS The horizon, grainy through sheets of rain. Visibility near zero. END POV MARKUS
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INT SHIPWRECK DAY
INT. SHIPWRECK - DAY
INT. SHIPWRECK - DAY POV ISLA TWO BLURRED HUMAN FIGURES drift in the haze. Isla gasps--other divers? END POV ISLA
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INT ISLA'S CHILDHOOD BEDROOM – EARLY MORNING
INT. ISLA'S CHILDHOOD BEDROOM – EARLY MORNING
INT. ISLA'S CHILDHOOD BEDROOM – EARLY MORNING 7:29 AM glows on a DIGITAL ALARM CLOCK on a nightstand. It turns to 7:30 AM-- BEEP. BEEP. BEEP. EIGHT YEARS OLD ISLA lies in bed, under blankets, eyes shut.
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INT SHIPWRECK ENTRANCE DAY
INT. SHIPWRECK ENTRANCE - DAY
INT. SHIPWRECK ENTRANCE - DAY BEEP. BEEP. BEEP. WOMAN'S COMPUTERIZED VOICE Oxygen level: seven percent. Isla jerks awake. Her chest convulses.
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INT SAFE HAVEN MOTORBOAT DAY
INT. SAFE HAVEN MOTORBOAT - DAY
INT. SAFE HAVEN MOTORBOAT - DAY The hull ROCKS beneath the assault of wind and swell. Markus wipes rain from his eyes with the back of his hand. Squints into the gray chaos. MARKUS
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INT SHIPWRECK DECK – DAY
INT. SHIPWRECK DECK – DAY
INT. SHIPWRECK DECK – DAY Isla's fingertips trace the harpoon launcher. The finger she cut on it earlier grazes steel. FLASH INSERT — HOSPITAL ROOM - DAY A SMALL ANCHOR PENDANT sways from a woman's fingers.
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INT OPEN WATER DAY
INT. OPEN WATER - DAY
INT. OPEN WATER - DAY Isla swims, tension coils in every stroke. Fish flee in her wake. The rope SNAPS TIGHT--she's yanked to a stop. She hover, suspended--
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EXT OCEAN DAY
EXT. OCEAN - DAY
EXT. OCEAN - DAY Black clouds smother the sky. Waves rear up like living things. Rain hammers the ocean into boiling chaos. CRACK.
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INT SAFE HAVEN MOTORBOAT CONTINUOUS
INT. SAFE HAVEN MOTORBOAT - CONTINUOUS
INT. SAFE HAVEN MOTORBOAT - CONTINUOUS Isla's body SLAMS onto the deck. The impact jolts her--her eyes snap open. She gasps, choking, still breathing through the regulator.
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INT RESEARCH VESSEL - STERN CONTINUOUS
INT. RESEARCH VESSEL - STERN - CONTINUOUS
INT. RESEARCH VESSEL - STERN - CONTINUOUS Isla hauls herself over the edge. She just lies there under the rain, shaking, every muscle blown out, hands torn, face streaked with blood. Her chest rises in ragged pulls.
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INT RESEARCH VESSEL DAY
INT. RESEARCH VESSEL - DAY
INT. RESEARCH VESSEL - DAY A clear, endless blue sky. As if the storm never happened. Markus steers the research vessel, eyes on the calm horizon. On the deck, Isla and the dog bathe their bandaged bodies in the sun.
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INT LAKE – DAY
INT. LAKE – DAY
INT. LAKE – DAY SUPER: THREE MONTHS LATER Low clouds hang heavy. Wind skims across steel-grey water. Isla faces the lake in her wetsuit. Peaceful. FOOTSTEPS behind her.

DIVING BLIND

A fiercely independent blind diver, determined to prove she needs no one, finds herself alone in the deep with a prehistoric predator—and discovers that survival requires the very vulnerability she has spent her life refusing.

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Overview

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Unique Selling Point

DIVING BLIND inverts the classic shark-thriller formula by placing a visually impaired protagonist at its center—a character whose disability is not a limitation to be overcome but a fully integrated sensory superpower that reframes every underwater sequence. Where most creature features rely on the audience seeing the monster before the hero does, here the audience shares Isla's tactile, vibrational, acoustic experience of the deep, creating genuine dread through absence of sight rather than presence of it. The script also layers a mother-daughter grief narrative and a father-daughter independence arc onto the survival spine, giving it emotional resonance well beyond the genre baseline. The gulper shark—a real but rarely dramatized deep-sea predator—offers novelty over the overexposed great white, and the Caribbean setting with its multilingual texture adds production value and cultural specificity.

AI Verdict & Suggestions

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GPT5
 Recommend
Grok
 Consider
Gemini
 Consider
DeepSeek
 Consider
Claude
 Recommend
Average Score: 7.5
Note: As Neil Gaiman says, ”People are usually right about what's wrong, and usually wrong about how to fix it.” Consider the suggestions in this analysis as potential catalysts: adopt what strengthens your vision, and let the rest deepen your understanding of what the story wants to become.
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Key Takeaways
For the Writer:
To elevate 'Diving Blind' from a solid script to a standout one, focus on refining the scientific plausibility of the shark's behavior and the technology used, such as grounding the gulper shark's actions in pseudo-science or establishing it as a fictional variant early on to avoid credibility gaps. Additionally, deepen the supporting characters like Wouter, Fred, and Caro by adding personal stakes and relationships, making their losses more emotionally impactful. Tighten pacing in the first act by reducing expository dialogue and consolidating scenes, while preserving the script's strength in sensory-driven POV and emotional motifs to maintain its unique voice and immersive quality.
For Executives:
The script has strong commercial potential with its innovative blind protagonist and sensory thriller elements, offering a fresh angle in the survival horror genre that could attract diverse audiences and actors seeking roles with depth. However, risks include scientific implausibilities and tonal inconsistencies that might alienate critics or savvy viewers, potentially leading to poor word-of-mouth, while underdeveloped supporting characters could weaken emotional engagement and limit broad appeal. Market perception is positive for its representation and high-concept hook, but without revisions, it may struggle in a competitive space dominated by more polished creature features.
Story Facts
Genres:
Drama 40% Action 30% Horror 25% Thriller 35% Romance 15% Comedy 10%

Setting: Contemporary, Various locations including a luxurious yacht, a research vessel, and underwater environments in the ocean

Themes: Resilience and Survival, Independence and Self-Reliance, The Dual Nature of Nature (Beauty and Danger), Loss and Grief, Connection and Belonging, Overcoming Fear, The Power of Memory and Legacy, Environmentalism and Respect for Nature

Conflict & Stakes: Isla's struggle for survival against a predatory shark while dealing with the emotional fallout of losing friends and the need to rescue her father, Markus, amidst a dangerous underwater environment.

Mood: Tense and suspenseful with moments of emotional depth and relief.

Standout Features:

  • Unique Hook: The combination of a blind protagonist navigating underwater dangers, showcasing her unique perspective and resilience.
  • Major Twist: The shocking revelation of Isla's friends' deaths and the emotional impact it has on her character development.
  • Distinctive Setting: The underwater exploration of shipwrecks and the ocean's depths, providing a visually stunning backdrop for the story.
  • Innovative Ideas: The use of underwater communication methods and the exploration of themes related to disability and independence.

Comparable Scripts: Jaws, The Shallows, Open Water, Finding Nemo, The Meg, Life of Pi, The Abyss, Adrift, Into the Wild

💎 Final Polish Stage

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At this level, focused work on Structure (Script Level) and Conflict (Script Level) will have the most impact on the overall rating.

1. Structure (Script Level)
Big Impact Script Level
Your current Structure (Script Level) score: 8.0
Expected gain: ~1% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Moves easily Writers at your level typically gain +0.37 per rewrite — a realistic improvement.
Confidence: High (based on ~745 similar revisions)
  • This is your top opportunity right now. Focusing your rewrite energy here gives you the best realistic shot at raising the overall rating.
  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Structure (Script Level) by about +0.37 in one rewrite.
2. Conflict (Script Level)
Big Impact Script Level
Your current Conflict (Script Level) score: 8.0
Expected gain: ~1% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Moves easily Writers at your level typically gain +0.44 per rewrite — a realistic improvement.
Confidence: High (based on ~564 similar revisions)
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  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Conflict (Script Level) by about +0.44 in one rewrite.
3. Emotional Impact (Script Level)
Big Impact Script Level
Your current Emotional Impact (Script Level) score: 8.0
Expected gain: ~1% closer to an "all Highly Recommends" score
Typical rewrite gain: +0.28 in Emotional Impact (Script Level)
Confidence: High (based on ~1,239 similar revisions)
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  • What writers at your level usually do: Writers at a similar level usually raise Emotional Impact (Script Level) by about +0.28 in one rewrite.
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Skills Worth Developing

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Pacing Scene Level 1.3× leverage

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Script Level Analysis

Writer Exec

This section delivers a top-level assessment of the screenplay’s strengths and weaknesses — covering overall quality (P/C/R/HR), character development, emotional impact, thematic depth, narrative inconsistencies, and the story’s core philosophical conflict. It helps identify what’s resonating, what needs refinement, and how the script aligns with professional standards.

Screenplay Insights

Breaks down your script along various categories.

Overall Score: 7.98
Key Suggestions:
To strengthen the script's creative craft, prioritize deepening the arcs of supporting characters like Wouter and Fred by incorporating backstories and motivations, which will enhance emotional stakes and audience connection. Additionally, refine pacing in the middle act by tightening drawn-out scenes to maintain tension and flow, building on the strong foundation of Isla's compelling journey to create a more immersive and resonant narrative.
Story Critique

Big-picture feedback on the story’s clarity, stakes, cohesion, and engagement.

Key Suggestions:
To improve 'Diving Blind' from a creative and craft perspective, focus on refining the pacing to create a more engaging flow, especially in the middle section, by condensing overly descriptive scenes and building tension more gradually. Enhance dialogue to feel more natural and less expository, allowing characters' emotions and relationships to drive the story organically. Deepen emotional stakes through subtle foreshadowing and richer character backstories, leveraging the script's strong themes of resilience and family bonds to deliver a more immersive and impactful narrative.
Characters

Explores the depth, clarity, and arc of the main and supporting characters.

Key Suggestions:
The character analysis highlights strong foundations for protagonists like Isla and Markus, but reveals opportunities to deepen emotional layers and arcs for supporting characters such as Fred and Caro to avoid flat portrayals. Focus on integrating backstories, vulnerabilities, and relational dynamics to enhance authenticity and thematic resonance, ensuring all characters contribute meaningfully to the exploration of loss, resilience, and independence, which could elevate the script's emotional impact and pacing.
Emotional Analysis

Breaks down the emotional journey of the audience across the script.

Key Suggestions:
The script's emotional core is strong in building empathy for Isla, but it suffers from a lack of variety and sustained high-intensity fear in the latter half, leading to potential audience fatigue. To enhance the story's craft, focus on introducing emotional contrasts, deeper character development, and better pacing with recovery moments to create a more nuanced and engaging narrative that balances terror with moments of hope, humor, and introspection, ultimately making the survival elements more impactful and the characters' journeys more relatable.
Goals and Philosophical Conflict

Evaluates character motivations, obstacles, and sources of tension throughout the plot.

Key Suggestions:
The analysis highlights a strong character arc for Isla, driven by evolving internal and external goals, but to elevate the script's craft, focus on deepening the portrayal of her philosophical conflicts—such as independence versus protection—through more nuanced, subtle interactions and flashbacks. This would enhance emotional authenticity and pacing, ensuring that resolutions feel earned and not rushed, particularly given the high resolution percentages, to create a more immersive and resonant narrative for audiences.
Themes

Analysis of the themes of the screenplay and how well they’re expressed.

Key Suggestions:
The script's strength lies in its compelling portrayal of resilience and survival, but to elevate the craft, focus on deepening the emotional layers of Isla's independence and grief to avoid clichéd action sequences. Enhancing the dual nature of nature theme through more vivid sensory descriptions could immerse viewers further, while ensuring that moments of connection and loss are balanced to strengthen character arcs and thematic depth, making the story more relatable and impactful.
Logic & Inconsistencies

Highlights any contradictions, plot holes, or logic gaps that may confuse viewers.

Key Suggestions:
From a creative perspective, the script's inconsistencies highlight opportunities to strengthen character authenticity and logical flow, such as ensuring skills and actions are earned through prior development rather than plot convenience. Addressing redundancies in elements like storm warnings and shark attacks can tighten pacing and heighten tension, while resolving plot holes will enhance immersion and make the story more compelling and believable overall.

Scene Analysis

All of your scenes analyzed individually and compared, so you can zero in on what to improve.

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Writer Exec

This section looks at the extra spark — your story’s voice, style, world, and the moments that really stick. These insights might not change the bones of the script, but they can make it more original, more immersive, and way more memorable. It’s where things get fun, weird, and wonderfully you.

Unique Voice

Assesses the distinctiveness and personality of the writer's voice.

Key Suggestions:
The writer's voice is a strong asset, effectively building suspense and emotional depth through vivid sensory details and naturalistic dialogue, as seen in the best scene. To enhance the script, focus on ensuring this tension and character intimacy are consistently applied across all scenes to avoid pacing issues, and consider amplifying the thematic elements of resilience and human connection to deepen audience investment and make the story more universally relatable.
Writer's Craft

Analyzes the writing to help the writer be aware of their skill and improve.

Key Suggestions:
The screenplay effectively builds tension and emotional depth through vivid imagery and dialogue, but to enhance its craft, focus on refining dialogue for more nuanced subtext, tightening pacing to better balance action and introspection, and deepening character backstories to strengthen emotional connections. By addressing these areas, the writer can create a more engaging and resonant narrative that captivates audiences on a deeper level.
Memorable Lines
Spotlights standout dialogue lines with emotional or thematic power.
Tropes
Highlights common or genre-specific tropes found in the script.
World Building

Evaluates the depth, consistency, and immersion of the story's world.

Key Suggestions:
The script's world building effectively creates a immersive oceanic environment that drives tension and character growth, but to enhance it creatively, focus on integrating more sensory details, especially for Isla's blindness, to make underwater scenes more vivid and emotionally engaging. This could involve expanding on how the physical and cultural elements influence character decisions, ensuring that the world's dangers and beauty serve to deepen themes of resilience and adaptation, ultimately making the narrative more compelling and original.
Correlations

Identifies patterns in scene scores.

Key Suggestions:
The script demonstrates strong tension and emotional depth, particularly in high-stakes scenes, but could benefit from deeper character arcs to make transformations more dynamic and resonant. Additionally, incorporating subtle conflicts into calmer moments and refining dialogue in urgent situations would enhance pacing, reduce predictability, and create a more balanced narrative flow, allowing for greater emotional surprise and audience engagement.
Loglines
Presents logline variations based on theme, genre, and hook.